1F Journal Entries
Dearest 1F,
As explained earlier, please include a word count and declaration in all your journal entries. Thank you.
Amongst you, are those who have lost beween 1 to 20 CA1 Marks for the following offences:
- Refusal to follow instructions to include word count, declaration, and to perform spell and grammar check BEFORE posting)
- Refusal to submit your writing despite numerous calls to your parents, personal reminders and warnings in January, February and March
- Submitting work that is horrendously late and with little effort shown
Those who still refused to submit your work or did so after 4 March, 18:00H have received a zero for this CA1 component.
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Journal entry - 1
Early in the morning today, when I was in the bus, I saw this blind old lady standing. I pitied her, so I give up my sit to her. I hold her arm and slowly bring her to the sit .
I was extremely angry with other passengers who just filled up their space with their bags.” That is very consider of you.” I was praised by this gorgeous chinese lady. She speaks her English very well. I was so happy through out the day. I just hope that in future others would be more respectful and considerate. I believed that if I did something good, I would be paid back.
Nur Dina Dianah (09)
1F
WORD COUNT :89
I have checked my work four times,firstly, grammar.secondly,vocabulary,thirdly,content and lastly spelling.
Journal entry-1.0
One early morning just before recess about 9.45a.m. it was our physical education (P.E)lesson. We were all playing floorball and we were having so much fun but we were also very tried.
Then suddenly (out of the blue) a sec 2 boy run down the staircase with only his under-pans on,every body in my class laugh at him and about 3 teacher was trying to catch him it was a hilarlous and carzy thing to do,I think he have a physical disability,i feel bad for that guy when he is bust*/caught.
jimson low(23) 1F
word count:91 I have check my work 3 time for grammar,vocabulary,content and spelling..
Hi, Mr Lau.
I'm TEY LEE ER(20)
CLASS: 1F
I have a secret. But I did not say it out for years. It wad my primary school from teacher, she teaches us English and maths. She had a bomb hair. She always has a flower shirt with her wherever she goes. She dig her nose while she was teaching and its in front of the whole class! she always says broken English when we while having English lesson. When we gave her a math question , e.g , 24 X 24, she said the answer is 48.
Then I ask her , "Are you sure with the answer?"
She said "Yes."
But the actual answer is 576. I'm wondering how can she be a teacher. If a teacher is like that , I don't want to be a teacher!
During lessons, her phone rings often. When her phone rings, she would say she give us break and she was chatting on phone. She says vulgarizes in front of the class. The worst is she even dig her butt.
WORD COUNT: 158
I was so captivated by him.Every move that he made.Every word he said, I've watched,I've heard. A boy named Jarred with beautiful blue eyes,pure white skin,gorgeous brown hair came in to our class.
As the teacher introduced him to our class, all the girls sighed as they looked at him in a dreamy way.I,on the other hand,was speechless.
When the teacher wanted to sort out his seat, I guess I was lucky. He was seated next to me! As he walked down to his seat, the girls could not take their eyes of him. As he sat down,
"Hi." I said,trying to start a conversation. "Hi." He answered. "Oh so you are from America?" I asked. "Not really, I'm from London." He answered, smiling. "Oh..." I whispered turning away, blushing.
When class was over,
all the girls crowded around him hurridly. Some were asking for his number, while some were flirting. I, was packing my stuff. All the other boys were so jealous.I wanted to find out more about him but the crowd around him pushed me away.
Surprisingly, Jarred made his way out from the crowd and the teacher told the girls to pack their stuff.
As I was about to leave,
"Hey! Are you leaving?" He asked me. "Well ya. Kind of. Class is over." I answered. "Oh ok. I thought we could go get some food or something." He asked me.
I paused for a moment.
"Oh...ok! Sure why not? I have plenty of time." I answered, hurriedly."Oh.Ok then.But I don't know you.Can you tell me what's your name?" He asked with a sweet smile on his face.
"I will tell you.Soon."I answered.
"Soon.Wow what a wierd name." He answered,making a joke. "Haha! My name's Nisa."I answered.
"Ok Nisa. Shall we get going?" He said stepping backwards, leaving me a way to leave. "Sure." I said, blushing.
We both left the classroom.While I had a huge smile on my face.
I have checked my work four times,firstly for grammar,secondly for volcabulary,thirdly for content and lastly for spelling.
Hi Mr Lau ,
I am Guo Si Min (6)
1-F
Today,I saw my form teacher,she walked in the class with her pants unzip.WE can see until her poka dots underpants.We laught louldly , until she tried to stop us.
During her lesson,she make-up like a clown to disrrcict us from the test we are doing.She also dig her nose infornt of us even though she did not even care if we see it a not.
I have checked my work four times,
Firstly for content
Secondly for vocabulary
thirdly for grammar
and lastly for spelling.
word count (65word)
Cloris Oh(03) 1F
Journal enrty- 1.0
Today, a boy came in my classroom. His hair was coloured green, his hairstyle look like a chicken. When he came in the classroom, he unzips his pants and began to dance like a disco king. He dug his nose in front of the whole class and blabbed some words out of his mouth. Then he sneezed out was green slime. When he sits down the chair, the sound “CRACK” came from his area. I turned to look at him, he has already fallen onto the ground. We laugh at him, because he was overweight and when he fall out of the chair, he farted.
WORD COUNT: 105 words.
I have checked my work four times, firstly for grammar, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for content and lastly for spelling.
Hi,Mr Lau this is Seah Si Jia (17) from 1F.
It was a new year,our class had changed a new form teacher.I was very excited to see how the teacher looks like.
By the time he stepped into the classroom,I was shocked,he dressed up like Elvis,walked like Elvis and even talked like Elvis.We all laughed at him everytime when he does every of his action.
