BNSS 1F Personal Recount
Dearest 1F,
Please upload your personal recount by clicking the "comments" link at the end of this post.
Please include your NAME, REGISTER NUMBER, CLASS and WORD COUNT.
Remember to check FOUR times:
1. First for content (how can I make it more interesting?)
2. Secondly, for vocabulary (can I use better words? eg. best friend vs beloved pal)
3. Thirdly, for grammar
4. Lastly, spelling
Please include the following remark at the BEGINNING of each post:
"I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
Thank you.
posted by AL @ 3:24 PM
149 Comments:
"Ok class.If you could turn to page 15, you will see..."
I was once a girl who wrote brilliant love stories.People from other countries were fascinated by my extordinary imagination that was shared among the world.People crowded around me for my autograph and some were crying tears of joy to have met me.As I walked by the streets I could see people engrossed in my book. So concetrated, That some of them didnt knew what was moving around them.I knew by then, That my book was different from the others.I knew that my book was a book filled with happiness.I knew what story that was famous among the others. It was called, "I fell in love with a princess".It was the most beautiful story that everyone loved and the story that they read over and over again.It was about a boy who loved a princess with all his heart. The princess loved him too.But somehow when the princess was a child,her brother got seperated from her.The princess then found out that her brother turned out to be the boy that she loved with all her heart.She was forced to break apart her relationship as it was wrong to be in a loving reltionship with a family member.That was a part where i got all my fans into tears.I then knew that was the world most famous author as more than one million people around the world were reading my book. I was so thankful to my fans.My fans were the ones who inspired me to write more of my most fascnating books.
"RING!!!!!!" rang the bell."Huh?" I said,under my breath."Class dismissed!'' Said Mr.Lau.I turned to the side and asked my friend,"What? class is over?" My friend then answered me, "Yes.You were talking to me during lesson then suddenly you fell asleep and said that..umm.You were a fmous writer..and stuff. I dont know! It was like you were giving a speech or something."
I then turned back and then stood up and started packing my things.
Dearest Nisa,
Please use "I" instead of "i".
Use "don't" instead of "dont".
I like your story, but I believe you can be even more creative.
How did you while talking to your friend, "suddenly fall asleep"? Were you drugged or ill?
Hi Mr. Lau. Cloris 1F (03) Do not believe this story. It’s a FAKE..
The scorching sun shone into the classroom. We could hardly concentrate on our studies with the unbearably heat. We tried our best to concentrate with our homework that had just been given out a few minutes ago.
RING !! " Finally !! It's recess time." I said to my friends while rubbing my tummy. I began sweating as I walk to the canteen..
I then saw a girl sitting by the staircase with her head down.. I kept perspire as I asked her what had happen. Then she slowly turn to me. She told me that one of her friend had backstabbed her while she was ill for a few days. I did not realize that my friends had gone to the canteen all by themselves without asking me to tagged along. She kept quiet for awhile, and ask if I wanted to befriend her. Then I hum a tune to cheer her up. While I was humming, she started grinning. With the smile on her face.
RINGG !! Recess was over, and I had not even take a quick bite. " Is it a crime to be hungry ?" I asked myself as I went up my classroom.
I want to ask you can i write a story about me going london??because i think that story has happiness on it.er....i'm sorry because i can't hand your assignment today because i want to ask you this question.wellthe latesti will hand my assignment maybe tuesday.plz don't scold me!
This story is from where I write my diary four years ago, I found my lost diary the Day before. When I was nine years old, it was my birthday! I am so lucky to be born during National Day.
My brother blows thirty balloons and put up along the living room, bought ten 1.5 litres of Pepsi drinks and a mp3 player as my birthday gift, my father bought a chocolate cake plus cream for me, bought a box of cookies for me, my mother bought me a school bag for me while I invite all my friends to the party.
As the sky was getting dark, we finish preparing the party. Then my family and I open the television to watch the National Day show, which take place at Marina Bay. The scene was picturesque and we saw a lot of groups of people coming, some were form PAP. Then someone knocked on the door, I was astonished.
At 8 pm, we watch some performances by some performers while we prepared candles and plastic knife for the party. Then at the end of the show, they put eighty fireworks. Some were blue, red, green, and lots more colours, and they were beautiful. The fireworks lasted for fifteen minutes. After the show, time for the party! My parents lighted candles. Everyone sang the birthday song. After that, we ate the cakes. After that, we played some games .I went overjoyed. At end of the party, my friends said goodbye to me and went home.
That is my nine years old best birthday party ever!
By jian wu from 1F BNSS,265 words
Hi Mr. Lau this Si Jia(15) from 1F.
Some years ago,i went to Malaysia wit my parents and some of my friends. We went there by a travelling bus,we talked and played while on the way to there.
After we got down to the bus we went to a hotel to check in,then we went to our rooms excitedly,we rested in our rooms as we have been in the bus for a long time.
Next,we played hide-and-seek at the corridors outside the hotel rooms as i was too excited playing the game, i hide inside the emergency exit,closing the door.
By the time i wanted to came out,the door had been locked by itself.I tried to call for help but no one was there.I became very nervous and do not know what to do,so i kept running down the staircase till the ground floor.
Fortunately,the emergency exit at the ground was opened,so i quickly ran to a lift and went to the floor where my room is.When i get to the floor,i saw my parents,they looked very worry and said,"Where have you gone?"I did not said a word,i just hug them and burst into tear loudly.
Since this incident,it does not ruin the tour,we still enjoy ourselves at there before we went back to Singapore.
I was always left out at work.Nobody ever likes me.I am always alone in the corner with no friends.Everyone despise me because i was not rich.They do not want to be friends with me because i cannot buy all the branded stuff that they have.My childhood was not that great either.My parents divorced,i lived with my abusive mother because my father did not have enough income to take careof me.But all of that was about to change.
One day,a fair,tall beautiful lady named Rosalie as that of an angel stepped into the office.I was captivated by her beauty.There was just this calming aura around her.Everybody was jealous of her.Some tried to ask her out on a date,but she rejected.After a few weeks,I think she realised that i was lonely and i had no friends,she started talking to me.I was on cloud nine.
This set some tounges wagging.Suddenly,i realized that i had fallen in love with her.We started going out on dates,and I confessed my feelings to her.From that night onwards,she stopped calling me and talking to me.I have lost all hope to search for happiness.At work,she avoided me as much as she can.my heart was shattered into a million pieces.
But lady luck was smiling on me,a few weeks after that,she started talking to me again.She said that she just could not accept the fact that I liked her.But she just wanted to try this another time.After a few other dates,she said that she loved me and she did not care that i was not that rich because she thinkd that wealth does not matter.After a few months of planning,we decided to get married.At last,the auspicious day came.At that point of time i was overjoyed.And i thought to myself,now i know what happiness means.
Nur Dina Dianah(09)
1F
Hi Mr Lau. I'm LEE ER 1F (18)
When I was young , I live with my grandmother. My grandmother took care of me almost half of her life.
I still remember was I was in Malaysia , my grandmother told me my mother and brother are coming to Malaysia to visit me. And I wait outside the gate for very long. I didn't had my breakfast , lunch and dinner. i was just foolish standing there waiting. Then around 8 plus, my grandmother told me my mother and brother are not coming because my mother is busy. I'm so disappointed.
From that day onwards , I everyday will help my grandmother to sweep the floor , mop the floor. I still know how to cook some delicious dishes to let my grandmother taste it. After few years , my mother suddenly come Malaysia and say want to bring me back to Singapore. I didn't want. But I was force. Every year I will go back to Malaysia and look for my grandmother , let her taste my cooking. Last year , she say , my cooking has improve a lot.
Hi Mr Lau. I am Guo Si Min 1F (6)
When i was young . I lived with my grandparent. My grandmother took care of me . MY grandfather working to support the family. I live with them for 6 or 7 years . After that , My grandparent sent me back to my parent'house . From that onwards , I lived with my parent and started my learning jouney.
Dear Syafiq,
Yes, you may write recount about your trip to London.
You should have asked me much earlier, and not on the day that it is due!
Please do not do this again.
Please submit it as soon as you can - before I see you for English on Monday morning, 19 January 2009.
Thank you.
Dear Guo Si Min,
Your recount is too short.
It must be at least 250 words!
Hi Mr. lau. I am Rozalia Rosli (14) 1F
Plz don’t believe this story…
Here it goes…
Few years back,I remembered that there was an inccident that happen to me.I could’nt was in the June holidays.My family and I had plans to go on a holiday trip in London.My parents have already booked a hotel and air line tickets for the trip.It was just a few days more before the big day arrives which is going to London. I was delighted when I just found out a few weeks ago about the holiday trip.But not now as I already know that I will not have the one and only chance that is to go to Holiday trip.My passport had expired but I don’t know about it until my mother was packing up some clothes in a few luggages a week before the trip..Beside her was a stack of passports.I went to her to help her out in the packing.When I am done,I take a look at my passport and turn to a page where it shows my paticulars.I accidently take a glance at the due date of the passport.I was shock that the date that was stated as the expiry date.”My passport has expired!”,I shouted.My mother who was just beside also shocked.”Are you sure?”,my mother asked me?.I showed her the particulars page and pointed at the expiry date of the passport.Few minutes later my father reach home from his working place.My mother told my father the situation that the family is in.My father took a few minutes to make decision whether to go to the trip to London.He told me the decision he had made was to leave me alone with my neighbour.I respect my father’s decision.I decided not to dissapoint my small sister by assuring my parents and my small sister that I would be fine alone with my neighbour.It was the most sadness part of my life that I had ever experience.
forget it.
My personal account chor yew 1F
The birds a chipping,the tree is dancing with the wind and the cars buzzing,I was using my laptop while my classmates are went for the Malacca trip and i was happily watching Youtube videos and commenting it.
Then suddenly,a blue screen of death flashed on my laptop,shock and fear raise out to my mind,heart beating very fast,and i was shocked,I check my computer for virus but it does have virus,I had ignored it and it had restarted,and i enjoy my youtube video again and after i enjoyed the video and decided to shut down the computer and have a snack,when I shut down the computer,half way trough the process blue screen of death strike back and it then restarted and I shut down the computer and grab a snack
After surfing the internet,I decided to have a quick nap and watch my favorite channel okto and watch some cartoon,after this I was not shocked anymore
Hi mr. lau my name is cher chen wei(2)
If I was once a girl who always sell newspapers.I was at the roadside selling my newspaper when I saw an accident at the road.
The accident goes like this,a driver's car was out of control when he saw the lady crossing the zebra crossing and he knock on the lady.The lady's things has drop on the road and she was injured specially her forehead.
I quickly called the police and the ambulance.A few minutes later,the police and the ambulance came during the way to the hospital the lady's forehead keep blooding and cause it's death.
Hi, Mr Lau . I am Guo Si Min 1F (6)
When I was young , I lived with my grandparents.My grandmother took care of me , while my grandfather supports the family.My grandmother would prepared lunches and dinner for us.My grandfather would often be back in the afternoon to have lunch with us.
When my grandfather came back for lunch,I was happy . As I could hardly see him through out the day. Afterthat,he went back to work. After lunch,I would be helping my grand mother with the house work . When I help my grandmother with the house work, she would go to the farm to feed the animals with lots of healthy foods.
Sometime,I will go to the farm to pet those animals . I am one of a animals love in my family. When I am feeling sad , I will go to the farm and those animals were cheer me up.
Most of all, i live with my grandparent for 6 to 7 years . I was happy living with them .
Hi Mr.Lau This is Kelvin from 1F
When i was in P5,the principle announced that in the school hall we P5 students will be going to Marina Bay to celebrate our country,Singapore's birthday and i was really excited and i nearly shouted in the school hall.
Finally,the day came as we were going to Marina Bay.We went there by bus and the trip to Marina Bay was really long but it was fruitful,because we watched interesting performances,KFC lunch and many many more.The most amazing thing in the celebration was that i got to enjoy the really amazing fireworks,my classmates opened their mouths gasp in the air looking at the fireworks as some taking photographs.The night was the most memorable night in my whole life as it was fun,when we went home at 9pm in the night,after i bathed i went to bed but i cant sleep as i was thinking about that night.That's all.
Hello Mr Lau.My name is Muhammad Suleiman.(32)1F
When I was still little,my parents took me to a place called "Snowcity".I was young and did not know much of that place.So I went there with my parent,sister,brother and my grandparents.When I was there ,I can feel that the lobby was warm.My mother quickly bought the tickets.By my brother's facial expression, I can see that he is very excited.I'm so curious to see what's inside.
After my mother bought the tickets,we were brought inside to wear a thick jacket and a pair of gloves.My brother and I wore it quickly so that we can go in faster.When my feet touched inside,I can feel that the tempreture was very cold.When I went inside I saw a very long slope.I also saw many people are sliding down the slope with a float.My brother quickly pull me and said "let's go up and slide".I was scared at the first time so I dared myself.After walking up the long stairs,the slope was just beside me.So,I took one float and put it at down.I also sit at the float while holding my brother's hand beside me.And then two people incharge there slowly pushes us down.Suddenly when I was sliding,I can feel the cool breeze blowing at me.After we get to the bottom,I realised that it was fun and not scared.My mother and my grandmother was there.They were scared of sliding down the slope.So I encouraged them.I told them that when you were up there you were scared but when you were sliding it is fun.My mother and my grandmother took that words I say as a motivation.They also went up.And my mother told me that this is the first and the last time she will be up there.I also told her not to talk much just slide down.My mother and my grandmother sat on the float and my brother and I pushed them slowly to the bottom.After they reached at the bottomed,my grandmother shouted at me and she say "I want to slide again".I was happy to hear that.My mother also followed along.My mother told me that it was very fun slidding down too.After they went up,the whole family slides down.A hour past,all of us felt tired.So,we also went some place that we can eat.We also stop by at beach road to eat some steak.
THE TALKING PUPILS
At Chang-ngan there lived a scholar, named Fang Tung, who though by no means destitute of ability, was a very unprincipled rake, and in the habit of following and speaking to any woman he might chance to meet.
The day before the spring festival of Clear Weather, he was strolling about outside the city when he saw a small carriage with red curtains and an embroidered awning, followed by a crowd of waiting-maids on horseback, one of whom was exceedingly pretty, and riding on a small palfrey. Going closer to get a better view, Mr. Fang noticed that the carriage curtain was partly open, and inside he beheld a beautifully dressed girl of about sixteen, lovely beyond anything he had ever seen. Dazzled by the sight, he could not take his eyes off her; and now before, now behind, he followed the carriage for many a mile. By-and-by he heard the young lady call out to her maid, and, when the latter came alongside, say to her, "Let down the screen for me. Who is this rude fellow that keeps on staring so ?" The maid accordingly let down the screen, and looking angrily at Mr. Fang, said to him, "This is the bride of the Seventh Prince in the City of Immortals going home to see her parents, and no village girl that you should stare at her thus." Then taking a handful of dust, she threw it at him and blinded him.
He rubbed his eyes and looked round, but the carriage and horses were gone. This frightened him, and he went off home, feeling very uncomfortable about the eyes. He sent for a doctor to examine his eyes, and on the pupils was found a small film, which had increased by next morning, the eyes watering incessantly all the time. The film went on growing and in a few days was as thick as a cash. On the right pupil there came a kind of spiral, and as no medicine was of any avail, the sufferer gave himself up to grief and wished for death.
He then bethought himself of repenting of his misdeeds, and hearing that the Kuang-ming sutra could relieve misery, he got a copy and hired a man to teach it to him. At first it was very tedious work, but by degrees he became more composed, and spent the whole day in a posture of devotion, telling his beads.
At the end of a year he had arrived at a state of perfect calm, when one day he heard a small voice, about as loud as a fly's, calling out from his left eye: "It's horridly dark in here." To this he heard a reply from the right eye, saying, "Let us go out for a stroll, and cheer ourselves up a bit." Then he felt a wriggling in his nose which made it itch, just as if something was going out of each of the nostrils; and after a while he felt it again as if going the other way. Afterwards he heard a voice from one eye say, "I hadn't seen the garden for a long time: the epidendrums are all withered and dead." Now Mr. Fang was very fond of these epidendrums, of which he had planted a great number, and had been accustomed to water them himself; but since the loss of his sight he had never even alluded to them. Hearing, however, these words, he at once asked his wife why she had let the epidendrums die. She inquired how he knew they were dead, and when he told her she went out to see, and found them actually withered away. They were both very much astonished at this, and his wife proceeded to conceal herself in the room. She then observed two tiny people, no bigger than a bean, come down from her husband's nose and run out of the door, where she lost sight of them. In a little while they came back and flew up to his face, like bees or beetles seeking their nests.