He was not handsome or cool but we liked him very much.Unfortunately,3 days ago,he told us that he has to left us and go to another school.We were so sad.Some of us even cried and beg him not to go.We don't mind him ugly,we wanted him to be our form teacher.
I am still recalling the good times he gave us.(129 words)
Sorry for i made it up the story
Dear Chor Yew,
Please specify what you are sorry for.
What did you do?
Who are you apologising to?
Entry 1
Yesterday , I went to East Point Mall with my mother and sisters . My oldest sister want to buy something there and the rest of us just walk around there . Then suddenly , I heard a man talking by himself , then I turned to his direction , he just went out of the boys toilet , I think his drunk .When he was walking to my direction ,he did not zip his pants and I can see his underwear , it was PINK in colour . I told my sisters and mother , they laughed after the man walked off if not we scared the man suspect something .It was so hilarious !
I have checked my work four times, firstly for grammar, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for content and lastly for spelling.
[116 words]
On a Friday, my math teacher was absent so there was a relief teacher .The whole class thought that the relief teacher will be silly and we could make it uneasy for the teacher. When the teacher came in, the whole class saw that the relief teacher looked smart and pulchritudinous.
When the teacher told the class to stand, the girl admired the teacher and their expression on their faces was like their saw their price charming. The girls still sat down on their chair while the boys was standing. When the girls stood up to greet the teacher, we heard his voice as it sounded like a half girl half boy. The girls expression change and we started to laugh.
When he was walking around, I notice that the teacher was wearing his pants the other way. I told my friend and they started to laugh. Just then I saw that his zipper was not zip we started laughing when we saw his girlish underwear. The whole class was distracted as we saw his underwear the whole lesson. The teacher walked up to me and questioned me why are you laughing. We told him and the teacher was embarrassed as his face was as pale as a white sheet of blank paper.
The end
Word count (213)
sorry for what had I done I should not do that iwill not do that again
Hello my Name Is Muhammed Suleiman
On 5th December 2008,I was sitting quietly on the bus stop waiting for the bus arrival..
When I was there quietly,there was an old woman approached me,"Which bus is going to Tampines?",she asked.
I then told her the bus which is going to Tampines.She was glad that I told her.So she waited for the bus to arrive.
Suddenly,there was a group of gangsters.I was scared of one of them because when I was still primary five, I bullied his sister.
So now he wanted revenge on me.So I hid behind a big pole.
Suddenly,one of them spotted me.I was terribly scared.Then the boy who wants revenge on me pushed me and try to punch me in the head but I block.Then the old woman saw what is happening so she quickly shouted at the boy,"Leave him alone! Or I will call the police".
The boy quickly got off.After that day,I felt happy because the old woman told me when I saw him again I should call the police immediately.
(177 words)
Rozalia Rosli(16)1F
Journal Entry 1
On a Friday morning, I went to school by taking a bus when I saw a classmate of mine whose name was ‘Rashid’. The are not many people in the bus. He was looking gloomed while sitting. I was interested know why he was being different that day, so I decided to talked to him.
He told me that he was ashamed as people at the bus stop were laughing aloud at him. Rashid actually had forgotten to zip his pants. “Ha ha ha!” I laughed. “Alwi!, How could laugh at me, ”he said in a anger tone. I ignored what he had just said and continue laughing.(108 words)
Kelvin Lee(24)1F
Journal Entry 1
Last week,When class started.A new teacher came to class and introduced himself and we too introduced ourselves.
After all that introducing,he started to teach the class and many pupils didn't listen to the teacher and talked loudly,saying vulgarities"Bang!"the new teacher banged the table and warned him to stop talking.
He just kept talking and as the teacher got angrier,the student pushed the table and bad words came out of his mouth.Suddenly,the teacher slapped him in the face infront of everyone and scolded him,after that the student repent his mistakes by washing the toilets,sweeping the floors,the teacher forgived him and told him not to do it again,the student smiled happily and said yes.
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Last Monday , When im in the class I saw a boy took out a pen knife ..
He started doing something . I couln't see what he was doing but he looks very suspicious .
Then a few minutes later he left the classroom a went to the back to see what he done . I was so shocked to see that he has torn my classmates bag .. I didn't know what to do I hurriedly went to find a teacher .. I told to the teacher what did the boy did and did I recognise his face .. I was blur at that moment then I told the teacher it was an upper sec chinese boy ..
one night,while i was walking back home from tution,i saw a man throwing a cute fluffy cat from a two storey of block 87.I as angry as if a vocalno is going to erupt.i shouted some vulgar words at him,and then i called police.when the police came,i explained what the ruthless man did to the cat,but he denied."do you have proof to accused me?police,how can you just arrested me for nothing?"i did not say any words.
But in the end,a lady passed by,she show her video to the police,because she just now videoed the man who threw the cat.The police buy her story.they arrested the man to the police for investigation.i was exhilarated.i thank the lady who help me.
In the end,the cat was sent to the vet.Hope it will not die.
this is by tan jian wu,BNSS,sec 1f(132 words)
Well actually this is a true story happened to me.About last 2 to 3 days ago but i will not tell who did this.
Well on the day itself,after the flag raising ceremony was over,me and my together with my class start our way walking up the stair to our class,there was a boy but i will not tell his name.He is a bit crazy but i will not called him crazy because knows very well about computer.He knows how to learn from his mistake sometimes.I normally take care of him.Well after we reach the third floor which is our class floor,The boy didn't tell me that he is actually going to the toilet.So he just ran to the toilet.I look to my left and saw that he was going straight to the toilet door.I ran to him and accompanied him.After he finished with his ***,we went out and I saw 2 guys from 1h.1 of the boy name H**** start confronting Chor yew.H**** then start pushing chor yew.i then try to stop H**** by pushing H**** slightly.By that time i knew that he was a so call *Gangster* but i told myself don't be scared.He is just a piece of cake.I then told chor yew that lets start going to our class.Then suddenly H**** then confront me and punch me but he miss.I work fast with my reaction by walking away fast.just next to the toilet itself is class 1G i guess.H**** then ran towards me and jump and then kick my bag.i flew a bit.Then he sais *Want to fight??Come fight with me don't be a baby*(In malay)*Kau nak fight??Lincah fight ngan aku jangan jadi kedi*.Me and chor yew walk very fast and at last we get in to our classes.At class I didn't say what had happened just now.I just kept quiet.
Once again this is a true story happened to me about 3 days ago which is on the 13.
Written by:Muhd Syafiq Bin Adnan
Class:Sec 1F
Word count:324
Cher Chen Wei 1F (2)
Journal Entry 1
Alvin looked along the row of faces in the darkened cinema.His mother and sinchita were sitting next to Sergeant Soo.
Mars was snuggled against Rafe.Azizul had brought Farisha,his girlfriend whose flashing eyes never left him,even when he offeredher popcorn.
Mr Mun and stella sat together,their eyes glued to the screen.Mr Mun had been so grateful that he did given Soh & Co a big reward for helping him.And he did saved stella from going to jail by paying a special bond and giving her a job as his assistant.
Wei Ling rested her head on Alvin's shoulders.
"Isn't this nice?"she whispered.
THE EHD
Rafizah(14)1F
I have checked my work four times:
grammer,spelling,content and vocabulary.
I still remember the time when my first day of primary school. My mother send as it is my first day. I don’t know everything and I don’t know where’s the part of the school.
When recess time I have a buddy, she is very friendly and nice. When recess time she always told me what I want to eat or drink. At class my form teacher was very friendly. She lives at Bedok South .And all my friend were nice. But so sad my form teacher teaches us for a year. We spent so much together. At that time I learn Math, English. And I love going to school. If fasting month we get to go home early at six than six-thirty.
When my form teacher last day she bring her cat into class. Her cat was so cute. She even give us something.
Then in primary two our new form teacher came.(154 words)
i had forgotten to write something,now i will write it.....
i have checked my work 4 times before posting it,first,grammar,second,for content,third for spelling,lastly for vocabulary.......
version 1.1 of entry 1
On Friday, my math teacher was absent so there was a relief teacher .The whole class thought that the relief teacher will be silly and we could make it uneasy for the teacher. When the teacher came in, the whole class saw that the relief teacher looked smart and pulchritudinous.
When the teacher told the class to stand, the girl admired the teacher and their expression on their faces was like their saw their price charming. The girls still sat down on their chair while the boys was standing. When the girls stood up to greet the teacher, we heard his voice as it sounded like a half girl half boy. The girls expression change and we started to laugh.
When he was walking around, I notice that the teacher was wearing his pants the other way. I told my friend and they started to laugh. Just then I saw that his zipper was not zip we started laughing when we saw his girlish underwear. The whole class was distracted as we saw his underwear the whole lesson. The teacher walked up to me and questioned me why are you laughing. We told him and the teacher was embarrassed as his face was as pale as a white sheet of blank paper.
The end
Word count (212)
i have checked my work 4 times before posting it,first,grammar,second,for content,third for spelling,lastly for vocabulary.......
GUO SI MIN (06) 1F
I have redone the journal writing.
Version 1.0
Today, I saw my form teacher, she walked in the class with her pants unzip. We can see until her polka dots underpants. We laugh loudly, until she tried to stop us.
During her lesson, her make-up like a clown to distract us from the test we are doing. She also digs her nose in front of us even though she did not even care if we see it a not. She writes a lot of words and misspelled it all. She plays her hair and cut it like a barber will do. The new hair cut was something like a disco fever hairstyle. She poked a hole with a pencil on the water bottle she was carrying and drink it. The most disgusting thing was that she digs her nose in front of the whole class. I hope she could change her attitude.
WORD COUNT : 137 words
I have checked four times:
- Firstly for content
- Secondly for vocabulary
- Thirdly for grammar
- And lastly for spelling.
Entry 1-
The first day when i stepped into Bedok North Secondary School,i was feeling nervous because it's a new enviroment and my first time experiancing secondary school life. Although I was scolded by one of the teachers for not being properly attired, i actually didn't feel anything because I was jus too excited to see my new friends and teachers. Not only am I going to learn something new but I also adjusted myself well on the first day like getting to know my classmates more in detailed. Ihope that life will be as fun as anything that I could imagined.
2nd Entry-
It's been a month since, I been schooling in Bedok North Secondary School and and everything seem to happen smoothly in a fun, exciting and enjoyable manner. I ahve already known my classmates very well. Althoush I have to cope with nine subjects,but I have to keep trying in order to pass all my examination with flying colours. But the most thing that I admire in Bedok North is it's foods. It's variety of food that is delicious and tasty made me boost up for lesson after recess. I hope that the school will continue to provide more variety of delicious food.
journal 1.0 Last week i had a terrible accident,when I was playing soccer my friend strike the ball directly to my hand suddently my hand was jammed for a moment.I felt shocked and frittenned,luckily it was nothing bad, it was just a sprain. After the accident,my friend fetch me home.The moment i stepped into my house I ran to my mother's bedroom and told her what had happenned. After my mother had heard everything,my mother said that it would recovered by it self.My mother gave me some oil to recovered it.On the next three days my hand felt a lot better. Muhd.khidir 1F reg no:32
Grammer Entry 1
‘Kring!’ The school bell rang. It time for Math. I cannot wait for Math because I liked the Math teacher. Suddenly, a relief teacher went in the classroom with smart, tidy shirt. I felt shocked when the relief teacher went in to teach us Math. The teacher did not inform us that the relief teacher was teaching us Math. Even though I felt shocked, we still stand to greet him as a teacher. His name was Adam. He started to teach us about Math.