This went on for some days, until Mr. Fang heard from the left eye, "This roundabout road is not at all convenient. It would be as well for us to make a door." To this the right eye answered, "My wall is too thick: it wouldn't be at all an easy job."
"I'll try and open mine," said the left eye, "and then it will do for both of us." Whereupon Mr. Fang felt a pain in his left eye as if something was being split, and in a moment he found he could see the tables and chairs in the room. He was delighted at this and told his wife, who examined his eye and discovered an opening in the film, through which she could see the black pupil shining out beneath, the eyeball itself looking like a cracked pepper-corn. By next morning the film had disappeared, and when his eye was closely examined it was observed to contain two pupils. The spiral on the right eye remained as before; and then they knew that the two pupils had taken up their abode in one eye. Further, although Mr. Fang was still blind of one eye, the sight of the other was better than that of the two together. From this time he was more careful of his behavior, and acquired in his part of the country the reputation of a virtuous man.
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mr lau i am sorry because my story is too long.i wrote it for a few hours!haha.i hope you don't mind!
hello mr lau my name is biran 1f this is my story: i was walking to my friend house during the afternoon,it was unusually hot that afternoon and so i decided to get a drink at the nearby mini-mart,after i bought a drink i continued towards my friends house which was a few miles away.as i was walking towards the lift a big ,burly lokking man stood in front of me.his back was faced aginst me,like the old saying curiosity killed the cat,i decided to see what the gangster was doing.to my shock he was holding a knife and pointing it at an old man saying'give me your money or i'll stick this in you!'i was scared and slowly backed away from him,just as i was about to reach the lift i fealt someone holding on to my shoulder,i turned arounfd and saw something that i ill never forget,the burly man had stabbed the old man in the stomach and he said to me'hey kid you did not see anything,right?'.i...did.did'nt'i stammered feeling too scared too even do anything,i went into the lift and clicked level 2.just as the lift door's were closing i could see the burly man running to his friend who was on a motorcycle and rode off into the street.i quickly opened the lift door and got out,taking out my handphone and called the police and the paramedics.the police and paramedics arrived together quickly unpacking thier equipment,the paramedics lifted the old man onto a strecher and heaved the strechter onto an ambulance.the old man was on the verge of death as he had lost alot of blood on the scene.the police summoned me into a policecar and i gave them the my statement.when done the police let me gooff and i went to my friends house shaking with fright.i just stayed for 2 hours in my friends house talking to him about what happened just now. 3 days later,the news i saw something maked me feel happy and alittle bit sad,the burly man i saw had a motor accident with his friend.i went straight to the police station and old them that the burly man who was in that motor accident was the one who had robbed the old man 3 days ago,they went to the hospital with me and asked the heavily bandaged crook if he was the one who had robbed the old man 3 days ago,'it was not me,that is a liar!'the burly man shouted.'then where wre you on that day'the policeman asked.'i was on a holiday with my friend's in thailand!'the burly man lied.i whispered to the policeman'send in the old man and we might know if this guy is lying or not.'the policeman agreed readily.the policeman went to get the old man from a diffrent ward 2 stories down.the burly man said to me with a hoarse voice'listen kid i don't want to get jailed so do you mind helping me?oh and i thought you said you did not see anyhthing?!'.'i dont help criminals and you deserve this for robbing an old man!'i said smartly.the burly man looked furious but the bandages where covering it,i grin happily.a fter 3 minutes the policeman came back but this time with a nurse and the old man who was now wheel chair bound for 2 weeks.the police man asked if this was the man who had robbed you,the old clutched his chest painfully and said in cantonese yes.'looks like you'll be doing your time in jail after the wounds have healed!'the policeman said.the policeman told the nurse that she could bring the old man back to his ward for some rest and off they went.the policeman told me to follow him to the policestation he was located in and i followed since i ws'nt sur =e what he was going to do.when we reached the police station the policeman talked to the recetionist and came back with a medal i thanked the policeman but he said 'we should thank you instead,if you had not let the old man come to the ward the criminal could have away scot free!'i wore the medal until i was home and told my family everything.i putted the medal somewhere everybody could see.the i visted the criminal during my free time after a few monhs and told him not to worry,he fealt abit ashamed for what he has done.i told him'dont worry it will be alright if you are willing to repent and start anew.the criminal smiled happily at me!
They were two young couples living together since they were nursery. Both their parents died of some kind of accidents. They played together, sleep together, almost everything they did together. Their friends, teachers and other neighbours said that they were very compatible. Till one day, after Primary School Leaving Examination , they both got different score and got to the different schools as each other . Both schools were quite far away from their house so one of them decided to move out to a place which is nearer to his school and he had already found it. They both were sad to be separated with each other but they had no choices. From that day onwards, they would call each other after school and talked what has happen in the school in the Midnight of Saturday and Friday .Not long later in July, the boy started not to call the girl after school even in the Midnight. He didn’t even listen to her call. And a few days later, the number was not exist already. She wonder there must be something happening to him so she went to find him. She founded him and saw him flirting with three to four girls. She was very angry and went up to him n shouted at him “ Why didn’t you listen my calls and why did you cut off your sim card and not telling me! And now, you are flirting with girls!“ And then he replied, “ Everyone were be sick of something that is with them for long ago! I needed a new one! “ She ran off with her broken heart and her tears . By this she decided to go and find a job .She found a job working in the starbucks as a cashier . Her salary was SGD$350 per month . She hates wearing the uniforms of the working place because she thinks it is ugly . One day her boss when up to her ,”WHY DIDN’T YOU WEAR YOUR UNOFORMS AGAIN? “ she replied ,”because I find it ugly :\ “ . Her boss say “You are fired!” “FINE!” said the girl . While she was walking back home, she met a guy which is very hamesome . They both made friends and tell each other about their life. As the girl has not had a job now , she cant live in that house because of the bills .she asked the guy if he could let her stay in her house for a few days and he agreed . So she sold the house and kept the moneys for the renting moneys .When they live together ,their relationship get closer and both of them had feelings with each other .But when the day when the guy wanted to propose to her , her ex-boyfriend asked to meet her out and she agreed .She jumped for joy and was so excited for the next day to come . The guy was quite sad and thinks her ex will only make her happy. But he was curious wad he is going to ask her so he decided to follow he. When they met each other , they were like very quiet for a moment . Suddenly , the boy asked her , “ would you be my girlfriend again just like before?” The girl was shocked and the guy was worried that she would say yes but her answer make him surprised . she said “ I would want to if I can but at this moment this is too late . I have a fancy and I truly loved him . you played my feelings and did you remember what did you said that day ? “ And she walked away angrily back to her house .The guy was so happy that he quickly rush home before she reached home . He acted he was watching television but he wasn’t . behind his hand were full of red roses . And then , when chances came out , he propose to her and she said “yes “ . Soon after 1 year , they got married .They seems to be the happiest and lovable couple in the world after the day he propose .Her ex learnt a lesson and he also blessed that they would lived till their hair were purely white .
HEllo there welcome .erm......well let me introduce myself.i'm going to be 13 years old on 27 jan 2009 hehehe.I'm also a friendly guy.LOL!well ok now i'm going to share with you about my stories at london haha.well i am alsogoing to share with you about my happiness that i get from going bestest friend is Muhd Iskandar shah the same school all the way yeah....now we are in BNSS which is the Bedok North Secondary School.Same class some more......haha!
On 28 december 2008 me my family and cousin were going to London.We acctually took the biggest plane in the world which is the Airbus A380.haha!!
Well this is the Airbus A380....big huh???well lets see the pic onboard the aircraft.hehehehe......well this is the pic on board the aircraft Airbus A380!!!Cool!!at this time the plane is taxing to runway 20R if i'm not mistaken.we pilot said that we are preparing to take off and bound to London heathrow airport.Well after taxing to the following runway,the pilot slow the plane down for about 15 sec because of communicating with the control tower for the permission clearance to takeoff.Then here come the best part.The captain started to thrust the throttle to half then full!!!the plane then sped up and about 20 to 25 sec the plane lift off the runway and head to london.when the plane cruises to 39000ft the temperature is -50 to -60 deg.Cold huh?haha!Hmmm......after we passes by india,the cabin crew which is the steward and stewardess gave us dinner.
It was fantastic and the taste of the food is absolutely delicious!!!!!
After all the Tiring flight at the plane,its time for us to prepare for arrival to London Heathrow Airport.The captain told all the passenger that we are now decreased for bounding to London and arriving london shortly.They also said that they hope all the passengers enjoyed the flight and thank us for choosing singapore airline the member of star alliance.We then fastern our seat belt and prepare for landing to Heathrow Airport.
And so after we landed at London,the temperature was 11 deg.It was not so cold for us.haha!!we then leave the aircraft and headed to the outside terminal of the airport.At that moment,the time in london is 6amin the morning and it is still dark as for singapore the time is 10 to 11pm.Hmm.....It was the first time that we've been there and we were acctually blurr of the condition going on there.We are now sure how to use the Train over there.As time past,we started to getting know about using the Train there.The train there is not the same as the train at singapore
Hmm.......After we reach at the middle of london which is the city of london,we planned to the place that we wanted to go first and the lastest place.Warh!!!All the day and really everyday it was very very very very tiring day!!!!.We went to the place where harry potter acted (only the station but no harry potter there!LOL!).we also went to buckingham palace where princess diana live in.I took a picture of me and some of the guard there.It really doesn't move at all!move abit lah cold what....right?haha!i make funny faces and joke but it still didn't work.THe guard can't laugh!hehehe...We went to London bridge,Big ben (The big watch in london) , the London eye (Looks like the Singapore flyer) and Winter Wonderland (Like Escape Theme Park).
Me family togerher going to the Big ben in London.
The London eye i took.haha!It looks like The Singapore flyer.Hmm.....look!!!The weather!i was expecting that That day london will be snowing but guess wat??ANS IS!!!!NO!!!!!!!!!i was very sad buti can't do anything because all this is in gods FAte haha!!
Alrite now!Here it comes the best part ever.i Went to Stamford bridge which is the Chelsea Football Club.LOL!Cool huh??haha!well that time we didn't realized that Chelsea was versing with West brom until we asked a man.We are not sure of the ticket price but we explore only outside the stadium.i mean walk around the stadium yeah.Ok here's some PROOF!!!!!
This is me and At the stamford bridge gate and chelsea logo and beside this pic is me pretending taking the ball from Joe cole.
Well how about this??well this is me taking picture with Andrily Shevchenko (My favourite Player).
The pic beside it is a pic of Chelsea football club which is the Stamford bridge.
Well this picture is me and my brother at the Stamford bridge match sign.Chelsea vs Southend.
Well thats all!for Chelsea picture...!Now its time for us to go back to our homeland which is SINGAPORE!!!We feel very very very sad!!and will now forget the things that we have done in London.haha!hmm.....sad sad huh??After we step out of our hotel in the morning at 6am and singapore was about 10-11pm,we realize that everything was over.i mean i started counting down the days before going london but when i reach there,its time for me to count the days that i am going back to SINGAPORE what a fast year right??haizz.....!!
After we reach the airport,we check in and i was very excited because i could take the same airplane again which is the Airbus A380 LOL!After checking the boarding pass we step into
the Airbus A380 again!I seated at seat no.79A if i'm not mistaken hah....Well lets see the picture
The plane is now above SLOVAKIA The plane is now at 10000ft and crusing to 40000ft and here you can see mountains over SLOVAKIA heading to singapore
Well here the most happiness i get is riding the Airbus A380 the world largest plane in the world!
sorry about the picture sentence.just ignore it!
i was once a reach boy and i had a body guard that always follow me.i wanted to have 2 audicar 2 motorcycle an aeroplane but my father told me that i must have license so i must continue study until my age limited to take license.i was popular in school and every girl crowded around me.My body guard helped me to stop them from crowding around me but my bodyguard failed to stop them.I quickly ran towards my strecher car and went in.when i reached my school the next day,many girls stand infront of my back sit door and taking picture of me.i opened my door and they started screaming.i dashed to the hall and cover my face because i wanted to prevent from them.when the lesson started,my teacher tease me and i start to be embarrased.During recess,i must seat at the secret place because many girls always like to disturb me i was eating.Most of the boys felt really jealous when all girls crowd around me.After lesson ended,i dashed my to favourite car.When i reached home,i started doing my homework.Sometimes i ask my bodyguard to do my homework.My mother and my father always work everyday.I got really boring when my parents were not at home.The next day,it started all over again but when i walked to the hall a pretty simple girl walked pass me.I started to like her because i really like simple girl.I went to approach the girl but she ignore me.After lesson has end,i gave her a flower butshe reject it.I tried many times to get the girl attention and finally she become my Life partner.After i completed with my studies in polytechnic,i got married On the age of 26.MY attitude was totally changed.
Well that was my Love story.
This is about RUGBY. Last year my Primary School had a Rugby tournament which is categorized based on age. I am my Primary School's Rugby school team player. Like every year, i represent my school for the EAST ZONE TOURNAMENT. It was held at my Primary School which is Damai Primary School. I was elated because i was confident that this time my School would be able to come in either 1st or 2nd. Well, i was nervous too. But i had a positive attitude. To give my very best. We're were competing with a rather strong team from,CHONGZHENG PRIMARY. I believe they are good in this Rugby tournament. NOT only did i want to win but also to have fun. We were competing until we got in the finals and had to compete with CHONGZHENG to get the EAST ZONE Champions. I did my very best and so did my team mates. But CHONGZHENG won us. My School came in 2nd. I was so sad and disappointed because i wanted my SCHOOL to be the champions but at least i knew everyone did their part. I was sad because we lost to CHONGZHENG but rather happy because my friends work together as a team and we had fun during the EAST ZONE tournament. All our handwork training all that years did not go to waste because we at least got 2nd for EAST ZONE. Then we were qualified for the NATIONALS. Competing with stronger teams. But i'm happy and glad to share that my School came in 3rd for the NATIONALS. NATIONAL Champions was ST ANDREW'S, followed by ANGLO CHINESE SCHOOL, MY SCHOOL;DAMAI PRIMARY and followed by CHONGZHENG. I'm happy my SCHOOL got 3rd for NATIONALS and we won CHONGZHENG.
Hello Sir,this is Nasrullah from 1f.(34)The tittle of the story is 'A Hunted House'.
I live in a banglo. Beside it was beside a hunted house. I live in the banglo house for 3 years. No one lived in the hunted house. Every night,I always heard and saw something strange nearby that house. One day,my siblings and my parents were not at home,I decided to explore the hunted house. I knew it was dangerous but I wanted to explore. I knock on the door,no one open it. Suddenly,it open by itself. I took a glanced around the house. I felt nervous and curious. It was surrounded by spider-web. Suddenly,I heard a woman voice cried for help. She said,"Help!Help!"In malay. I was so scared. The sound came from the master bedroom. When I step in the room,I saw a girl covering her face with a blanket. When I was about to open the blanket,suddenly,the blanket flew by itself. I saw the girl face. The face was fully covered with blood,she had a long hair,white eye and no leg. The girl was floating in the air. The girl strangled my neck and I felt breathless. Someone pat on my legs. I opened my eyes and was so glad that it was a bad dream. "Hope it's not real,"I whispered to myself.
MR.CHU, THE CONSIDERATE HUSBAND
At the village of Chu in Chi-yang, there was a man named Chu, who died at the age of fifty and odd years. His family at once proceeded to put on their mourning robes, when suddenly they heard the dead man cry out. Rushing up to the coffin, they found that he had come to life again; and began, full of joy, to ask him all about it. But the old gentleman replied only to his wife, saying, "When I died I did not expect to come back. However, by the time I had got a few miles on my way, I thought of the poor old body I was leaving behind me, dependent for everything on others, and with no more enjoyment of life. So I made up my mind to return, and take you away with me."
The bystanders thought this was only the disconnected talk of a man who had just regained consciousness, and attached no importance to it; but the old man repeated it, and then his wife said, "It's all very well, but you have only just come to life; how can you die again directly?"
"It is extremely simple," replied her husband. "Go and get ready." The old lady laughed and did nothing; upon which Mr. Chu urged her again to prepare, and then she left the house.
In a short time she returned, and pretended that she had done what he wanted. "Then you had better dress," said he; but Mrs. Chu did not move until he pressed her again and again, after which she did not like to cross him, and by-and-by came out all fully equipped.