After a few minutes, his teaching was very enjoyable and fun. He wanted us to do a short test. I really hate test because I did not even liked it. The test has started. While we doing the test, I saw Mr. Adam digging his nose until he took up his mucus and wipe to his shirt. It was very disgusting teacher that I never had before. After lesson, I would told all my classmates what had happened just now.
After the test ended Mr. Adam hand up the test paper. While he hand up the paper, I saw his hand covered with mucus and felt really uneasy. When Mr Adam left the class, I told all my classmates what had happened to him just now. I would not forget about that.
216 Words
I HAVE CHECHED MY WORK 4 TIMES:
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SECONDLY VOCABULARY
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FOURTHLY SPELLING
Iskandar Shah (26)
I can't wait for the next lesson because it's the math lesson.I love the maths lesson.However,the maths teacher did not come in even though it was nearly 12.05pm as our lesson start at 12 and ends at 1pm.It is unlikely for him to come in late as he don't like people to be late.
At that moment, another teacher come in and said that Mr Lim was on a sick leave.Everybody in the was so upset.The teacher said we could to anything we want so we started playing but as we were playing, the relief teacher was digging his nose.
I quickly told my friends about it and they all turned their head to teacher and they realised that he never zipped his pants. We quickly turned our head and stopped looking at the teacher.34 words
At Last, the lesson finally end.My friends tells the whole class about it.Surprisingly, the whole knew about it but they did not have the courage to tell the teacher as Mr Lim looks fierce.
We heard some of his students that one person told Mr Lim about his unzipped pants Mr Lim face was red as a tomato.We was laughing out loud, then we asked who did it then she said it's a boy.We was laughing non stop.
Then it was time to go home.My friend and I was walking back home and we was still talking about the teacher.The next day, The Boy that told Mr lim about his unzipped pants went to apologize to the teacher because the form teacher of the boy thinks that he should not do this to embarrassed the teacher.
-The End-
Word Count: 282 Words
I HAVE CHECKHED MY WORK 4 TIMES:
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Chee Seet Fung (1)
Hi,Mr Lau this is Seah Si Jia (17) from 1F.I have written the second entry of the journal.
It was Chinese New Year,me and my parents have woke up early in the morning although we had slept very late the last night.Me and my parents were preparing the things to bring to my grandparents house.
After preparing all the things,we rested for a while and went to bathe.I was very happy wearing my new clothes and new shoes.
Me and my parents were strolling to my grandparents house,I saw a group of teenagers,some of their hairs were in blone,red,blue and many other colours of hairs.They were taking some bats and knifes,some sort of a gangsters.
I was very curious and went to see,I was surprised to see that many of the gangs were started to fight each other.There were more than 50 teenage gangs at there I think.I was so afraid that I told my parents about this,as my parents saw it,they quickly called the police for help.Many of them were injured as they have beaten by the bats and slashed by the knifes.
Few minutes later,the police car arrived.The police brought us to a safer place while they have catched all of the teenage gangs there,none have escaped.Both me and my parents were relieved.
I think that it was a bad thing to do and it was just the start of a new year.But it does not ruined our feeling,we still have our great time at my grandparents house.(256 words)
I HAVE CHECKHED MY WORK 4 TIMES:
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SECONDLY VOCABULARY
THIRDLY GRAMMAR
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Hi Mr Lau,i want to rewrite my work.
Well actually this is a true story happened to me.About last 2 to 3 days ago but i will not tell who did this.
Well on the day itself,after the flag raising ceremony was over,me and my together with my class start our way walking up the stair to our class,there was a boy but i will not tell his name.He is a bit crazy but i will not called him crazy because knows very well about computer.He knows how to learn from his mistake sometimes.I normally take care of him.Well after we reach the third floor which is our class floor,The boy didn't tell me that he is actually going to the toilet.So he just ran to the toilet.I look to my left and saw that he was going straight to the toilet door.I ran to him and accompanied him.After he finished with his ***,we went out and I saw 2 guys from 1h.1 of the boy name H**** start confronting Chor yew.H**** then start pushing chor yew.i then try to stop H**** by pushing H**** slightly.By that time i knew that he was a so call *Gangster* but i told myself don't be scared.He is just a piece of cake.I then told chor yew that lets start going to our class.Then suddenly H**** then confront me and punch me but he miss.I work fast with my reaction by walking away fast.just next to the toilet itself is class 1G i guess.H**** then ran towards me and jump and then kick my bag.i flew a bit.Then he sais *Want to fight??Come fight with me don't be a baby*(In malay)*Kau nak fight??Lincah fight ngan aku jangan jadi kedi*.Me and chor yew walk very fast and at last we get in to our classes.At class I didn't say what had happened just now.I just kept quiet.
Once again this is a true story happened to me about 3 days ago which is on the 13.
Written by:Muhd Syafiq Bin Adnan
Class:Sec 1F
Word count:324
My Declaration:I have checked my work four times.
-Firstly for content
- Secondly for vocabulary
- Thirdly for grammar
- And lastly for spelling.
Hi Mr Alvin Lau !
My name is Nafiz 1F (28)
Here is my entry.
I was walking alone by the path of my house. Where I saw an innocent cat meaowing seeking for help and food . I felt pity with that cat . So I went to pick it up . when I was about to bring that cat away , i remembered my moms advice thet she does not like cats in the house .
At last , i picked up the cat and find a recycled box to make a place for the cat . my neighbour suddently came to me and said “ hey , that is my cat . “ when he said that , i explained to him how i found the cat . He was shocked because , actually the cat knows how to go back to its own home . but at that time the cats leg was injured , i felt so sad that my neighbour had a cat that is injured and he is responsible to pay the bills of the recovery of the cat .
That is all for my entry now .
My Declaration :
I have chacked my work four times :
1)Grammar
2)Spelling
3)Voabulary
4) Content
Word count : 98
Entry 2
One day, my family was invited to see how a movie was directed. We were so excited to see the movie in advanced. We had ticket for six to HOLLEYWOOD. We then when to enjoy the place before the movie schedule started. We enjoyed the sceneries and took pictures.
When the parts of the movie were played we burst into laughter and enjoyed the entire funny scene. There was one part when there was a man drink a glass bowl of chocolate and fell down on his back and spilled the chocolate on the director. When the scene ended, we applauded and said that the movie was well directed. We where told that the other part of the movie would be shown the next day.
We managed to see some HOLLEYWOOD Hall Of Fame people. We even got to see some HOLLEYWOOD STARS and they gave us their autographs. The next day came and the second parts part of the movie was showed. There were still some silly parts and serious parts.
After the whole scene, we when to see the places where their make the scene. There was one part that was at a bridge about 800m over the river. That was where the skydiving was made. We saw how they sky dive. When the stunt man was going to jump, the whole family closed our eyes and mumbled “please don’t tell me the that stunt man is going to die.” After the director said, “cut”, we heave a sign of relief. The director told used that the stunt man was a dummy. We laughed and enjoyed the scene. After one week, we when home and told our story to our friends.
Jordan (24)(1F)
WORD COUNT (283)
I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
Dear All,
The following students have yet to submit their work:
1. Sean (journal entry 1, personal recount 1.1, 1.2)
2. Jing Quan (personal recount 1.0, 1.1, 1.2)
3. Fauzi (journal entry 1)
4. Nasrullah (journal entry 1)
5. Chor Yew (recount 1.2)
6. Nafiz (journal entry 1, recount 1.2)
7. Ajrun (journal entry 1)
8. Iskandar (recount 1.1, 1.2)
Ajrun A'zhim(1F)
Journal entry-1
Yesterday,I went to Giant with my mother and brother to bought items.
At there were so many people and so crowded.
My mother bought so many items such as milk,cereal,butter,egg and many more.I bought some sweets and chocolates to eat.My brother bought twisties and potato chips.
After choosing all the items,we paid all the items to the cashier.
The price of all the items was almost eighty dollars.I was shocked.
The items were so heavy when they were in the plastic bags.I carried many of the items.My brother was so bad because he did not want to carried the items so my mother need to carried the items.We took bus number sixty-six to go home.
After we reached home,we put all the items at the kitchen.I felt so sleepy and tired.So I went to bed straight away and slept.
THE END
(154 words)
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Rasinah(15)1F
Journal entry 1
"I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
It was the worst day of my whole entire life as I was ashamed of what had happened to me that day which was on a Monday morning. It was actually supposed to be happiest day in my life. It was my birthday. I was sad as when I had just went into my class for the first lesson of that day.
I heard giggles from my form students. I thought jokes was going on when I came in. Suddenly, a pupil named ’Roslan’ said ”Mr. Tan! so sexy ah today”. I was wondering the message that Roslan was trying to tell me. The boys were aloud. The girls seemed to be covering their eyes. I knew something was not right. I realized that I did not zip my pants. I was ashamed.
fatin hazirah (4) ,1F
Me and my classmates hates one of our friends,Jie Liang.He's extremely irritating.He's behaviour is like a monkey who cannot sit still.
One day in class he went to the toilet.After he came back from the toilet..
And guess wat??
He had forgotten to zip his pants!
We can see his PINK pokka-dots underpants!
We all laughed like hell!Our form teacher could't stop us from laughing.Jie Liang's face turned pink.He was ashamed..
He even dig his nose and EAT it!And also farted in class!!He doesn't mind is we see or not..
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Journal entry-1
Last week when,my mum,sister and I,went to the new shopping mall at Orchard last week to buy my father's birthday present.His birthday was just the next two days.
We do not know what to buy for him.
So,when we got there,the place was wide and there were so many shops and things to buy.
My sister and I decided to buy my father a t-shirt.Our budget was $28.We went to a shop and tried to find 'Ben Sherman' t-shirt.Finally we found it.It was so colourful. We went to the cashier and paid for it.
Next was our mother's turned.She decided to bought him branded watch.She saw an adidas watch.She paid it.After buying my father's present,we went home and took our dinner.We went to bed and waited for the big day to arrived.
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Haziq(31)
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On the first day of school,I had a mixture feelings.Sad and lonely. When I reached school, I did not know where to go. So I just stand like a "statue" waiting for counsellor to approach me. After 10 minutes of waiting, a student counsellor came towards me and asked 'are you in sec 1?'She asked me in a sweet voice,"yes" I replied. She asked me which class I am in and she bring me in my class. I settled down. I started making new friends. And the days past one by one. I got to know my friends well. I was delighted that i an mot alone anymore.
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Cloris Oh (03) 1F
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Dear Diary,
On the 14th February, my friends, Si Min and Si Jia, and I went to Bugis. We went there to window shop and to relax ourselves. We went to the last level to play the games. We spent much money on those games, without thinking about how expensive those tokens are. After playing, we went down to have our lunch. We ate quite a lot of food especially me. I was hungry when I was playing. I concentrate on playing those games without caring about how my tummy felt. We shared money to buy food and tokens for those games, although we did not even bring much money.
It was an enjoyable day, even though we were exhausted. Hope we could go there and have fun again.
Signed,
Cloris
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Name: Nur Syuhaimah
Class: 1F
Journal Entry 1
One sunny Afternoon, when my class were having remedial for Geography, we settled down and started the lesson. We were concentrating, suddenly one of our classmate said “Hey, everyone, look at our teacher, he didn’t zip his pants and we can see his underwear inside.” Everyone started laughing. The teacher was so embarrassed that we laugh and laugh until one of the teacher that was passing by the class also laugh. Then he started zipping his pants and he promised that he will zip up his pants.