The other ladies of the family were laughing on the sly, when Mr. Chu laid his head upon the pillow, and told his wife to do likewise. "It's too ridiculous," she was beginning to say, when Mr. Chu banged the bed with his hand, and cried out, "What is there to laugh at in dying ?" upon which the various members of the family, seeing the old gentleman was in a rage, begged her to gratify his whim. Mrs. Chu then lay down alongside of her husband, to the infinite amusement of the spectators; but it was soon noticed that the old lady had ceased to smile, and by-and-by her two eyes closed.
For a long time not a sound was heard, as if she was fast asleep; and when some of those present approached to touch her, they found she was as cold as ice, and no longer brething; then, turning to her husband, they perceived that he also had passed away.
End
Hi Mr Lau. I am Nur Syahirah 1F. this is my story...
I waited silently, not daring to move, not even to breathe. I crouched behind the door, curling myself into the smallest shape possible, hoping I would not be found. Outside, the floorboards groaned in protest as the creature stalked ever closer towards me. I swallowed a huge lump in my throat, which was threatening to choke me. I waited. Suddenly, it happened.
There was nobody in my house. I am so scared because my grandma had just pass away. My grandma had a stroke that’s why my grandma died. Suddenly my handphone ring, “Ring,ring!!”. I pick up and heard a lady voice, the voice sound exactly like my grandmother. I hang up the phone and my hand was sweating. Sixty second later I heard a lady’s voice crying and shouting for help. I locked my bedroom’s door and lying on my bed and closed my eyes. I am so scard that my handphone rang again and I heard my grandmother’s voice and she said ‘ Open the door!” while she knocks on my door.
My television was automically switch on and I off it. But it was on again. I question myself “Why must I’ll be the one who suffered here!!” The question kept playing in mind. The time was already 12am.
My head was dizzy and I fell asleep. Suddenly I heard a firmiliar voice. It was my mother who was waking me up for school. I ask my mother “Mother did you go anywhere yesterday?”. My mother answered “No, yesterday we did not go anywhere.Why?”. I just smile and forget about it. I realised that it was a dream.
The End.
Name: Nur Syuhaimah Bte Mohamad
Class: 1 F
My Story…
While I was looking at my primary six class photo, I kept thinking about my classmates and I was so happy that my entire classmate passes our Primary School Leaving Examination (PSLE) except one pupil but his mark was so near to the passing marks. Five pupils could go to express stream. The rest went to normal academic and normal technical. This is my story when we work together before PSLE.
One Monday morning, I went to school and I promise that I will concentrate in my class. Four days before PSLE. When I went up to my class, my classmates were so good and very concentrate. My teacher, Mrs. Nor gives us some advised.
In the Afternoon, we got remedial. She asks us to do the practice paper that she give us while she got a meeting to attend. At 5.30 in afternoon, we were released from our class.
On Thursday is our important day because it is the last day that we must go through English. And tomorrow is our big day because it’s our English PSLE. That time, we need to study with understanding. We test each other and sometimes we got wrong. We test each other until we get it.
In the Afternoon, when we have lessons, one of our classmates was so irritating. He kept talking and talking. My teacher shouted “Shut Up!” We were so scared.
“I’m not taking PSLE, u are the one. I’m not teaching you English because lessons are over.” Then when we went downstairs, she started saying “Good Luck” to my classmates.
The next day, it is our big day. They make an announcement that my class teacher wants to see all of us. She is so nice that she gives us a pencil box and there are stationery and mathematical sets for us. Then she said that we need to concentrate and don’t look around when the exam starts if not we are considered cheating..
Hiie Mr Avlin Lau
my name is Seet fung (1)(1F)
There was a most happiest couple in one primary school.but when they recived their PSLE results. Both of them were sad, because both of them got different results.So that mean they are goin to differnt school.They were very sad.When they have chosen their secondary school, they moved away.But they still keep in touch for first few months. But after a few months both of them had known new friends. so they lost contact with each other.Both of them changed their handphone number.
But the girl Like the boy. so the girl wanted to call him again to ask him out.But the boy has changed his Hp number so there's no way the girl can contact him.But she still like him.When the girl went to school the next morning, she saw the boy. she was very shocked. But what makes her even shocked was, the boy went to the same class as the girl. the girl was so happy but the boy was very popular many girls surrounded him. That makes her jealous.But the boy has already forgotten that they was a couple once before,
because the boy liked someone else very much.
So the girl would only keep her feelings to herself. After a few years, they graduate, and never contact with each other again.
Helloh Mr.lau (: , Farwizah 1F (12)
I was only five years old when the incident happened.
It all started with a telephone call.
"Alright. We will be there now,"my mom said as she slammed the receiver down.
I knew something was wrong and switched off the computer.
"What's wrong, mom?"I asked.
"We're leaving for the hospital now.Quickly,get dressed"my mom replied,looking for her car keys and stuffing them into her handbag at the same time.I knew something bad had happened.
Withing seconds,i was on my feet and in the car racing towards the hospital."The hospital called just now.Grandpa is sick and he's heading for an operation now,"mom said as she drove.I have never seen mom drive the car in such a hurry.Suddenly,the serious look on mom's face convinced me that something bad was about to happen.We arrived at the hospital and saw dad waving to us from the main entrance.The three of us headed straight towards the operation room.We had waited for almost two hours when finally,the doctor came out of the operating theatre."Doctor,how is he doing?"my dad asked.
Grandfather had kidney failure and needed a transplant immediately.The doctor was working on the kidney transplant when grandfather suddenly had a stroke in the middle of the surgery.
"That's all I can do for him for the moment.He will need lots of care and attention when he returns home,"the doctor explained to my parents outside the operating room.
As days passed by,grandfather's condition began to stabilize.He was allowed to go home after spending a month at the hospital.All he did at home was to stay by grandmother's side and talk.Because of his condition,grandfather needed help all the time.We had to feed him,help him to the toilet,help him to shower,and even changing his clothes.It was a change of environment for both grandfather and for us.
One day,grandfather was sitting by the window in the living room looking out the window.He suddenly felt uncomfortable and called out to my mom.I was cleaning up my room when i heard my mom call.
"We are going to the hospital now,Grandfather is not feeling well,"my mom shouted across the hallway.
We called the ambulance and took grandfather to the hospital.At the hospital,my mom and i waited for dad.He arrived and shortly after,the doctor also came out of the room."You can all go in now,he does not have much time left,"the doctor said,removing the gloves from his hands.
We went into the room and saw grandfather with a mask on his face.He held each of our hands and smiled for the last time,suddenly his heart stop beating.That was when I was told by mom that grandfather would not wake up again anymore.I was five years old then and did not understand the meaning of death.
Hi Mr Lau.This is Haziq from 1F.(30).
On the December holidays,my family and I went to 'Port Dickson' that is in Malaysia.We went there by car.
When we reached there,we stayed in a 4 star hotel for 3 days and 2 nights.For the first day,we went shopping to buy some souvenirs.Such as shirts with its name on it,keychains,bags,sunglasses,caps and many more.
On the second day we woke up 10 am.We decided to go to the beach.The beach was near to our hotel.When we got there,there were so much activities.There were jet skiing,banana boats,moto boats for the people to ride.We chose the banana boat since we did not ride a banana boat before.It was our first time.It cost us 65RM.My dad said it was cheaped.
So we rode it.The water went in my eyes as it was fast as a lightning.We went island to island.
When we reached to the beach again,we changed and we went to eat at 'Ikan Bakar Stall'.The food over was great.After we ate,we went to a night market.I bought some souvenirs for my friend.
After we went to the night market,we went back to our hotel.We packed our bags so that tomorrow we need not be in such a hurry.We played card games before we went to sleep.
On the last day,I was sad because we need to go back to Singapore and also school will start soon.Before we went back,went to eat 'ice kacang'as it was a hot day.Then we went back.
When we reached home ,it was about 9 plus.I put all my stuffs,bathed and quickly went to bed.
I'm Fatin Hazirah 1F(4)
tittle:"My Life"
I was once being an active girl who love sports..I am the most active girl in the whole school.My life was always in a good mood and hardly in a bad mood.But now,my life had change..
This year I am 13 years old.
I love sports,I love anything that related to it.But now,I always faint in school,feeling giddy always and i don't know why.Until one day,my parents wanted to bring me to the clinic for a check-up.But instead they order me to go by myself as they are buzy with their work.I could'nt say anything but to follow their orders.On that day,i went to the nearest clinic which is a five minute walk.I want to register and i waited for five minutes.After five minutes,it was my turn.
After checking,the docter said.
"You have only a month left to live."
I was abacked!And in one month time my sister will be getting married!And what worse was i will not be getting to see my sister married!I went home with an upside-down smile.I was gloomy,miserable and sad.What must i say to my parents when i got bavk home?Should i tell this problems to them?I kept thinking about it.
When i got back home,my parents ask me.
"What did the docter say?"they asked me.
I told them that the docter say i must have alot of rest..
"Mum,dad,sister,I will not be here when sister get married as i'll going an exursion trip with my classmates."
I knew I was lying to them but I had no choice.
One month past.
During recess time,i felt giddy and i knew the time has come.I collapsed and the students around me were panicked.
One of my friends went to call a teacher for help.They brought me to the hospital and called my parents.
The time has come.God will take away my life.My parents came.Tears running down their cheeks.
The tone went straight in a sudden.
My life ends here.and i know my parents will be extremaly sad..
I hope they will be happy without me.
HELLO MR LAU ! Noor Hafizah here ! :D 1F , index:8 . :DD
I was walking at the park when I saw a girl surprise her friend on her birthday , i think her friend is her BESTFRIEND . I remembered once I have a BESTFRIEND , she was the bestest among the best! And I remembered what she had done for me on my birthday , the story goes like this ..
One fine Saturday morning , Ramizah , my bestfriend called .
‘’Hafizah , you want to go cycling with us at East Coast ?’’she asked me .
‘’Us? Whose the us? I replied .
‘’Ohh .. erm , a few from our Mother Tongue class and form class .’’she explained .
‘'ohh , okay sure !’’ I answered with joy .
I am dress up , ready to meet my friends on the weekend to go cycling . On that day , it was my birthday which I did not even remember because I was to stressed with my studies . I headed to east coast to meet my dear friends .
Finally , I had reached my destination . I saw Ramizah standing near a building , she only smiled until i reached where she’s standing .
''Why are we here ?! I thought we are going cycling ?! Where’s the rest ?!! '' I asked in anger .
She only smile at me .She pulled my hand and bring me in side the building , I was lost , there is still millions of questions in my mind , but I kept it to myself .
''I hope she love the surprise party that I’m throwing her, because she had once did it for me , it was a wonderful surprise! '' she whispered to herself .
When we entered the building , it was dark .I hug Ramizah’s hand as tight as I could because I was terrified .
''Why are we in here ? Can you switch on the lights ?! ''I questioned Ramizah in anger .
''SURPRISEE !!''We all shouted with joy .
I was so surprise . That I hug Ramizah as tight as possible , she can’t barely breathe .I apologised to Ramizah for being mad at her for not answering all my questions .And I also thank her for throwing this party for me , my stress are cleared .
So , that’s how the story goes . This scene is stuck in my memory until now . I’m so glad I have a friend like Ramizah .
Yo , I am sean from 1f reg no . 36
Last year , i went to taiwan with my mother , grandmother , sister and brother . We went there by plane , the plane is very big and sacious . When we reach there , mum decided to bring us to the restraunt opposite the hotel and eat , the food is very yummy . At night we went to the shopping mall and shop for many thing .The next day , we decided to go to the theme park and play , its very big and the roller coasters is very exciting . We went to the night market at night and there are many things to eat there . The next day , we prepare to go home and i pack my clothes on the morning . I was very happy when i reach singapore and my aunties and uncles came to the airport and fetch us back as my parents does not drive there .
Hi Mr.Alvin Lau My name is jimson low (22)1F
This story is about the frist time i seat on an aeroplane to Hong Kong... When I frist knew that I was going to Hong Kong with my cousin,I was so shock this was the frist time my cousin wanted me to go oversea with them.
When it was nigth the night before we are going Hong Kong my brother and I have to sleep early because ride is at 5.45a.m ,i was so overwrought of the excitement that I could not fell asleep,so I go towards the computer.
When I saw light in my brother room,I jump up with excitement knowing its time to go to the airport.I quickly shut down the computer and get ready to go!!!We seat on the plane for 7 hours.
We play there for 5 to 7 days,we know more about hong kong and get to see beautiful view that I seen ever seen...when we get back to singapore,it was late night but my brother and I could not sleep because of jet-lag =D
One day,I was playing my computer games went I here that my parents were bringing me to Paris.
I felt very excited about the news.I started packing up my belongings.My family's and I went to the airport. Went we reached there,I saw Shafiq and his family bought some flight tickets.I asked him that where is he's family going.He said that he was going to Paris too.I was surprised that both of us are going on the same trip.We sat down together in the plane.
As we where in the airplane,we were always talking about school work.He told me that he hasn't done he's art homework.I asked him to show his homework to me.When I know that he's homework was to draw a Singapore flag.I help him in the drawing.
When we reached at Paris,we were took onto a tour.My mother was so curious that she even asked the tour guide where is the market.Suddenly I go a call from Zoom HQ.My parents doesn't know that I work for Zoom HQ as a spy agent.Lead agent:Mr Zhoom said that there was a very undetectable agent who's name was:Maraqua hero. He was working for a company called King diamond.
He told me that I'm going to have a partner.When he reveal who, I was surprised.My partner was Shafiq.He told me that he was a secret agent too.But we weren't such a bad team at all.we capture lots of Maraqua hero spy's.On the third day in Paris,I called Shafiq because I had saw Maraqua selling drugs to others.Luckily we caught Maraqua by surprised.He was surrounded by me & Shafiq.He was arrested & HQ has promoted us to the top professional agents.Now all of us is saved and sound.
Currently,I am a brillant football player.I am playing for Chelsea Football Club.
One day,it was an entertaning match.It was the semi-final match Chelsea and Liverpool.I was so happy that i managed to play in the starting line up.
30 minutes later past the first half,I manage to score a magnificent goal.When the congies saw the ball going into the back of the goal post they cheered out loudly.When i hear the congies cheering,my morale boost up that my form in the game was amazing.
5 minutes past during the second half,I was given a red card for sliding my rival.I was so sad that i would be suspened for 3 matches and i could not play in the finals if we win or lose.Finally after waiting for such a long time,the refree blew the whistle.i was astonish that we won 4-1.The whole club was so happy that we were going to the finals.Our coach even Treated us to a wondres meal.After eating our meal,the coach and traniers brought in many bottles of champagne.
A month pass and to our surpise,we realised that the big games the final is tomorrow.At last,the day has arrived.It is the day where Chelsea challenge Manchester United for the UEFA Champion Leage Cup.When we arrived at the stadium,we say the field was overlaid with water.The refree had to stop the game as injuries may occur faster.They decided that the game will be in another 2 week.When i heard that i felt like i was walking on air as me suspension end in one more week so i the coach would be able to select me.
two week pass.The most animating match has come.The comantator are wondering who will win the UEFA Champion Leage cup.The first half pass and we were down 2-0.During the second half,i manage to score two goals and made it 2-2.The refree blew his whistle and said that they will be extra time. after the extra time,the socre was still the same.So it come to penaties.When the score was 4-3 i had to score the winning goal to win.After shooting the ball,i close my eyes i heard the congies cheering i open my eye and saw the ball in the back of the net.We celebrated and took the trophy and went back to our stadium.It was my finest day as i have won a medal and a trophy.
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Hi Mr.Alvin Lau My name is jimson low (22)1F
This story is about the frist time. I seat on an aeroplane to Hong Kong... When I frist knew that I was going to Hong Kong with my cousin,I was so shock this was the frist time my cousin wanted me to go oversea with them.
When it was nigth the night before we are going Hong Kong my brother and I have to sleep early because ride is at 5.45a.m ,i was so overwrought of the excitement that I could not fell asleep,so I go towards the computer.
When I saw light in my brother room,I jump up with excitement knowing its time to go to the airport.I quickly shut down the computer and get ready to go!!!We seat on the plane for 7 hours.
We play there for 5 to 7 days,we know more about hong kong.The frist day we get to check in to a four star hotel our suite was on the 22 floor when i get to our suite i frist dush in to the room then I saw the view it was impressive then after we have eaten,we get to see beautiful view that I ever seen.Day 2 and day 3 we explore Hong Kong,day 4 my favorite we went to disneyland we send a whole day there playing and feasting on food and when it was night,it was very cold i put on about 3 stirt and a jacket but it was still very cold.The 5 day we get to eat at a five star restaurent the food was very mouth teasting. The 6 day our tourguide take us to see where jackey chen live but we never see him in life but we get to see his house and the 7 day we pack our things and went to the airport...
when we get back to singapore,it was late night but my brother and I could not sleep because of jet-lag =D
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Currently, I am a brilliant football player .I am playing for Chelsea Football Club.