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Hi Mr Lau this is my interesting journal entry 2!!!
It was total silence. Beads of perspiration trickled down my forehead as I walked through the darkness. Suddenly, a light came shining on.It was shining upon a beautiful lady and a handsome young man.
Out of the blue, Music started playing at the background.Then,they started dancing.The lady's dress swayed with every elegant move that they both took at every second.
My heart beat faster as I saw them dancing with such elegance. My eyes filled with tears of joy as I saw their beautiful dance. I never wanted that moment of seeing that beautiful couple's dance to end.
The music stopped.My tears stopped. "What happened?" I asked.
The couple then stared at me."We can't." They answered. "Why not?" I asked. As they were about to answer,
"Wake up! Come on! There's a big day ahead of us!" My mum shouted as she opened the door."Huh?" I whispered. "Wake up!" My mother repeated."It was all a dream," I said,hesitating to get out from my bed."Of course it was," My mother said as she walked out briskly from my room.
"Ugh. I hate dreams," I whispered.
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one day, Ali and his friends were walking proudly because they get their maths result and get 85 out of 100. while they were walking somebody put a big and long rubbish bin infront of them. Suddenly while they were walking, all of them did not see the rubbish bin. then they fell into the rubbish bin.
It was Funny!
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I am syahirah(10)
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This morning , I felt very unusual. I was extremely tired and excessively sleepy. I almost miss my stop. I was shocked when a boy in the age of nine or ten years old came to me. He asked me for eighty cents. I was so touched. I hand over the money to him. He was so happy. After paying the bus fare , he sat beside me. He taped me and ask me a question again. He was showing me his homework and he told me that he there is no one could help him with mathematics. I felt very touched. I guide him with his mathematics homework. I from his face I could predict that his family is having financial problems. I hope that he would study hard and excel in every single thing that he does although he is poor. I hope I would still be able to see him again
tomorrow morning in the bus.
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Nur Dina Dianah Bte Razali (9)
1F
Journal entry 2
Today,when i woke up,I showered and get ready for school.When I got downstairs,I quickly ran to the bus stop and waited for the bus to arrived.
When I got on the bus,I sat down and waited for the bus to stop at the interchange.When I got there,I missed my first bus and waited for the second bus.
I waited and waited until the bus arrived.When I got on the bus,I slept in the bus to wait for my next stop that was at school.
Suddenly,I felt a tapped on my shoulder.I woke up and an old lady asked me politely to get down from the bus as the bus has stopped in front of my school.I was so glad that there was someone to alert me.Luckily I was not late thanks to the old lady.I would not forget about what she had done for me.
Haziq(31)
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Hello Mr Lau , i would like to highlight that I have already submitted entry 1 however i’m left with entry 2 . Hence , i am submitting the latter now . I apologise for the late entry . I’m aware of deadline by 9.00pm however i have ealier no internet access . Only now i am able to use my aunt laptop for this assignment .
Mohd Nafiz Bin Zulkhairi |=
1/F (28) 18/02/09
Journal - 2
Today , my aunty shared with me a very interesting spritual , motivational and leadership book called ‘ The Balance Ways ‘ . Written by , Dr M.K Sutrisna Suryadilaga . The writter believes that it is a way to reach sucess and eternal hapiness in a balance way in the present and after life .In order to bridge The Balance Ways and attain success in life together with hapiness , we need vehicle or strategy which is universal and easy to apply ; either to muslims or non muslims . That strategy , Dr Sutrisna define it in an acronym terms MAPP TO REACH .
Method 1 : (MA) Maximize action - strive to the your best & maximize yr potential
Method 2 : (P) Planning – do a Mature planning
Method 3 : (P) Pro Poor – embrace yourself with the poor and reach out to them
Method 4 : (R) Ridha – face all obstacles in life with an open heart and mind
Method 5 : (IC) Ichlas – To be able to give wholeheartedly and willingness
Method 6 : (H) Heart Voice
To summarise this book will bring you to a journey of exploring The Balance Ways concepts in detail of the above methods starting from MA – Maximizing our potentials right up to the last Method which is the (H) Heart Voice ( listening to your inner voice , thats where the God Spot lies) If we consistenly practice and apply thru The Balance Ways, he believes, by way of God permission, success in life spiritually and emotionally will be attained.
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Today I saw my friend walking from school to the bus stop. He was talking to his friend while walking to the bus stop. He didn’t realized that there is a pole in front of him and he bang on to it. His friends laugh him and he kept touching his head because it’s pain. Suddenly he bang again . He bang onto the traffic pole . I was just right behind him, and I laughed . When they reached the bus stop , he bang onto a pole again . I couldn’t stop laughing because he bang three times in a roll . He went back home with a big n black balaku head.
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Yichew 1F (19)
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Hi Mr. Lau my name is Brian from 1f. this is my journal entry
I have a from teacher who is very kind in primary school
She hardly gives us any homework. Hence in repayment we would be good in class.
Every time we do something bad she would scold us but not send us to the headmaster’s or discipline master’s office to be scolded.
But a lot of us misbehave in class and so at the half of the year our form teacher was
Swapped with an even fiercer teacher named Mrs. morsel . did not like her as she
always find’s fault’s in us when we had never done anything bad. We purposely misbehave in class to catch her attention so that we would class would be disrupted and time would be wasted. It was very fun but also irritating as her shout’s are very loud and
it sound’s like a lorry driving pass us.
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Cher Chen Wei 1F (2)
Journal Entry 2
Alvin looked along the row of faces in the darkened cinema.His mother and sinchita were sitting next to Sergeant Soo.
Mars was snuggled against Rafe.Azizul had brought Farisha,his girlfriend whose flashing eyes never left him,even when he offeredher popcorn.
Mr Mun and stella sat together,their eyes glued to the screen.Mr Mun had been so grateful that he did given Soh & Co a big reward for helping him.And he did saved stella from going to jail by paying a special bond and giving her a job as his assistant.
Wei Ling rested her head on Alvin's shoulders.
"Isn't this nice?"she whispered.
Alvin ignored her.
"Sinchita,are you alright?"asked Alvin's mother.
"Sorry,I farted."said sinchita
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One early morning after geography we are geting ready for our next lesson as we need to change to our physical education(P.E)shirt as fast as possible(ASAP), which the P.E teacher only give us 5min to go down to the parade square.
We were all downstair around 9.05a.m. the teacher warm up by runing 1 to 2 rounds around the parade square,after we were all playing floorball around 9.20 and we were having so much fun but we were also very tried.
Then suddenly (out of the blue) a sec 2 boy I can tell he a sec 2 because of his hight,run down the staircase with only his under-pans on,every body in my class laugh at him and about 3 teacher was trying to catch after him it was a hilarlous and carzy thing to do,I think he have a physical disability,I feel bad for that guy when he is bust*/caught.
The next day had 2 storke of the cane I felt bad for him.
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jimson low 1/f (23)
One early morning after geography we are geting ready for our next lesson as we need to change to our physical education(P.E)shirt as fast as possible(ASAP), which the P.E teacher only give us 5min to go down to the parade square.
We were all downstair around 9.05a.m. the teacher warm up by runing 1 to 2 rounds around the parade square,after we were all playing floorball around 9.20 and we were having so much fun but we were also very tried.
Then suddenly (out of the blue) a sec 2 boy I can tell he a sec 2 because of his hight,run down the staircase with only his under-pans on,every body in my class laugh at him and about 3 teacher was trying to catch after him it was a hilarlous and carzy thing to do,I think he have a physical disability,I feel bad for that guy when he is bust*/caught.
The next day had 2 storke of the cane I felt bad for him.
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Hi Mr.Lau
This is Kelvin Lee from 1F and this is my journal entry 2
One night when i was going to bed,i heard noises coming from the staircase and i went to check what is making the creepy noises.
I opened the door and went up the staircase to see what is there,but to my surprise there was no one there.I got scared and ran down the stairs but when i was running down the stairs,something gabbed me from behind,i tried to shook it off but couldn't.Hence,i looked behind me and saw a woman with long hair dressed in white.I used the amulet that my grandma gave me and chanted the words that my grandma taught me.
Suddenly,a strong wind blew past me and the blew amulet away.I got really really scared and i shouted for help but no one heard me,i chanted the words loudly and the woman disappeared in front of me,i quickly ran to my bed right after that and covered myself with a blanket with my eyes shut tightly and i went to sleep peacefully after that.
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Name: Nur syuhaimah
Class: 1F
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It’s Family day. My family and my cousin went out. We went to Tampines Mall,
Suddenly we saw a kid that open his shirt and went inside the mall. His parents were so embraced. Everyone started looking at him and laughed at him. Luckily, he is a kid. His parents pulled him out of the mall. I’m glad that the parents pull him out of the mall. But He keeps shouting, “I don’t want to go outside! It is hot outside!” His parents didn’t bother.
When he was outside, everyone could still hear him.
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GUO SI MIN (06) 1F
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Last week , one new teacher entered our classroom want to find why all her students standing beside their chair. Then the teacher said : Those who are not stupid, please sit down.
All the students sat down except for a boy whose name call paul, who remained standing.
The teacher ask paul : are you stupid?
Paul said : no.
The teacher said : then why are you standing?
Paul said: because if I sit down , you will be the only one who is standing and I don’t want that to happen.
When paul said finished everyone in the class laugh out loudly.
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jian wu from sec 1f,this is my second journal entries,it may be long......ready?get set,go!
when i play my game machine,it reminds me of an essential matter.
Three years ago,i had a best friend,his name is mohammad zigu,but I always call him zigu. he always bring his game machine to school.when it is recess time,he plays with his game machine.I seldom be the first person to see him playing.
One day,i get envy of him,i kept asking myself"why he has a game machine while i do not have?so i had an idea.During P.E lessons,i stole his game machine and put it in my bag.
when Zigu walk pass,he saw me stoling his game machine,after school,he came to me ,he slap my face,taking back his game machine,he left me,never to talk to me anymore.
i felt sad,i wanted to apologise to him,but i did not have the courage to do so.but it is too late,after a few weeks,he did not come to school for several days,i thought that he did not come to school due to his sickness,but i found out that his family had immigrate to Australia only after a classmate told me,i felt despaired.If only i can apologisised to him before his family immigrating to Australia.
Now i can only felt sad in all my life.
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Hello mr lau my name is brian this is my journal entry 2.
Last year we went to snow city it was very fun but very cold.plus it was raining
I tried the 50 meters high slide it was very fun!i did it only 2 times before I got out to
Warm myself as I was freezing as it was raning outside and it was -2 degrees!
I was very happy until we had to pack to go to the Singapore science centre it was very
Fun there to as we experienced a lot of nice and newer things in the science centre
It was much nicer than last time
I was very ha[[y until we went to a Japanese graveyard,we paid our respects by keeping quiet but my friend was complaining about how cold it was at the graveyard and why Japanese are retard’s he said we all nudged him to stay silent or something might happen.