One day, it was an entertaining match .It was the semi-final match Chelsea and Liverpool .I was so happy that I managed to play in the starting line up.
30 minutes later past the first half, I manage to score a magnificent goal. When the congas saw the ball going into the back of the goal post they cheered out loudly. When I heard the congas cheering, my morale boost up that my form in the game was amazing.
5 minutes past during the second half, I was given a red card for sliding my rival. I was so sad that I would be suspended for 3 matches and I could not play in the finals if we win. Finally after waiting for such a long time, the referee blew the whistle. I was astonish that we won 4-1.The whole club was so happy that we were going to the finals. Our coach even treated us to a wonders meal. After eating our meal, the coach and trainers brought in many bottles of champagne.
A month pass and to our surprise, we realized that the big games the final is tomorrow .At last, the day has arrived .It is the day where Chelsea challenge Manchester United for the UEFA Champion League Cup. When we arrived at the stadium, we saw that the field was overlaid with water. The referee had to stop the game as injuries may occur faster. They decided that the game would be in another 2 week. When I heard that I felt like I was walking on air, as my suspension will end in one more week so I the coach would be able to select me.
Two week pass .The most animating match has come .The commentators are wondering who will win the UEFA Champion League cup .The first half pass and we were down 2-0.During the second half, I manage to score two goals and made it 2-2.The referee blew his whistle and said that they will be extra time. After the extra time, the score was still the same .So it come to penalties. When the score was 4-3 I had to score the winning goal to win. After shooting the ball, I close my eyes I heard the congas cheering I open my eye and saw the ball in the back of the net .We celebrated and took the trophy and went back to our stadium .It was my finest day as I have won a medal and a trophy.
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They were two young couples living together since they were nursery. Both their parents died of some kind of accidents. They played together, sleep together, almost everything they did together. Their friends, teachers and other neighbours said that they were very compatible. Till one day, after Primary School Leaving Examination , they both got different score and got to the different schools as each other . Both schools were quite far away from their house so one of them decided to move out to a place which is nearer to his school and he had already found it. They both were sad to be separated with each other but they had no choices. From that day onwards, they would call each other after school and talked what has happen in the school in the Midnight of Saturday and Friday .Not long later in July, the boy started not to call the girl after school even in the Midnight. He didn’t even listen to her call. And a few days later, the number was not exist already. She wonder there must be something happening to him so she went to find him. She founded him and saw him flirting with three to four girls. She was very angry and went up to him n shouted at him “ Why didn’t you listen my calls and why did you cut off your sim card and not telling me! And now, you are flirting with girls!“ And then he replied, “ Everyone were be sick of something that is with them for long ago! I needed a new one! “ She ran off with her broken heart and her tears . By this she decided to go and find a job .She found a job working in the starbucks as a cashier . Her salary was SGD$350 per month . She hates wearing the uniforms of the working place because she thinks it is ugly . One day her boss when up to her ,”WHY DIDN’T YOU WEAR YOUR UNOFORMS AGAIN? “ she replied ,”because I find it ugly :\ “ . Her boss say “You are fired!” “FINE!” said the girl . While she was walking back home, she met a guy which is very hamesome . They both made friends and tell each other about their life. As the girl has not had a job now , she cant live in that house because of the bills .she asked the guy if he could let her stay in her house for a few days and he agreed . So she sold the house and kept the moneys for the renting moneys .When they live together ,their relationship get closer and both of them had feelings with each other .But when the day when the guy wanted to propose to her , her ex-boyfriend asked to meet her out and she agreed .She jumped for joy and was so excited for the next day to come . The guy was quite sad and thinks her ex will only make her happy. But he was curious wad he is going to ask her so he decided to follow he. When they met each other , they were like very quiet for a moment . Suddenly , the boy asked her , “ would you be my girlfriend again just like before?” The girl was shocked and the guy was worried that she would say yes but her answer make him surprised . she said “ I would want to if I can but at this moment this is too late . I have a fancy and I truly loved him . you played my feelings and did you remember what did you said that day ? “ And she walked away angrily back to her house .The guy was so happy that he quickly rush home before she reached home . He acted he was watching television but he wasn’t . behind his hand were full of red roses . And then , when chances came out , he propose to her and she said “yes “ . Soon after 1 year , they got married .They seems to be the happiest and lovable couple in the world after the day he propose .Her ex learnt a lesson and he also blessed that they would lived till their hair were purely white .
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Currently, I am a brilliant football player .I am playing for Chelsea Football Club.
One day, it was an entertaining match .It was the semi-final match Chelsea and Liverpool .I was so happy that I managed to play in the starting line up.
30 minutes later past the first half, I manage to score a magnificent goal. When the congas saw the ball going into the back of the goal post they cheered out loudly. When I heard the congas cheering, my morale boost up that my form in the game was amazing.
5 minutes past during the second half, I was given a red card for sliding my rival. I was so sad that I would be suspended for 3 matches and I could not play in the finals if we win. Finally after waiting for such a long time, the referee blew the whistle. I was astonish that we won 4-1.The whole club was so happy that we were going to the finals. Our coach even treated us to a wonders meal. After eating our meal, the coach and trainers brought in many bottles of champagne.
A month pass and to our surprise, we realized that the big games the final is tomorrow .At last, the day has arrived .It is the day where Chelsea challenge Manchester United for the UEFA Champion League Cup. When we arrived at the stadium, we saw that the field was overlaid with water. The referee had to stop the game as injuries may occur faster. They decided that the game would be in another 2 week. When I heard that I felt like I was walking on air, as my suspension will end in one more week so I the coach would be able to select me.
Two week pass .The most animating match has come .The commentators are wondering who will win the UEFA Champion League cup .The first half pass and we were down 2-0.During the second half, I manage to score two goals and made it 2-2.The referee blew his whistle and said that they will be extra time. After the extra time, the score was still the same .So it come to penalties. When the score was 4-3 I had to score the winning goal to win. After shooting the ball, I close my eyes I heard the congas cheering I open my eye and saw the ball in the back of the net .We celebrated and took the trophy and went back to our stadium .It was my finest day as I have won a medal and a trophy.
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Hi Mr Lau I am chen wei sec1F(2)
I have a lovely and very happy family.When I am at home,my brother do their own things.My younger sister do her own things,my parents and me too.
This year my younger sister was now in primary six so she has a lot of homework.
I am very happy to have this family.
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Sorry Mr.law for posting up late.
I am Guo Si Min from 1-F (6).
I have checked my work four times First for content
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When I was young , I lived with my grandparents.My grandmother took care of me , while my grandfather supports the family. My grandmother would prepared lunches and dinner for us.My grandfather would often be back in the afternoon to have lunch with us.
When my grandfather came back for lunch,I was happy . As I could hardly see him through out the day. Afterthat,he went back to work. After lunch,I would be going to the farm with my grandmother so that I can see the animals in the farm . We would go to the farm to feed the animals with lots of healthy foods.It was a happy day.
When I grow up , I started to help my grandmother to do the house work so that my grandmother will not be so busy everyday.Every afternoon,I will be doing the house work and my grandmother would go to the farm to feed the animal and bought so healthy food home to cook for the dinner.She cook the food was so nice that I wanted to eat again.
Sometime,I will go to the farm to pet those animals . I am one of a animals love in my family. When I am feeling sad or lonely , I will go to the farm and those animals were cheer me up.
Most of all, i live with my grandparent for 6 to 7 years .I leave them because I have to start the journy of my studies but I was happy living with them for past few years.
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Hi Mr Lau,this is Kelvin(24)1F "I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it" Here it goes.
One day when it was time to go to class,the school principal said"all Primary five pupils need to stay back,i thought of many possibilities the,i also thought that some pupils did some mischievous actions in school or the shop outside our school.I was really curious about the matter,it seemed really odd.
After that i asked the teachers what happened but they kept quiet,the more i think of it the more i get frustrated.Finally,the principal said"i think that you all are curious about the matter that i asked you all to stay back?Next week,you will all be going to the floating platform in Marina Bay to celebrate Singapore's birthday,"when i heard that,i jumped and screamed as i was really excited but suddenly,i remembered that i was in the school hall and i felt really embarrassing as all the pupils and teacher looked at me.
When i went home,i screamed and jumped here and there as i really can't contain my excitement,when i went to bed i couldn't sleep at the moment i thought of the national celebration.The day came as i was going to the Marina Bay with my friends!The journey to Marina Bay was really long but it was worth it,because of the airplanes flying by and the people with parachutes came flying down it was really cool,to my shock,terrorist came and pointed their rifles at the pupils,i thought they were only performance done by the army.One terrorist shot a pupil and i was really frightened by then,a terrorist pointed a rifle at me and said"don't move a single muscle or i will shoot you"i was really afraid and was shivering.Suddenly,police came and shot the guy infront of me,after awhile,all the terrorist were taken down by the police and were arrested.I was relieved but i was badly shaken by the part where the terrorist pointed his rifle at me,i couldn't sleep a few nights as frightening images of the terrorist came before me as i close my eyes,my mum noticed the problem and took me to a physiatrist,after a few visits to the hospital i was calmed down and overcame the fear in my heart,it was an unforgettable day for me.
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i was faking the story dont believe it
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hello mr lau this is brian,this is my recount but i changed it from the previous version.this is version 1.1 class 1Fand this tory is FAKE...why would a metoer come in the frist place.mr lau just think that this story is like the 'day after tommorow' movie
the morning was unusually bright,as the moon shone,it semmed that the moon was getting closer.people started pointing and looking wisphering ear to ear.it seems it wasn't the moon but a meteor!'it's gonna pass earth' said the scientist's during a meeting where the new's was presnt.'i've never seen anything like this!' my friend exclaimed it was getting hotter as them hour's went by causing us to sweat even more.we drank bottle after bottle as we fealt so thirsty.tteacher's started taking out handkerchiefs to wipe away thier sweat.'it's getting closer it's the apocalypse!'one of my freind screamed as we watch the new's at a shop selling television set's,people started looking at him as if to say 'your right the apocalypse is here!'we had lunch in an air-conditioned cafe.
day 2'
it was even hotter than yesterday we did even want to take physical education and so the teacher cancelled it.we were relived but it was so hot the principal annouced through the p.a systemthat school would end abit earlier.i went home and saw the new's was up.thoughts raced through my mind'why is the news up so early?'i sat on the sofa and watched.'hello fellow....people of the republic...i..my name....uhhh..ok..my name is frank.ihave come all the way from germany and i speak very fluent english.the thing you have just seen is a metoerthat is heading for earth'people gasped in horror at his message.'i know it is very shocking new's to some of you but we know for sure is that in at least 8 or 7 more weeks and the earth will have perished.but we have ....come up with blueprints for this 8 or 7 weeks to develop a neuclear weapon.....to destroy the meteor but.....specail thing's will be taken care of now....as the fate of whole wold hang's in the balance.....all i know is.....if the pollution continues the earth will be.......all..i..know....when''oh know,the television lost it's signal!this is bad.'
week 3
the scientists were still developing the weapon and most of my freinds moan and groan at the terrible heat.when i went back home i took a nap and woke up around 7.p.m'evening should be dark!'i thoght,i opened my blind's and got the shock of my life,it semmed that a tremor took place when i was asleep!there was a big crack on the floor and some buildings were torn apart!there were policeman everywhere,paramedics were rushing towards the building ruin's to aid those in need while digging those buried alive in the building's rubble out.some survied with minor injuries other's were admitted to hospital.but the most shocking thing was that the sun was still up!i opened my room door only to find a deep hole at my living room window!i shouted for my parent's but they were no where in sight.i looked in every bedroom but no one was there!i thought to myself maybe they already got to safer ground already'i was happy for my family,i ran down to find policeman nearing me and dragging toward's and army truck.i asked one of the survivor's amd he told me we were heading to a refugee camp in indonesia .the sun was still up so i asked him why and he told me why'the earth has 'cough'has stopped moving'i froze at the new's and kept quiet for the journey that woulf take 5 day's
week 5
only 2 more week's before the meteor come's.i was reunited with my family and we cahtted before nighttime even though the sun was still up.we watched a big television and it show's that the scientist's were almost done with thier weapon.we were very excited but not for long as the next new's shocked us.'everybody must collect as much food and water as fast as you can as and on all air-conditioner's or fans to keep the place cool as temperatur will rise from 26 degree's to 40 degree's celscuis for the next few week's until the meteor is destroyed.
week 7,day of weapon launch.
everybody crossed thier finger's as the meteor slowly approced earth for destruction.'now launch!!!!!!!do i press the button now!!!!'scientist frank shouted through the television on the day of weapon launch.the missle's aim was true,it hit the meteor and it blew up sending asteroids the size of mice to fall onto the earth evrybody was happy.the day of suffering was over!!!!everybody was in joy but the earth stood still,only to find it continued rotating after 2 day's.new's reporter's asked scientist's 'why did the earth stop and why was there a meteor?'scientist frank awnsered'that is a question i cannot quite awnser'laughing heartily at the question and walking away.'maybe god want's us prepared!'anoter scientist awnsered
'we will find out the anwser sooner or later!'scientist frank said with a smile and a laugh.
Hi Mr. Lau this Si Jia(15) from 1F (version 1.1).
Some years ago,I went to Malaysia with my parents and some of my good friends. We went there by a travelling bus,we talked and played while on the way to there so we would not get bored as it was a long distance from Singapore.
After we got down to the bus,we went to a hotel to check in,then we went to our rooms excitedly,we seperated into our rooms as we have been in the bus for a long time.
Next,we played hide-and-seek at the corridors outside the hotel rooms as I was too excited playing the game, I hide inside the emergency exit,closing the door.
By the time I wanted to came out by the door,the door had been locked by itself.I tried to call for help but no one was there.I became very nervous and do not know what to do,but I tried to cool down to think of a way,so I kept running down the staircase till the ground floor.
Fortunately,the emergency exit at the ground floor was opened,so I quickly ran to a lift and went to the floor where my room is.When I get to the floor,I saw my parents,they looked very worry and said,"Where have you gone?"I did not said a word,I just hug them and burst into tears loudly.
Since this incident,it does not ruin the tour,we still enjoy ourselves at there before we went back to Singapore.(259 words)
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I yawned as I looked at the whiteboard with my sleepy face and I tried to pay attention."Nisa! Do you know the answer to this question?" My teacher asked with a fierce look on his face. Then I replied,"I don't know Sir." The teacher then quickly shouted at me to go to detention after class.
After class, I walked to the detention room. "Sit!" shouted the teacher-in-charge. "Whatever," I said,under my breath. I sat down on my chair and rested my head on the table. I knew I have to stop myself from sleeping as I could speak about my dreams. But my eyes couldn't stand it. Soon after, I slept.
"What do you think you're doing there,young man?"
I was once a girl who wrote brilliant love stories.Everyone around the world were fascinated by my extrodinary imagination of love. I knew I was famous as I could see people engrossed in reading my book and some were crying tears of joy to have met me.
I was surprised when superstars came to me and asked me for my autograph.Even one of my favourite actors like Brett harrison were asking me for my autograph.
My first book that made everyone cried was called, "I fell in love with a princess," I didn't thought that I could be a famous writer. Everyone crowded around me asking,"How can you write such an amazing book like this?".But some wanted to make a ridiculous deal with me saying "Hey famous-writer. I tell you what.If you tell everyone that I was the one wrote that book.I will give you one million dollars."
I was invited to all sort of parties.Clubs,Restaurants,Birthday parties. I felt so happy to be known.
As time goes by, My book then was published to all the book stores worldwide.America,London,India,
Malaysia,Indonesia,Australia.I was a millionare. By then I knew that nothing can stop me from writing my most exciting love stories.
"RRIIINGGG!!!"
"Ok superstars,You're dismissed!"shouted my teacher.I woke up as soon as I heard the loud bell.I looked up and everyone was packing up their things. Out of the blue,when of them came to me and said,"Nice dream. I hope you'd get it one day!" laughed a girl walking away."So Nisa, dreaming of becoming a writer,eh? Well,let me tell you something.I was a writer too actually. A famous one. Come and I shall tell you about it." said my teacher.
Soon after that, The teacher told me how she became a writer. It was fascinating though, I had to stay back for another hour to listen to her story about how she wrote about goats.