And it did as we were walking ryan tripped on something when he looked back NOTHING!he swore he tripped over something we chided him for saying such things to Japanese soilder s even though they are dead.
mr lau i forgot to write this :i have checked my work 4 times 1:content 2:spelling 3:grammer 4:vocabluary
while my cousin is sitting down suddenly her pants tear and it was embarrased!!
this is my enty 2
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Rozalia Rosli(16)1F
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Several days ago, an incident happened to my teacher. It was an unpleasant one. My teacher did not zip his blue jeans as he was an absent minded person. It was an absurd incident for me but not for my girls classmates. The girls blushed. When the teacher found out about it, he was ashamed. He rushed off to the nearby comfort station. After the incident, he was not as chattering as before.(73 words)
Jimson Low(23)1F
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In a small town of Kentucky there was this old war veteran. His legs were blown off in the war, and so the only way he could move around was by dragging himself around by his long long long nails. He was also a psycho. He would come around the town and disembowel people with his long long nails. So, because of this, the people were ordered to go inside at exactly 6:00 pm and lock their doors.
Well, one night my friend named,Christopher asked his mom if he could go play at his friend's house. The mother looked at the clock, it was 4:00pm. She told the Christopher to be home by 5:45 because that's when "click-click" came out.He agreed and was on his way. He played and played and I guess he lost track of time because when he headed home, it was already 5:48. he spoke to himself"i will make it home on time". But that was when he saw the ice cream man,He bought one and by the time he already started to go home it was 6:00. He observed people locking their doors and calling in their kids.
"Shoot, I'd better run". she thought. Finally she reached her street. But that's when he heard the noise"click!click!click!click!". It got louder and louder. She turned around to make sure no one was there but saw something unbelievable. Meanwhile, his mother was inside getting ready for bed, she thought his son was already asleep so she decided not to wake him up,that's when the nightmare mare started, she heard knocking and pounding on the door, and thought it was the war veteran and paid no attention. It was really his son though, wanting to come inside. The next morning,his mother opened the door to get his newspaper only to find Christopher's body disemboweled and in the near distance,blood was seen written on the tree "Mom why didn't you open the door?"
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Several days ago,a bug flew into my friends laptop while we having a geek party.I am shocked that his laptop's air vent was choked with bug,the fan had stopped,so my friend immediately shut down his computer, left it for 15 minutes and I disassemble his laptop,by the time I get into the fan compartment,the bug scatted into the screen,I carefully removed the bug out of the screen and so we resumed our exciting party(74 words)
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One nice day,when I surfing the internet with my home made computer,suddenly music play out of my hard disk,I immediately back up my data, test the data and then turn of my computer.
then I rang up the hard drive manufacturer,Maxtor,I then send back my hard drive to Maxtor,the manufacturer for my hard disk for warranty repair.
I was relived that my data was still intact while waiting for my drive to returned,I used the spare drive with Linux installed(80 words)
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fatin hazirah (4) 1F
Journal Entry 2.
The sun shine bright at us.After recess we waited for our maths teacher to came in and teach us.When Mr,Leo came in.....
He had forgotten to wear his pants!
We can see his PINK boxer!!We laughed non-stop...
He was blushed and felt ashamed..
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Ajrun A'zhim(1F)
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Yesterday,I went to Giant with my mother and brother to bought items.
At there were so many people and so crowded.
My mother bought so many items such as milk,cereal,butter,egg and many more.I bought some sweets and chocolates to eat.My brother bought twisties and potato chips.
After choosing all the items,we paid all the items to the cashier.
The price of all the items was almost eighty dollars.I was shocked.
The items were so heavy when they were in the plastic bags.I carried many of the items.My brother was so bad because he did not want to carried the items so my mother need to carried the items.We took bus number sixty-six to go home.
After we reached home,we put all the items at the kitchen.I felt so sleepy and tired.So I went to bed straight away and slept.
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‘Ring!’ It time for geography. I cannot wait to learn more about geography because I love learning new things about solar system. Suddenly, I saw a teacher went to our class and asked us that your teacher in charge was not feeling well today so he replaced our teacher. The relief teacher was Mr. Sam. His quite handsome with his T shirt on and cool hairstyle.
The lesson has started and the way his teaching was really different with my teacher in charge. It was interesting. After finished teaching, he gave us revision to do and wanted us to do quietly because he needs to take the test at the staff room. While he walked out of the class, I saw his pants was torn a bit and laugh loudly but Mr. Sam did not heard it.
My friend felt shocked when I laugh loudly and they asked me why I laugh. I told them later until the teacher went in. When Mr. Sam walked in the class, I point at the pant that was torn and my friend started loudly. He felt weird when students laughing in sudden. He told the class why started laughing for no reason and my friend shouted at him that his pant was torn. He felt really embarrass. He tried to ignored it and just continue the lesson. When the lesson ended, he gave out the test paper to them and hand in the revision paper to him. After that, Mr. Sam dismissed them for mother tongue. I cannot stop laughing about him.
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The Yi Chew , 1F (19) This is my journal entry 2 .
Long time ago, there lived a very action and she thinks she is pretty when she is not, princess. One day, She when out of her castle to see if she could bully anyone out on the streets. While walking, she walked pass a lot shops and then she walked pass a handsome prince. Wondering if she could marry him. She went up to him and flirt him. The streets peoples were saying her bad things behind her back but she didn’t want to care. She asked if he would want to come to her castle to drink some tea. Surprisingly, he rejected and said, “ I am waiting for someone. Sorry that I can’t accompany you back to your castle.” She was furious and was curious to know that whom is he waiting for. So she hid behind a wall to wait and see. A poor beautiful lady came out of the sight and stunned everyone. It was the person that the prince was waiting for. She was angry and went up to the prince, “Why didn’t you choose me yet you choose a poor, ugly and dirty women?” He replied, “She was my first love and sorry princess, could you please wear your high heels properly, Zip up your dress, Tidy up your hair before you come out? Thank you ”.
Everyone laughed at her and she felt embarrassed. She went back to her castle with a long and black face.
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