I learned a lesson.Never sleep in class because you may end up listening to a fascinating story about goats from your worst teacher.
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Here the story goes..
When I was still little,my parents took me to a place called "Snowcity".I was young and did not know much of that place.So I went there with my parent,sister,brother and my grandparents.
When I was there ,I can feel that the lobby was warm.My mother quickly bought the tickets.By my brother's facial expression, I can see that he is very excited.I'm so curious to see what's inside.
After my mother bought the tickets,we were brought inside to wear a thick jacket and a pair of gloves.
My brother and I wore it quickly so that we can go in faster.When my feet touched inside,I can feel that the tempreture was very cold.When I went inside I saw a very long slope.I also saw many people are sliding down the slope with a float.My brother quickly pull me and said "let's go up and slide".I was scared at the first time so I dared myself.
After walking up the long stairs,the slope was just beside me.So,I took one float and put it at down.I also sit at the float while holding my brother's hand beside me.And then two people incharge there slowly pushes us down.Suddenly when I was sliding,I can feel the cool breeze blowing at me.After we get to the bottom,I realised that it was fun and not scared.
My mother and my grandmother was there.They were scared of sliding down the slope.So I encouraged them.I told them that when you were up there you were scared but when you were sliding it is fun.My mother and my grandmother took that words I say as a motivation.They also went up.And my mother told me that this is the first and the last time she will be up there.
I also told her not to talk much just slide down.My mother and my grandmother sat on the float and my brother and I pushed them slowly to the bottom.After they reached at the bottomed,my grandmother shouted at me and she say "I want to slide again".I was happy to hear that.My mother also followed along.
My mother told me that it was very fun slidding down too.After they went up,the whole family slides down.A hour past,all of us felt tired.So,we also went some place that we can eat.We also stop by at beach road to eat some steak.
I am yichew frm class 1F . Version 1.1 :] !
They were two young couples living together since they were nursery. Both their parents died of some kind of accidents. They played together, sleep together, almost everything they did together. Their friends, teachers and other neighbours said that they were very compatible. Till one day, after Primary School Leaving Examination , they both got different score and got to the different schools as each other . Both schools were quite far away from their house so one of them decided to move out to a place which is nearer to his school and he had already found it. They both were sad to be separated with each other but they had no choices. From that day onwards, they would call each other after school and talked what has happen in the school in the Midnight of Saturday and Friday
Not long later in July, the boy started not to call the girl after school even in the Midnight. He didn’t even listen to her call. And a few days later, the number was not exist already. She wonder there must be something happening to him so she went to find him. She founded him and saw him flirting with three to four girls. She was very angry and went up to him n shouted at him “ Why didn’t you listen my calls and why did you cut off your sim card and not telling me! And now, you are flirting with girls!” And then he replied, “ Everyone were be sick of something that is with them for long ago! I needed a new one!” She ran off with her broken heart and her tears .
By this she decided to go and find a job .She found a job working in the starbucks as a cashier . Her salary was SGD$350 per month . She hates wearing the uniforms of the working place because she thinks it is ugly . One day her boss when up to her ,”WHY DIDN’T YOU WEAR YOUR UNOFORMS AGAIN?” she replied , “because I find it ugly” . Her boss say “You are fired!” “FINE!” shouted the girl .
While she was walking back home, she met a guy which is very handsome, cute and stunning . They both made friends and tell each other about their life. As the girl has not had a job now , she cant live in her house because of the bills .she asked the guy if he could let her stay in her house for a few days and he agreed . So she sold the house and kept the money for the renting moneys.
When they live together, their relationship get closer and both of them had feelings with each other. But when the day when the guy wanted to propose to her , her ex-boyfriend asked to meet her out and she agreed .She jumped for joy and was so excited for the next day to come . The guy was sad and thinks her ex will only make her happy. But he was curious wad he is going to ask her so he decided to follow her.
When they met each other, they were quiet for a moment. Suddenly, the boy asked her , “ would you be my girlfriend again just like before?” The girl was shocked and the guy was worried that she would say yes but her answer make him surprise. She said “ I would want to if I can but at this moment this is too late. I have a fancy and I truly loved him. You played my feelings and did you remember what did you said that day ?” And she walked away angrily back to her house .The guy was so happy that he quickly rush home before she reached home. He acted he was watching television but he wasn’t. Behind his hand were full of red roses. And then, when chances came out, he propose to her to be his girlfriend and she said “yes”. Soon after 1 year , they got married .They seems to be the happiest and lovable couple in the world after the day he propose .Her ex learnt a lesson and he also blessed that they would lived till their hair were purely white .
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When I was helping my friend to upgrade his Dell laptop,I wonder what component to upgrade first,firstly I upgrade the RAM,after I discharged static electricity out of my body,loosen the screws and replaced the RAM,when I power on the laptop,it reported one gigabyte of RAM was installed
Secondly,I replaced the hard drive,since there are no operating system,I install the operating system on to the hard drive,then recover his data and program back to the hard drive
After helping my friend,my friend thank me and gave me a reward and I relax until another friend ask me for help.
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Hi Mr Lau. I am Nur Syahirah 1F. this is my story... This is my version 1.1
I waited silently, not daring to move, not even to breathe. I crouched behind the door, curling myself into the smallest shape possible, hoping I would not be found. Outside, the floorboards groaned in protest as the creature stalked ever closer towards me. I swallowed a huge lump in my throat, which was threatening to choke me. I waited. Suddenly, it happened.
There was nobody in my house. I am so scared because my grandma had just pass away. My grandma had a stroke that’s why my grandma died. Suddenly my handphone rang, “Ring,ring!!”. I pick up and heard a lady voice, the voice sound exactly like my grandmother. I hang up the phone and my hand was sweating. Sixty second later, I heard a lady’s voice crying and shouting for helped. I locked my bedroom’s door and lying on my bed and closed my eyes. I am so scarded that my handphone rang again and I heard my grandmother’s voice and she said “ Open the door!” while she knocks on my door.
My television was automically switch on and I off it. But it was on again. I question myself “Why must I’ll be the one who suffered here!!” The question kept playing in mind. The time was already 12am.
My head was dizzy and I fell asleep. Suddenly I heard a firmiliar voice. It was my mother who was waking me up for school. I asked my mother “Mother did you go anywhere yesterday?”. My mother answered “No, yesterday we did not go anywhere.Why?”. I just smile and forget about it. I realised that it was a dream.
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HELLO ! Noor Hafizah here:D (8).1F
I was walking at the park when I saw a girl surprise her friend on her birthday , i think her friend is her bestfriend . I remembered once I have a bestfriend , she was the bestest among the best! And I remembered what she had done for me on my birthday , the story goes like this ..
One fine Saturday morning , Ramizah , my bestfriend called .
‘Hafizah , you want to go cycling with us at East Coast ?’she asked me .
‘Us? Whose the us?’ I replied .
‘Ohh .. erm , a few from our Mother Tongue class and form class .’she explained .
‘ohh , okay sure !’ I answered with joy .
I am dress up , ready to meet my friends on the weekend to go cycling . On that day , it was my birthday which I did not even remember because I was to stressed with my studies . I headed to east coast to meet my dear friends .
Finally , I had reached my destination . I saw Ramizah standing near a building , she only smiled until i reached where she’s standing .
'Why are we here ?! I thought we are going cycling ?! Where’s the others ?!! ' I asked in anger .
She only smiled .She pulled my hand and bring me in side the building , I was lost ,I did not know what was going on , there is still millions of questions in my mind , but I kept it to myself .
'I hope she love the surprise party that I’m throwing for her, because she had once did it for me , it was a wonderful surprise! '' Ramizah whispered.
When we entered the building , it was dark .I hold Ramizah’s hand as tight as I could because I was terrified .
'Why are we in here ? Can you switch on the lights ?! 'I questioned Ramizah in anger .
'SURPRISEE !!!'We all shouted with joy .
I was surprised .
That I hug Ramizah as tight as possible , she can’t barely breathe .I apologised to Ramizah for being mad at her for not answering all my questions .And I also thank her for throwing this party for me , my stress are gone .
So , that’s how the story goes . This scene is stuck in my memory until now . I’m so glad I have a friend like Ramizah .
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Rasinah(15)1F
This story about me when I was in primary school last year. It was very scared and happening year because last year is an important year to me. My primary school leaving examination last year is well done because I did very well and my aggregate score is 178 and my parent is very proud of me. It was surprising because I am not very good at Math suddenly I got C for it.
My teacher and friend, congratulate me for my very best try to pass my primary school leaving examination (PSLE). The sad thing is that I did know which school my friends goes because after I got my PSLE results I did meet them at all.
All my friend last year was very kind and helpful because if I do not know about my homework or project they will help me with it. After a few days ,my parent will bought me a hand phone. I was so surprise to know that they bought me a present .
The decision to make which school I wanted to join. My first choice is Bendemeer Sec because it is not my decision and the decision is made up of my brother and his wife.
When the day of which school I join, I was very sad because I had join Bedemeer. My parent transfer me to Bedok North because it is near to my cousin house and easy for me to go home.The result for when I need to go to this school is fast, I was happy because the next day is the opening of school I cry with happiness because I could not believe it.(285 words)
Rozalia Rosli(16)1F
It was in the June holidays. My family and I had plans to go on a holiday trip in London. My parents have already booked a hotel and air line tickets for the trip. It was just a few days more before the big day arrives which is going to London.
I was delighted when I just found out a few weeks ago about the holiday trip. But not now as I already know that I will not have the one and only chance that is to go to Holiday trip.
My passport had expired but I don’t know about it until my mother was packing up some clothes in a few luggage a week before the trip. Beside her was a stack of passports. I went to her to help her out in the packing. When I am done, I take a look at my passport and turn to a page where it shows my particulars. I accidently take a glance at the due date of the passport. I was shock that the date that was stated as the expiry date. ”My passport has expired!”, I shouted. My mother who was just beside also shocked. ”Are you sure?”, my mother asked me?.
I showed her the particulars page and pointed at the expiry date of the passport. Few minutes later my father reach home from his working place. My mother told my father the situation that the family is in. My father took a few minutes to make decision whether to go to the trip to London. He told me the decision he had made was to leave me alone with my neighbour.
I respect my father’s decision. I decided not to disappoint my small sister by assuring my parents and my small sister that I would be fine alone with my neighbour. It was the most sadness part of my life that I had ever experience.(318 words)
Cloris Oh(03) from 1F. I have redo
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The scorching sun shone into the classroom. We could hardly concentrate on our studies with the unbearably heat. We tried our best to concentrate with our homework that had just been given out a few minutes ago.
“RING!! Finally!! It's recess time." I claimed to my friends while rubbing my tummy. I began sweating as I walk to the canteen.
I then realized a girl sitting by the staircase with her head down. First I asked her what’s her name. She said her name was Ashley. I could recognize her as she was one of the top student who A’s the exams. Then I questioned her what had happened. She exclaimed that her mother was ill a few days ago, and she could not afford to pay for her mother hospitality bills as she had came from a underprivileged family. She begged me for an advice, but when I put myself in her shoes, I would seek for the principle’s help.
I ran as fast as I could to the General Office to seek for the principle and told the principle that a girl wanted to speak to him. I told my principle where the girl was. The girl voice out what had happened. My principle had considered about it, and would contribute the sum of money to Ashley. Gladly, she had the sum of money to settle the hospitality.
I had almost forgotten about recess. “RINGG!!” The bell had just gone. Recess was over, and I had not even take a quick bite, my stomach was growling loudly and I felt embarrassed. "Is it a crime to be hungry?" I grumbled as I went up the stairs, to my classroom.
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Cloris Oh(03) from 1F
*version 1.1*
The scorching sun shone into the classroom. We could hardly concentrate on our studies with the unbearably heat. We tried our best to concentrate with our homework that had just been given out a few minutes ago.
“RING!! Finally!! It's recess time." I claimed to my friends while rubbing my tummy. I began sweating as I walk to the canteen.
I then realized a girl sitting by the staircase with her head down. First I asked her what her name is. She said her name was Ashley. I could recognize her as she was one of the top students who A’s the exams. Then I questioned her what had happened. She exclaimed that her mother was ill a few days ago, and she could not afford to pay for her mother hospitality bills as she had came from an underprivileged family. She begged me for an advice, but when I put myself in her shoes, I would seek for the principle’s help.
I ran as fast as I could to the General Office to seek for the principle and told the principle that a girl wanted to speak to him. I told my principle where the girl was. The girl voice out what had happened. My principle had considered about it, and would contribute the sum of money to Ashley. Gladly, she had the sum of money to settle the hospitality.
I had almost forgotten about recess. “RINGG!!” The bell had just gone. Recess was over, and I had not even take a quick bite, my stomach was growling loudly and I felt embarrassed. "Is it a crime to be hungry?" I grumbled as I went up the stairs, to my classroom.
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Hi Mr Lau I am Ajrun A'zhim from
1F.
Last year on 10 December 2008,I went to Genting Highland with my family.At there was so cold and so many people too.When I reach there,
I need to wear thick clothes and pants.I stayed first world hotel three days two night.
Over there have many fun and exciting games.I played the indoor
games.My height must be more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre to play the games.I can played the games because my height was more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother could not played the games because his height was less than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother was so sad because he could not played the games.My mother bought some sweets for him to make him felt happy.I played many indoor games at there.It was so fun and exciting.
After playing all the indoor games,I felt sleepy and tired.So I went back to first world hotel to sleep but before I sleep,I need to bathe first to clean myself.After bathing I went to bed to sleep.
The next day,I played the outdoor games.The outdoor games was extreme because it have roller coaster,ferris wheel and many more.
I prefer playing outdoor games than indoor games.I like to play flying coaster.The game was like roller coaster.
After playing the indoor and the outdoor games,I enjoyed myself at there.I hope I get to go to Genting Highland again.
THE END(256 words)
Version 1.1
Name: Nur Syuhaimah Bte Mohamad
Class: 1 F
My Story…
While I was looking at my primary six class photo, I kept thinking about my classmates and I was so happy that my entire classmate passes our Primary School Leaving Examination (PSLE) except one pupil but his mark was so near to the passing marks. Five pupils could go to express stream. The rest went to normal academic and normal technical. This is my story when we work together before PSLE.
One Monday morning, I went to school and I promise that I will concentrate in my class. Four days before PSLE. When I went up to my class, my classmates were so good and very concentrate. My teacher, Mrs. Nor gives us some advised.
In the Afternoon, we got remedial. She asks us to do the practice paper that she give us while she got a meeting to attend. At 5.30 in afternoon, we were released from our class.
On Thursday is our important day because it is the last day that we must go through English. And tomorrow is our big day because it’s our English PSLE. That time, we need to study with understanding. We test each other and sometimes we got wrong. We test each other until we get it.
In the Afternoon, when we have lessons, one of our classmates was so irritating. He kept talking and talking. My teacher shouted “Shut Up!” We were so scared.
“I’m not taking PSLE, u are the one. I’m not teaching you English because lessons are over.” Then when we went downstairs, she started saying “Good Luck” to my classmates.
The next day, it is our big day. They make an announcement that my class teacher wants to see all of us. She is so nice that she gives us a pencil box and there are stationery and mathematical sets for us. Then she said that we need to concentrate and don’t look around when the exam starts if not we are considered cheating.. (336 words)
The End!
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Hi Sir,
this is my version 1.1.
I was always ignored at work.Everyone despise me. I am always alone in the corner with no friends.Everyone despise me because i was not rich.They do not want to be friends with me because i cannot buy all the branded stuff that they have.My childhood was not that great either.My parents divorced,i lived with my abusive mother because my father did not have enough income to take careof me.But all of that was about to change.
One day,a fair,tall beautiful lady named Rosalie as that of an angel stepped into the office.I was captivated by her beauty.There was just this calming aura around her.The ladies in my office was jealous her. Some tried to ask her out on a date,but she rejected.After a few weeks,I think she realised that i was lonely and i had no friends,she started to approach me.I was on cloud nine.
This set some tounges wagging.Suddenly,i realized that i had fallen in love with her.We started going out,and I confessed my feelings to her.From that night onwards,she stopped calling me and talking to me.I have lost all hope to search for happiness.At work,she avoided me as much as she can.my heart was shattered into a million pieces.
But lady luck was smiling on me,a few weeks after that,she started talking to me again.She said that she just could not accept the fact that I liked her.But she just wanted to try this another time.After a few other dates,she said that she liked me and she did not care that i was not that rich because she thinkd that wealth does not matter because to her it does not bring the happiness in her life.She believed that being wealhty helps to give problems too.After a few months of planning,we decided to get married.At last,the auspicious day came.At that point of time i was overjoyed.And i thought to myself,now i know what happiness means.
from: Nur Dina Dianah (09)
1F.
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NAME: TEY LEE ER(20)
CLASS: 1F
I have redo.
When I was young , I live with my grandmother. My grandmother took care of me almost half of her life.
I still remember was I was in Malaysia , my grandmother told me my mother and brother are coming to Malaysia to visit me. And I wait outside the gate for very long. I didn't had my breakfast , lunch and dinner. i was just foolish standing there waiting. Then around 8 plus, my grandmother told me my mother and brother are not coming because my mother is busy. I'm so disappointed.
From that day onwards , I everyday will help my grandmother to sweep the floor , mop the floor. I still know how to cook some delicious dishes to let my grandmother taste it. After few years , my mother suddenly come Malaysia and say want to bring me back to Singapore. I didn't want. But I was force. Every year I will go back to Malaysia and look for my grandmother , let her taste my cooking. Last year , she say , my cooking has improve a lot.
NAME: TEY LEE ER(20)
CLASS: 1F
I have redo.
I paste wrongly.
This then correct.
When I was immature , I subsist with my grandmother. My grandmother took care of me almost half of her life.
I still remember was I was in Malaysia , my grandmother told me my mother and brother are coming to Malaysia to frequent me. And I wait outside the gate for very long. I didn't had my breakfast , lunch and dinner. i was just foolish standing there waiting.
Then around 8 plus, my grandmother told me my mother and brother are not coming because my mother is busy. I'm so saddened.
From that day onwards , I everyday will help my grandmother to sweep the floor , mop the floor. I still know how to cook some especially to the taste dishes to let my grandmother taste it. After few years , my mother suddenly come Malaysia and say want to bring me back to Singapore. I didn't want.
But I was force. Every year I will go back to Malaysia and look for my grandmother , let her taste my cooking. Last year , she say , my cooking has become better a lot.
Hi Mr. Lau this Si Jia(15) from 1F (version 1.2).
Some years ago,I went to Malaysia with my parents and some of my good friends. We went there by a travelling bus,we chitchated and played while on the way to there so we would not get spiritless as it was a far-reaching distance from Singapore.
After we got down to the bus,we went to a hotel to check in,then we went to our rooms excitedly,we scattered into our rooms as we have been in the bus for a long time.
Next,we played hide-and-seek at the corridors outside the hotel rooms as I was too agitated playing the game, I hide inside the emergency exit,closing the door.
By the time I wanted to came out by the door,the door had been grapple by itself.I constanted to holler for help but no one was there.I became very apprehensive and do not know what to do,but I tried to cool down to think of a way,so I kept running down the staircase till the ground floor.
Fortunately,the emergency exit at the ground floor was permitted,so I briskly ran to a lift and went to the floor where my room was.When I parlay to the floor,I saw my parents,they glanced me very concerned and declared,"Where have you gone?"I did not said a word,I just bear hug them and burst into blubber loudly.
Since this circumstance,it does not atrophy the tour,we still adore ourselves at there before we went back to Singapore.(261 words)
version 1.2
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Currently, I am a brilliant football player .I am playing for Chelsea Football Club.
One day, it was an entertaining match .It was the semi-final match Chelsea and Liverpool .I was overjoyed that I managed to play in the starting line up.
30 minutes later past the first half, I manage to score a magnificent goal. When the congas saw the ball going into the back of the goal post they cheered out loudly. When I heard the congas cheering, my morale boost up that my form in the game was amazing.
5 minutes past during the second half, I was given a red card for sliding my rival. I was so sad that I would be suspended for 3 matches and I could not play in the finals if we win. Finally after waiting for such a long time, the referee blew the whistle. I was astonish that we won 4-1.The whole club was so happy that we were going to the finals. Our coach even treated us to a wonders meal. After eating our meal, the coach and trainers brought in many bottles of champagne.
A month pass and to our surprise, we realized that the big games the final is tomorrow .At last, the day has arrived .It is the day where Chelsea challenge Manchester United for the UEFA Champion League Cup. When we arrived at the stadium, we saw that the field was overlaid with water. The referee had to stop the game as injuries may occur faster. They decided that the game would be in another 2 week. When I heard that I felt like I was walking on air, as my suspension will end by the next week so I the coach would be able to select me.
Two week pass .The most animating match has come .The commentators are wondering who will win and take back the UEFA Champion League cup .The first half pass and we were down 2-0.During the second half, I manage to score two goals and made it 2-2.The referee blew his whistle and said that they will be extra time. After the extra time, the score was still the same .So it come to penalties. When the score was 4-3 I had to score the winning goal to win. After shooting the ball, I close my eyes after a while, I heard the congas cheering I open my eye and saw the ball in the back of the net .We celebrated and took the trophy and went back to our stadium .It was my finest day as I have won a medal and a trophy and help the club to win the title.
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jordan(24) word count (445 words)
version 1.3
Sorry i have publish this work but forgot to change the verion
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Currently, I am a brilliant football player .I am playing for Chelsea Football Club.
One day, it was an entertaining match .It was the semi-final match Chelsea and Liverpool .I was overjoyed that I managed to play in the starting line up.
30 minutes later past the first half, I manage to score a magnificent goal. When the congas saw the ball going into the back of the goal post they cheered out loudly. When I heard the congas cheering, my morale boost up that my form in the game was amazing.
5 minutes past during the second half, I was given a red card for sliding my rival. I was so sad that I would be suspended for 3 matches and I could not play in the finals if we win. Finally after waiting for such a long time, the referee blew the whistle. I was astonish that we won 4-1.The whole club was so happy that we were going to the finals. Our coach even treated us to a wonders meal. After eating our meal, the coach and trainers brought in many bottles of champagne.
A month pass and to our surprise, we realized that the big games the final is tomorrow .At last, the day has arrived .It is the day where Chelsea challenge Manchester United for the UEFA Champion League Cup. When we arrived at the stadium, we saw that the field was overlaid with water. The referee had to stop the game as injuries may occur faster. They decided that the game would be in another 2 week. When I heard that I felt like I was walking on air, as my suspension will end by the next week so I the coach would be able to select me.
Two week pass .The most animating match has come .The commentators are wondering who will win and take back the UEFA Champion League cup .The first half pass and we were down 2-0.During the second half, I manage to score two goals and made it 2-2.The referee blew his whistle and said that they will be extra time. After the extra time, the score was still the same .So it come to penalties. When the score was 4-3 I had to score the winning goal to win. After shooting the ball, I close my eyes after a while, I heard the congas cheering I open my eye and saw the ball in the back of the net .We celebrated and took the trophy and went back to our stadium .It was my finest day as I have won a medal and a trophy and help the club to win the title.
the end
jordan(24) word count (445 words)
Rafizah(14)1F
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“Fire, fire“ my neighbour screamed. It was five in the morning and me and my family were asleep. When we sound asleep, my neighbour suddenly knock on my door. Then I smell something burning, when I look downstairs below my storey there was a big fire and thick smoke coming out through the window. We all were told to get out of the flat immediately.
“Somebody call the fire engine” one of my neighbour shouted. ”I’m exhausted when can we went to bed”, said my neighbour upstairs in a sleepy voice.Ten minutes later, the fire engine, police and the ambulance came. When the fire was put out, we were all relieved. The ambulance came to check that everybody is save.
What cause the fire was that Tina and her family was sleeping then her grandmother when to boil water in the middle of the night and then she forget to turn off the gas. Then the fire became bigger and all of her house was burn. They don’t scold the grandmother as they know that she was old and always forgot.
Then we finally when to sleep .But the next day we don’t go to school or work as at night or middle of the night we watch to fire fighter put out the fire.(215 words)
Hello Mr.Lau this is my version of 1.2
I was once a girl who wrote brilliant love stories. Everyone around the world were facinated by my extrodinary imagination. But some were even inspired by me. And that's exactly what I wanted to be. Inspiration.
People thinked that I was just a famous writer and just wanted a rich life. But they were wrong. My real goal was to reach out to other people's heart. Try to understand their feelings,inspire them to move on.
As I wrote more books, and more books were published.More fans were inspired. I was invited to all kind of shows to tell them about what told me to write my love stories. And I told them, "The thing that inspired me to wrote these love stories are no other than my fans and my family."
Besides inspiring my fans, I wanted to tell them a message. A message that will be in their mind forever.And the message was, "To overcome all obstacles of love, is just to cherish and not let go of your trust in that someone."
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word count: 132
Hi Mr.Alvin Lau My name is jimson low (22)1F
version 1.3
This story is about the first time. I seat on an aeroplane to Hong Kong... When I first knew that, I was going to Hong Kong with my cousin,I was so shock because this was the first time my cousin wanted me to go oversea with them.
When it was nigth, the night before we are going Hong Kong my brother and I have to sleep early because ride is at 5.45a.m ,I was so overwrought of the excitement that I could not go to sleep,so I go towards the computer.
When I saw light in my brother room,I jump up with excitement knowing its time to go to the airport.I quickly shut down the computer and get ready to go!!!We seat on the plane for 7 hours.
We went there for 5 to 7 days and we know more about hong kong.The first day we get to check in to a four star hotel our suite was on the 22 floor when I get to our suite, I frist dush in to the room then I saw the view it was impressive then after we have eaten,we get to see beautiful view that I never seen before.Day 2 and day 3 we explore Hong Kong,day 4 my favorite we went to disneyland we spend a whole day there playing and feasting on food and when it was night,it was very cold I put on about 3 stirt and a jacket but it was still very cold.Day 5 we get to eat at a five star restaurent the food was very mouth teasting. The 6 day our tourguide take us to see where jackey chen live. We never see him in life but we get to see his house and the 7 day we pack our things and went to the airport...
When we get back to singapore,it was late night but my brother and I could not sleep because of jet-lag =D
word count(333 words)
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Hi Mr.Lau i am kelvin lee(24)1F
This is my version 1.2
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One day when it was time to go to class,the school principal said"all Primary five pupils need to stay back,"i thought that some pupils had done some mischievous things in school or the shop outside our school.I was really curious about the matter,it seemed really odd.
When we were making our way up the hall,some pupils argued and fought each other,they suddenly fell and rolled down the stairs,they were seriously injured and was sent to the hospital after that we just went up the hall.After a few minutes as the teachers are settling us down,the principal finally spoke"i guess you are all thinking why i asked u to stay back but not the other levels,because you are all going to the Marina Bay floating platform to celebrate National Day Parade!!!!"i can't contain my excitement and shouted"YAY!"many pupils and teachers were looking at me,i felt really embarrassed.
After school,my friends and i went to the hospital to visit my friend who fought at the stairs,while making our way to the room unit that my friend is staying in we saw a dark figure looking at us from behind,we fasten up our pace and he followed we ran as fast as our legs could carry us.Suddenly,something grabbed me from behind and said some strange words and disappeared,i felt unwell after the visit to the hospital,i went back home and bathed i felt really good as everything was peaceful and quiet.To my surprise,i heard a loud screech and felt really scared and the hairs on my arm stood up,i went to sleep after that although i felt really uneasy i saw a huge dark figure standing by the lamp post outside the my window and i ignored it,when i close my eyes,fightening images of the dark figure flashed through my mind but i went to sleep unknowingly.These few days after the dark figure appear i had high fever and stayed in the hospital for a few days and missed the National Parade,my mum took me to a priest to ask what happened and he told my mum that i haunted by a ghost,he exorcised the evil spirit and i stopped having fever and everything went smoothly but i won't forget the dark figure.
i made up the stories don't believe it
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Hi Mr.Lau this is my version of 1.3
Love. People might say that writers who wrote about love are addicted to love. They might also say that some writers have no life and just wanted to make money with their ability to write love stories.This is my story.
I was once a girl who wrote brilliant love stories.Everyone around the world were fascinated by my imagination of love.I could make any stories with love.
I could make my fans cry,laugh,angry,dissapointed with just a snap of my finger. All the writers of love were all jealous with my enormous sum of fans that I had.But I didn't care. What matters most is that I had people to support in what I loved to do. Write love stories.
I knew somehow that I must not give up in what I loved to do.My books were published to my fans worldwide.I wanted my books to be known to the world. Not that I wanted to be arrogant.I wanted my fans to know more about me. How I express my feelings towards love. My stories about love.
And that is why I wrote another book that was based about me.
It was about my passion,my true expression towards love. And,it turned out to be the best selling book in the history. My fans were proud of me. My parents were proud of me. But most importantly,I was proud of myself.
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word count:242
Hi Sir ..
i want to tell you how i love chocolate ..
this is my version 1.0
Chocolate, how I love you, let me recount the ways you have pleased my palette, and allowed my olfactory senses to rise to new levels of awareness. But which chocolate is my favorite? I love so many; it is hard to choose between them all. It might be the chocolate chips straight out of the bag or the chocolate fudge that keeps me coming back for more (cutting that one last sliver off the original block).
Perhaps it is the Junior Mints that I must have when I am sitting in the theater waiting for the previews to end and they have melted into unsightly chocolate clumps. I don't mind, so I just toss them in my mouth and let them melt apart. It could be the peanut butter balls that I received as a gift from Brenda. She took such care in making them. She wrapped them carefully in wax paper and even placed them in a decorative holiday tin. But alas, there there were only six pieces, and I just could not stop myself. I ate them in just one sitting.
Well I did try to share, but the chocolate monster in me just took over. Alas, I believe that my favorite chocolate of all is the chocolate Egg that is available at Easter. I like to bite off the top of the egg and lick out the filling until my tongue can't fit any further into the egg without my nose getting a chocolate mustache. But, if I can't have a piece of chocolate, then I will settle for my chocolate scented candles from Partylite or perhaps a mocha cappuccino from the infamous Starbucks. Yes, I have got to have my chocolate fix no matter the cost.
hi Sir,
this is my version 1.2.
I was always ignored at work.Everyone despise me. I am always lonely in the corner with no friends.Everyone despise me because i was not rich.They do not want to be friends with me because I cannot buy all the branded stuff that they have.My childhood was not that great either.My parents divorced,i lived with my abusive mother because my father did not have enough income to take careof me.But all of that was about to change.
One day,a fair,tall beautiful lady named Rosalie as that of an angel stepped into the office.I was captivated by her beauty.There was just this calming aura around her.The ladies in my office was envy of her. Some guys tried to ask her out on a date, but she rejected.After a few weeks ,I think she realized that i was lonely and I had no friends,she started to approach me.I was on cloud nine.
This set some tounges wagging. Suddenly ,I realized that I had fallen in love with her. We started going out, and I confessed my feelings to her .From that night onwards ,she stopped calling me and did not talk to me. I thought I have lost all hope to search for happiness.At work,she avoided me as much as she can.My heart was shattered into a million pieces.
But lady luck was smiling on me,a few weeks after that,she started talking to me again.She said that she was appalled that I liked her . She just wanted to try this another time. After a few other outings,she said that she liked me and she did not care that I was not that rich because she thinked that wealth does not matter because to her it does not bring the happiness in her life.She believed that being wealthy helps to give problems too.After a few months of planning, we decided to get married. At last, the auspicious day came. At that point of time I was elated. I thought to myself.Now I understand what happiness means.
Nur Dina Dianah (9)
1F
word count :333
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Hi Mr Lau I'm Cher Chen Wei 1F (2)
version 1.1
I was once a girl who always sell newspapers.I was at the roadside selling my newspaper when I saw an accident at the road.
The accident goes like this,a driver's car was out of control when he saw the lady crossing the zebra crossing and he knock on the lady.The lady's things has drop on the road and she was injured specially her forehead.
I quickly called the police and the ambulance.A few minutes later,the police and the ambulance came. During the way to the hospital, the lady's forehead keep bleeding and cause it's death.
I was sent to the police station to tell them what had happened.
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Rasinah(15)1F
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This story is about me when I was in primary six last year. It was very frightening and quite happening year because last year is an important year to me. My primary school leaving examination last year is well done because I did studied and my aggregate score is 178 and my parent is very proud of me. It was surprising because I am not quite good at Math but I got C for it.
My form teacher and friends, congratulate me for my very excellent grades for my primary school leaving examination (PSLE). The sad thing was I did know which school my friends goes because after I got my PSLE results as I did meet them at all.
All of my friend last year were very kind and helpful because if I am absent and do not know how to do my homework or project they will guide me. Few days later, my parent will bought me a hand phone. I was so surprise to know that they bought me a present for my good PSLE results .
Decision of going which secondary school was my brother and his wife. Their first choice was Bedemeer secondary .
When the day of which school I join, I was very sad because I had join Bedemeer. My parent transfer me to Bedok North because it is near to my cousin house and easy for me to go home.The result for when I need to go to this school is fast, I was happy because the next day is the opening of school I cry with happiness because I could not believe it.(272 words)
Sorry Mr Lau,I,Rasinah had forgotten to write this words 'version 1.1' in my previous personal recount which is on version 1.1.
Rozalia Rosli(16)1F
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It was in the June holidays. My family and I had plans to go on a holiday trip in Australia. My parents have already booked a hotel and air line tickets for the trip. It was just a few days more before the big day arrives which is going to Australia.
I was delighted when I just found out a few weeks ago about the holiday trip. But not now as I already know that I will not have the one and only chance that is to go to Holiday trip.
My passport had expired but I don’t know about it until my mother was packing up some clothes in a few luggage a week before the trip. Beside her was a stack of our passports. I went to her to help her out in the packing. When I am done, I take a look at my passport and turn to a page where it shows my particulars. I accidently take a glance at the due date of the passport. I was shock that the date that was stated as the expiry date. ”My passport has expired!”, I shouted in a shocked voice. My mother who was just beside also shocked. ”Are you sure?”, my mother asked me in a curious voice.
I showed her the particulars page and pointed at the expiry date of the passport. Few minutes later my father reach home from his working place. My mother told my father the situation that the family is in. My father took a few minutes to make decision whether to go to the trip to Australia. He told me the decision he had made was to leave me alone with my neighbour.
I respect my father’s decision. I decided not to disappoint my small sister by assuring my parents and my small sister that I would be fine alone with my neighbour. It was the most sadness part of my life that I had ever experience.(327 words)
Rafizah(14)1F
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“Fire, fire“ my neighbour screamed. It was five in the morning. Me and my family were still asleep. When we were still sound asleep, my neighbour who had just screamed, suddenly knock on my door. Then I smell something burning, when I look downstairs below my storey that there was a big fire and thick smoke coming out through the window. We all were told to get out of the flat immediately.
“Somebody call the fire engine” one of my neighbour shouted. ”I’m exhausted when can we went to bed”, said my neighbour upstairs in a sleepy voice.Ten minutes later, the fire engine, police and the ambulance came. When the fire was put out, we were all relieved. The ambulance came on time to check that everybody is save.
What cause the fire was that Tina and her family was sleeping then her grandmother when to boil water in the middle of the night and then she forget to turn off the gas. Then the fire became bigger and all of her house was burn. They don’t scold the grandmother as they know that she was old and always forgot. Then we finally when to sleep .(196 words)
CLORIS OH (03) 1F
VERSION 1.2
The scorching sun shone into the classroom. We could hardly concentrate on our studies with the unbearably heat. We tried our best to concentrate with our homework that had just been given out a few minutes ago.
“RING!! Finally!! It's recess time." I claimed to my friends while rubbing my tummy. I began clammy as I walk to the canteen.
I then realized a girl sitting by the staircase with her head down. First I asked her what her name is. She said her name was Ashley. I could known her as she was one of the top students who A’s the exams. Then I questioned what had happened. She utter that her mother was ill a few days ago, and she could not afford to fork out for her mother hospitality bills as she had came from an underprivileged family. She begged me for an advice, but when I put myself in her shoes, I would seek for the principle’s help.
I speed as fast as I could to the General Office to aspire for the principle and told the principle that a girl wanted to speak to him. I told my principle where the girl was. The girl voice out what had happened. My principle had contemplated about it, and would contribute the sum of money to Ashley. Gladly, she had the sum of money to settle the hospitality.
I had almost forgotten about recess. “RINGG!!” The bell had just gone. Recess was over, and I had not even take a quick bite, my stomach was growling loudly and I felt embarrassed. "Is it a crime to be hungry?" I grumbled as I went up the stairs, to my classroom.
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Version 1.4
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Currently, I am a brilliant football player .I am playing for Chelsea Football Club.
One day, it was an entertaining match .It was the semi-final match Chelsea and Liverpool .I was overjoyed that I managed to play in the starting line up.
30 minutes later past the first half, I manage to score a magnificent goal. When the congas saw the ball going into the back of the goal post they cheered out loudly. When I heard the congas cheering, my morale boost up that my form in the game was amazing.
5 minutes past during the second half, I was given a red card for sliding my rival. I was so sad that I would be suspended for 3 matches and I could not play in the finals if we win. Finally after waiting for such a long time, the referee blew the whistle. I was astonish that we won 4-1.The whole club was so happy that we were going to the finals. Our coach even treated us to a wonders meal. After eating our meal, the coach and trainers brought in many bottles of champagne.
A month pass and to our surprise, we realized that the big games the final is tomorrow .At last, the day has arrived .It is the day where Chelsea challenge Manchester United for the UEFA Champion League Cup. When we arrived at the stadium, we saw that the field was overlaid with water. The referee had to stop the game as injuries may occur faster. They decided that the game would be in another 2 week. When I heard that I felt like I was walking on air, as my suspension will end by the next week so I the coach would be able to select me.
Two week pass .The most animating match has come .The commentators are wondering who will win and take back the UEFA Champion League cup .I was also sad as I could not play in the first team. The first half pass and we were down 2-0.During the second half, I manage to score two goals and made it 2-2.The referee blew his whistle and said that they will be extra time. After the extra time, the score was still the same .So it come to penalties. When the score was 4-3 I had to score the winning goal to win. After shooting the ball, I close my eyes after a while, I heard the congas cheering I open my eye and saw the ball in the back of the net .We celebrated and took the trophy and went back to our stadium .It was my finest day as I have won a medal and a trophy and help the club to win the title.
The end
Jordan (24) word count (448 words)
Hi Mr. Lau this Si Jia(15) from 1F (version 1.3).
Few years ago,I went to Malaysia with my parents and some of my good friends. We went to Malaysia by a travelling bus,we chitchated and played while on the way to there so we would not get spiritless as it was a far-reaching distance from Singapore.
After we went down to the bus,we went to a hotel near by to checked in,then we went to our rooms excitedly,we scattered into our rooms as we have been in the bus for a long time.
Next,we played hide-and-seek at the corridors outside the hotel rooms,because I was too agitated playing the game, I hide inside the emergency exit,closing the door.
By the time I wanted to came out by the door,the door had been grapple by itself.I constanted to holler for help but no one was there.I became very apprehensive and do not know what to do,but I tried to cool down myself to think of a way,so I kept strolling down the staircase till the ground floor.
Fortunately,the emergency exit at the ground floor was permitted,so I briskly ran to a lift and went to the floor where my room was.When I parlay to the floor,I saw my parents,they glanced me very concerned and declared,"Where have you gone?"I did not said a word,I just bear hug them and burst into blubber loudly.
Since this circumstance,it does not atrophy the tour,we still adore ourselves at there before we went back to Singapore.(265 words)
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Hi Mr. Lau this Si Jia(17) from 1F (version 1.4).
Few years ago,I went to Malaysia with my parents and some of my best friends. We went to Malaysia by a travelling bus,we chitchated and played while on the way to there so we will not get spiritless as it was a far-reaching distance from Singapore.
After we went down the bus,we went to a hotel near by to checked in,then we went to our rooms excitedly,we scattered into our rooms as we have been in the bus for a long time.
Next,we played hide-and-seek at the corridors outside the hotel rooms,because I was too agitated playing the game, I hide inside the emergency exit,closing the door.
By the time I wanted to came out by the door,the door had been grapple by itself.I constanted to holler for help but no one was there.I became very apprehensive and do not know what to do,but I tried to cool down myself to think of a way,so I kept strolling down the staircase till the ground floor.
Fortunately,the emergency exit at the ground floor was permitted,so I briskly ran into a lift and went to the floor where my room was.When I parlay to the floor,I saw my parents,they glanced me very concerned and declared,"Where have you gone?"I did not said a word,I just bear huged them and bursted into blubber loudly.
Since this circumstance,it does not atrophy the tour,we still adore ourselves at there before we went back to Singapore.(264 words)
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3. Thirdly, for grammar
4. Lastly, spelling
One nice day, I was assisting my friend to upgrading his IBM (International Business Machine) ThinkPad 701C. I put on my grounding strap and carefully disassemble his laptop, remove the integrated the old RAM (random access memory) chip by removing the solder, then re-solder the new faster memory chip.
After replacing the intergraded RAM, I replaced the RAM on the socket with faster memory, then I replace the hard drive. I then insert the recovery disk and recover the entire disk with operating system, Windows 3.1 and IBM preinstalled software.
When my friends came and look for me, he tried out my upgraded system, he exclaimed “wow! what a very fast system, now I can play my games and surf the internet now”!, when he tried, it is really fast with less lag
After trying my upgraded a system, he reward me a set of legal Windows 95 B CD and floppy disk for installing the operating system and he thank me for help me
165 words
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Version 1.2
Hello I am chor yew at 1F
One nice day, I was assisting my friend to upgrading his IBM (International Business Machine) ThinkPad 701C. I put on my grounding strap and carefully disassemble his laptop, remove the integrated the old RAM (random access memory) chip by removing the solder, then re-solder the new faster memory chip.
After replacing the intergraded RAM, I replaced the RAM on the socket with faster memory, then I replace the hard drive. I then insert the recovery disk and recover the entire disk with operating system, Windows 3.1 and IBM preinstalled software.
When my friends came and look for me, he tried out my upgraded system, he exclaimed “wow! what a very fast system, now I can play my games and surf the internet now”!, when he tried, it is really fast with less lag
After trying my upgraded a system, he reward me a set of legal Windows 95 B CD and floppy disk for installing the operating system and he thank me for help me
165 words
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Rasinah(15)1F
version 1.2
"I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
This story is about me that happen to me last year when I was in primary six. It was an astounding and happening year. A year which is so important to me. Last year, I had my My primary school leaving examination (PSLE) last year. It was done well because I studied and my aggregate score was 178. My parent was very proud of me. It was surprising because I am not quite good at Math but I got C for it.
My form teacher and friends, congratulate me for my very excellent grades for my PSLE. The sad thing was I did know which school my friends goes because after I got my PSLE results as I did meet them at all.
All of my friend last year were kind and helpful as if I am absent and do not know how to do my homework or project they will guide me. Few days later, my parent bought me a hand phone. I was so surprise to know that they bought me a present as for my good PSLE results.
Decision of going to which secondary school was my brother and his wife. Their first decision was Bedemeer secondary .
When the day of which school I join, I was very sad because I had join Bedemeer. My parent transfer me to Bedok North because it is near to my cousin house and easy for me to go home. The result for when I need to go to this school is fast, I was happy because the next day is the opening of school I cry with happiness because I could not believe it.(274 words)
Rafizah(14)1F
version 1.2
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“Fire, fire“ my neighbour yelled. It was five in the morning. My family and I were still asleep as it was a Sunday morning. When we were still sound asleep, my neighbour who had just screamed, knock on my front door gate. I smelled something burning, so I decided to I look downstairs below my storey. There was a big fire and thick smoke coming out through a window. We all were told to get out of the flat immediately.
“Can somebody call the fire engine” one of my neighbour shouted. ”I’m exhausted when can we went to bed”, said a resident in the flat in a sleepy voice. Ten minutes later, the fire engine, police and the ambulance came. When the fire was put out, we were all relieved. The ambulance came on time to checked that everyone was saved.
What cause the fire was that Tina and her family was sleeping then her grandmother when to boil water in the middle of the night and then she forget to turn off the gas. Then the fire became bigger and all of her house was burn. They don’t scold the grandmother as they know that she was old and always forgot. Then we finally went to sleep.(208 words)
Hi Mr Lau I am Ajrun A'zhim from
1F.version 1.2
Last year on 10 December 2008,I went to Genting Highland with my family.At there was so cold and so many people too.When I reach there,
I need to wear thick clothes and pants.I stayed first world hotel three days two night.
Over there have many fun and exciting games.I played the indoor
games.My height must be more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre to play the games.I can played the games because my height was more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother could not played the games because his height was less than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother was so sad because he could not played the games.My mother bought some sweets for him to make him felt happy.I played many indoor games at there.It was so fun and exciting.
After playing all the indoor games,I felt sleepy and tired.So I went back to first world hotel to sleep but before I sleep,I need to bathe first to clean myself.After bathing I went to bed to sleep.
The next day,I played the outdoor games.The outdoor games was extreme because it have roller coaster,ferris wheel and many more.
I prefer playing outdoor games than indoor games.I like to play flying coaster.The game was like roller coaster.
After playing the indoor and the outdoor games,I enjoyed myself at there.I hope I get to go to Genting Highland again.
THE END(256 words)
Hi Mr Lau I am Ajrun A'zhim from
1F.version 1.3
Last year on 10 December 2008,I went to Genting Highland with my family.At there was so cold and so many people too.When I reach there,
I need to wear thick clothes and pants.I stayed first world hotel three days two night.
Over there have many fun and exciting games.I played the indoor
games.My height must be more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre to play the games.I can played the games because my height was more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother could not played the games because his height was less than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother was so sad because he could not played the games.My mother bought some sweets for him to make him felt happy.I played many indoor games at there.It was so fun and exciting.
After playing all the indoor games,I felt sleepy and tired.So I went back to first world hotel to sleep but before I sleep,I need to bathe first to clean myself.After bathing I went to bed to sleep.
The next day,I played the outdoor games.The outdoor games was extreme because it have roller coaster,ferris wheel and many more.
I prefer playing outdoor games than indoor games.I like to play flying coaster.The game was like roller coaster.
After playing the indoor and the outdoor games,I enjoyed myself at there.I hope I get to go to Genting Highland again.
THE END(256 words)
Hi Mr Lau I am Ajrun A'zhim from
1F.version 1.4
Last year on 10 December 2008,I went to Genting Highland with my family.At there was so cold and so many people too.When I reach there,
I need to wear thick clothes and pants.I stayed first world hotel three days two night.
Over there have many fun and exciting games.I played the indoor
games.My height must be more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre to play the games.I can played the games because my height was more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother could not played the games because his height was less than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother was so sad because he could not played the games.My mother bought some sweets for him to make him felt happy.I played many indoor games at there.It was so fun and exciting.
After playing all the indoor games,I felt sleepy and tired.So I went back to first world hotel to sleep but before I sleep,I need to bathe first to clean myself.After bathing I went to bed to sleep.
The next day,I played the outdoor games.The outdoor games was extreme because it have roller coaster,ferris wheel and many more.
I prefer playing outdoor games than indoor games.I like to play flying coaster.The game was like roller coaster.
After playing the indoor and the outdoor games,I enjoyed myself at there.I hope I get to go to Genting Highland again.
THE END(256 words)
Hi Mr Lau I am Ajrun A'zhim from
1F.version 1.0
Last year on 10 December 2008,I went to Genting Highland with my family.At there was so cold and so many people too.When I reach there,
I need to wear thick clothes and pants.I stayed first world hotel three days two night.
Over there have many fun and exciting games.I played the indoor
games.My height must be more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre to play the games.I can played the games because my height was more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother could not played the games because his height was less than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother was so sad because he could not played the games.My mother bought some sweets for him to make him felt happy.I played many indoor games at there.It was so fun and exciting.
After playing all the indoor games,I felt sleepy and tired.So I went back to first world hotel to sleep but before I sleep,I need to bathe first to clean myself.After bathing I went to bed to sleep.
The next day,I played the outdoor games.The outdoor games was extreme because it have roller coaster,ferris wheel and many more.
I prefer playing outdoor games than indoor games.I like to play flying coaster.The game was like roller coaster.
After playing the indoor and the outdoor games,I enjoyed myself at there.I hope I get to go to Genting Highland again.
THE END(256 words)
Hi Mr Lau I am Ajrun A'zhim from
1F.version 1.1
Last year on 10 December 2008,I went to Genting Highland with my family.At there was so cold and so many people too.When I reach there,
I need to wear thick clothes and pants.I stayed first world hotel three days two night.
Over there have many fun and exciting games.I played the indoor
games.My height must be more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre to play the games.I can played the games because my height was more than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother could not played the games because his height was less than one metre and thirty-two centimetre.My brother was so sad because he could not played the games.My mother bought some sweets for him to make him felt happy.I played many indoor games at there.It was so fun and exciting.
After playing all the indoor games,I felt sleepy and tired.So I went back to first world hotel to sleep but before I sleep,I need to bathe first to clean myself.After bathing I went to bed to sleep.
The next day,I played the outdoor games.The outdoor games was extreme because it have roller coaster,ferris wheel and many more.
I prefer playing outdoor games than indoor games.I like to play flying coaster.The game was like roller coaster.
After playing the indoor and the outdoor games,I enjoyed myself at there.I hope I get to go to Genting Highland again.
THE END(256 words)
Version 1.2
Name: Nur Syuhaimah Bte Mohamad
Class: 1 F
My Story…
While I was looking at my primary six class photo, I kept thinking about my classmates and I was so happy that my entire classmate passes our Primary School Leaving Examination (PSLE) except one pupil but his mark was so near to the passing marks. Five pupils went to express stream. The rest went to normal academic and normal technical.
This is my story when we work together before PSLE.
One Monday morning, I went to school and I promise that I will concentrate in my class. Because it was Four days before PSLE. When I went up to my class, my classmates were so good and they focus and concentrate to our teacher. My teacher, Mrs. Nor gives us some advised.
In the Afternoon, we got remedial. She asks us to do the practice paper that she gave us while she got a meeting to attend. At 5.30 in afternoon, we were released from our class.
On Thursday is our important day because it is the last day that we must go through English. And tomorrow is our big day because it’s our English PSLE. That time, we need to study with understanding. We tested our grammar to each other and sometimes we got wrong. We test each other until we get it.
In the Afternoon, when we were having lessons, one of our classmates was so irritating. He kept talking and talking. My teacher shouted “Shut Up!” We were so shocked.
“I’m not taking PSLE, u are the one. I’m not teaching you English because lessons are over.” Then when we went downstairs, she started saying “Good Luck” to my classmates.
The next day, it is our big day. They make an announcement that my class teacher wants to see all of us. She is so nice that she gave us a pencil box and there are stationery and mathematical sets for us. Then she said that we need to concentrate and don’t look around when the exam starts if not we are considered cheating. (337 words)
The End!
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Hi Mr Lau. I am Nur Syahirah 1F. this is my story... This is my version 1.2
I waited silently, not daring to move, not even to breathe. I crouched behind the door, curling myself into the smallest shape possible, hoping I would not be found. Outside, the floorboards groaned in protest as the creature stalked ever closer towards me. I swallowed a huge lump in my throat, which was threatening to choke me. I waited. Suddenly, it happened.
There was nobody in my house. I was so scared because my grandmother had just pass away. My grandmother had a stroke that’s why my grandmother died. Suddenly my handphone rang, “Ring,ring!!”. I pick up and heard a lady voice, the voice sound exactly like my grandmother. I hang up the phone and my hand was sweating. Sixty second later, I heard a lady’s voice crying and shouting for helped. I locked my bedroom’s door and lying on my bed and closed my eyes. I am so scared that my handphone rang again and I heard my grandmother’s voice and she said “ Open the door!” while she knocks on my door.
My television was automically switch on and I off it. But it was on again. I question myself “Why must I’ll be the one who suffered here!!” The question kept playing in mind. The time was already 12am.
My head was dizzy and I fell asleep. Suddenly I heard a firmiliar voice. It was my mother who was waking me up for school. I asked my mother “Mother did you go anywhere yesterday?”. My mother answered “No, yesterday we did not go anywhere.Why?”. I just smile and forget about it. I realised that it was a dream.
The End. (292 words)
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Hi Mr LAU this is my version of 1.4
I was once a girl who wrote brilliant love stories. Titanic,Moulin rouge,Music and lyrics. I have inspired them all. I was the master of all obstacles of love. I wrote stories about Love.
About passion. Truth. Dignity. And lastly, Respect.My stories were famous. My stories were all known around the world. I guess I was just lucky. Some were inspired by me. Some were fans. Some were proud of me and sent me letters of appreciation.
I did not knew at first that I could be known to the world. I just thought that I had a hobby of writing love stories. Just writing them would make me happy.
But a while after, I wanted to share my love stories to the people of my country. To the world. To everyone. Before I knew it, I was world famous. I was proud not that I was just famous. I was proud that my book was read for over a million people.
I have checked my work for firstly content, secondly for grammar, thirdly for volcabulary and lastly for spelling.
Word count:169
recount : version 1.3
One day,a fair,tall beautiful lady named Rosalie as that of an angel stepped into the office.I was captivated by her beauty.There was just this calming aura around her.The ladies in my office was envy of her. Some guys tried to ask her out on a date, but she rejected. After a few weeks ,I think she realized that I was lonely and I had no friends, she started to approach me. At that moment, I was on cloud nine.
This set some tounges wagging. Suddenly ,I realized that I had fallen in love with her. We started going out, and I confessed my feelings to her .From that night onwards ,she stopped calling me and did not talk to me. I thought I have lost all hope to search for happiness .At work, she avoided me as much as she could. My heart was shattered into a million pieces.
But lady luck was smiling on me, a few weeks after that,she started talking to me again .She said that she was appalled that I liked her . She just wanted to try this another time. After a few other outings ,she said that she liked me and she did not care that I was not that rich because she believed that wealth does not matter because to her it does not bring the happiness in her life if there is no sincerity . She believed that being wealthy give problems too .After a few months of planning, we decided to get married. At last, the auspicious day came. At that point of time I was elated. I thought to myself .Now I understand what happiness means.
word count :357
I have checked my work four times. firstly for spelling secondly on content thirdly on vocabulary an lastly on grammar.
Nur Dina Dianah (9)
1F
new verison 1.3
I was always ignored at work.Everyone despise me. I am always lonely in the corner with no friends. Everyone despise me because I was not rich.They do not want to be friends with me because I cannot buy all the branded stuff that they have.My childhood was not that great either. My parents divorced, I lived with my abusive mother because my father did not have enough income to take care of me. But all of that was about to change.
One day,a fair,tall beautiful lady named Rosalie as that of an angel stepped into the office.I was captivated by her beauty.There was just this calming aura around her.The ladies in my office was envy of her. Some guys tried to ask her out on a date, but she rejected. After a few weeks ,I think she realized that I was lonely and I had no friends, she started to approach me. At that moment, I was on cloud nine.
This set some tounges wagging. Suddenly ,I realized that I had fallen in love with her. We started going out, and I confessed my feelings to her .From that night onwards ,she stopped calling me and did not talk to me. I thought I have lost all hope to search for happiness .At work, she avoided me as much as she could. My heart was shattered into a million pieces.
But lady luck was smiling on me, a few weeks after that,she started talking to me again .She said that she was appalled that I liked her . She just wanted to try this another time. After a few other outings ,she said that she liked me and she did not care that I was not that rich because she believed that wealth does not matter because to her it does not bring the happiness in her life if there is no sincerity . She believed that being wealthy give problems too .After a few months of planning, we decided to get married. At last, the auspicious day came. At that point of time I was elated. I thought to myself .Now I understand what happiness means.
word count :357
I have checked my work four times. firstly for spelling secondly on content thirdly on vocabulary an lastly on grammar.
Nur Dina Dianah (9)
1F
version 1.4
I was always ignored at work. Everyone despise me. I am always lonely in the corner with no friends. Everyone despise me because I was not rich.They do not want to be friends with me because I cannot buy all the branded stuff that they have.My childhood was not that great either. My parents divorced, I lived with my abusive mother because my father did not have enough income to take care of me. But all of that was about to change.
One day, a fair, tall appealing lady named Rosalie as that of an angel stepped into the office .I was captivated by her beauty. There was just this calming aura around her. The ladies in my office was envy of her. Some guys tried to ask her out on a date, but she rejected. After a few weeks ,I think she realized that I was lonely and I had no friends, she started to approach me. At that moment, I was on cloud nine.
This set some tongues wagging. Suddenly ,I realized that I had fallen in love with her. We started going out, and I confessed my feelings to her .From that night onwards , she stopped calling me and did not talk to me. I thought I have lost all the hope to search for happiness .At work, she avoided me as much as she could. My heart was shattered into a million pieces.
But lady luck was smiling on me, a few weeks after that, she started talking to me again .She said that she was appalled that I liked her . She just wanted to try this another time. After a few other outings ,she said that she liked me and she did not care that I was not that rich because she believed that wealth does not matter because to her it does not bring the happiness in her life if there is no sincerity . She believed that being wealthy give problems too .After a few months of planning, we decided to get married. At last, the auspicious day came. At that point of time I was elated. I thought to myself .Now I understand what happiness means.
word count :360
I have checked my work four times. firstly for spelling secondly on content thirdly on vocabulary an lastly on grammar.
Nur Dina Dianah (9)
1F
Hello Mr Lau , i would like to highlight that I have already submitted entry 1 however i’m left with entry 2 . Hence , i am submitting the latter now . I apologise for the late entry . I’m aware of deadline by 9.00pm however i have ealier no internet access . Only now i am able to use my aunt laptop for this assignment .
Mohd Nafiz Bin Zulkhairi |=
1/F (28) 18/02/09
Journal - 2
Today , my aunty shared with me a very interesting spritual , motivational and leadership book called ‘ The Balance Ways ‘ . Written by , Dr M.K Sutrisna Suryadilaga . The writter believes that it is a way to reach sucess and eternal hapiness in a balance way in the present and after life .In order to bridge The Balance Ways and attain success in life together with hapiness , we need vehicle or strategy which is universal and easy to apply ; either to muslims or non muslims . That strategy , Dr Sutrisna define it in an acronym terms MAPP TO REACH .
Method 1 : (MA) Maximize action - strive to the your best & maximize yr potential
Method 2 : (P) Planning – do a Mature planning
Method 3 : (P) Pro Poor – embrace yourself with the poor and reach out to them
Method 4 : (R) Ridha – face all obstacles in life with an open heart and mind
Method 5 : (IC) Ichlas – To be able to give wholeheartedly and willingness
Method 6 : (H) Heart Voice - Listening to your positive inner voice
To summarise this book will bring you to a journey of exploring The Balance Ways concepts in detail of the above methods starting from MA – Maximizing our potentials right up to the last Method which is the (H) Heart Voice ( listening to your inner voice , thats where the God Spot lies) If we consistenly practice and apply thru The Balance Ways, he believes, by way of God permission, success in life spiritually and emotionally will be attained.
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I am Yichew from class 1F. Version 1.2 :] !
They were two young couples living together since they were nursery. Both their parents died of some kind of accidents. They played together, sleep together, almost everything they did together. Their friends, teachers and other neighbors said that they were very compatible. Till one day, after Primary School Leaving Examination, they both got different score and got to the different schools as each other. Both schools were quite far away from their house so one of them decided to move out to a place which is nearer to his school and he had already found it. They both were sad to be separated with each other but they had no choices. From that day onwards, they would call each other after school and talked what has happen in the school in the Midnight of Saturday and Friday
Not long later in July, the boy started not to call the girl after school even in the Midnight. He didn’t even listen to her call. And a few days later, the number was not exists already. She wonder there must be something happening to him so she went to find him. She founded him and saw him flirting with three to four girls. She was very angry and went up to him n shouted at him “ Why didn’t you listen my calls and why did you cut off your sim card and not telling me! And now, you are flirting with girls!” And then he replied, “ Everyone were be sick of something that is with him or her for long ago! I needed a new one!” She ran off with her broken heart and her tears.
By this she decided to go and find a job .She found a job working in the starbucks as a cashier. Her salary was SGD$350 per month. She hates wearing the uniforms of the working place because she thinks it is ugly. One day her boss when up to her ”WHY DIDN’T YOU WEAR YOUR UNOFORMS AGAIN?” she replied, “because I find it ugly”. Her Boss said, “You are fired!” “FINE!” shouted the girl.
While she was walking back home, she met a person, which is very handsome, cute and stunning. They both made friends and tell each other about their life. As the girl has not had a job no, she cant live in her house because of the bills .she asked the guy if he could let her stay in her house for a few days and he agreed. So she sold the house and kept the money for the renting moneys.
When they live together, there relationship get closer and both of them had feelings with each other. But when the day when the guy wanted to propose to her, her ex-boyfriend asked to meet her out and she agreed .She jumped for joy and was so excited for the next day to come. The guy was sad and thinks her ex will only make her happy. But he was curious wad he is going to ask her so he decided to follow her.
When they met each other, they were quiet for a moment. Suddenly, the boy asked her,“ would you be my girlfriend again just like before?” The girl was shocked and the guy was worried that she would say yes but her answer make him surprise .She said “ I would want to if I can but at this moment this is too late. I have a fancy and I truly loved him. You played my feelings and did you remember what did you said that day?” And she walked away angrily back to her house .The guy was so happy that he quickly rush home before she reached home. He acted he was watching television but he wasn’t. Behind his hand were full of red roses. And then, when chances came out, He confesses to her to be his girlfriend and she said “yes”. Soon after 1 year, they got married. They seems to be the happiest and lovable couple in the world after the day he propose .Her ex learnt a lesson and he also blessed that they would lived till their hair were purely white.
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Hi Mr Lau I'm Cher Chen Wei 1F (2)
version 1.2
I was once a girl who always sell newspapers.I was at the roadside selling my newspaper when I saw an accident at the road.
The accident goes like this,a driver's car was out of control when he saw the lady crossing the zebra crossing and he knock on the lady.The lady's things has drop on the road and she was injured specially her forehead.
I quickly called the police and the ambulance.A few minutes later,the police and the ambulance came. During the way to the hospital, the lady's forehead keep bleeding and cause it's death.
I was sent to the police station to tell them what had happened.I told them everything about the accident.
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thirdly, for grammar
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Hi Mr Lau I'm Cher Chen Wei 1F (2)
version 1.3
I was once a girl who always sell newspapers.I was at the roadside selling my newspaper when I saw an accident at the road.
The accident goes like this,a driver's car was out of control when he saw the lady crossing the zebra crossing and he knock on the lady.The lady's things has drop on the road and she was injured specially her forehead.
I quickly called the police and the ambulance.A few minutes later,the police and the ambulance came. During the way to the hospital, the lady's forehead keep bleeding and cause it's death.
I was sent to the police station to tell them what had happened.I told them everything about the accident.
When I went home I remembered what I did not told the police.I quickly called the police what I did not told them.
I have checked my work four times.Fisrtly, for content,secondly for vocabulary
thirdly, for grammar
and lastly for spelling.
Hi Mr Lau I'm Cher Chen Wei 1F (2)
version 1.4
I was once a girl who always sell newspapers.I was at the roadside selling my newspaper when I saw an accident at the road.
The accident went like that,a driver's car was out of control when he saw the lady crossing the zebra crossing and he knock on the lady.The lady's things has drop on the road and she was injured specially her forehead.
I quickly called the police and the ambulance.A few minutes later,the police and the ambulance came. During the way to the hospital, the lady's forehead keep bleeding and cause it's death.
I was sent to the police station to tell them what had happened.I told them everything about the accident.
When I went home I remembered what I did not told the police.I quickly called the police what I did not told them.At last the police found out who knock down the lady.I was reward by the police.
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thirdly, for grammar
and lastly for spelling.
Cloris Oh (03)
1-F, Version 1.3
The scorching sun shone into the classroom. We could hardly concentrate on our studies with the unbearably heat. We tried our best to concentrate with our homework that had just been given out a few minutes ago.
“RING!! Finally!! It's recess time." I claimed to my friends while rubbing my tummy. I began clammy as I walk to the canteen.
I then realized a girl sitting by the staircase with her head down. First I asked her what her name is. She said her name was Ashley. I could known her as she was one of the top students who A’s the exams. Then I questioned what had happened. She utter that her mother was ill a few days ago, and she could not afford to fork out for her mother hospitality bills as she had came from an underprivileged family. She begged me for an advice, but when I put myself in her shoes, I would seek for the principle’s help.
I speed as fast as I could to the General Office to aspire for the principle and told the principle that a girl wanted to speak to him. I told my principle where was the girl. The girl voice out what had happened. My principle had contemplated about it, and would contribute the sum of money to Ashley. Gladly, she had the sum of money to settle the hospitality.
I had almost forgotten about recess. “RINGG!!” The bell had just gone. Recess was over, and I had not even take a quick bite, my stomach was growling loudly and I felt embarrassed. "Was it a crime to be hungry?" I grumbled as I went up the stairs, to my classroom.
WORD COUNT: 255
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Rozalia Rosli(16)1F
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June holidays had just arrived. My family and I had plans in mind to go on a holiday trip in Australia. My parents had booked a hotel and air line tickets for the trip. It was just a few days more before the big day arrived which is going to Australia.
I was contented when I just found out a sprinkling weeks ago about the holiday trip. But not now as I already know that I will not have the one and only chance that is to go to Holiday trip.
My passport had expired but I didn’t know about it. When my mother was packing up some attire in a few valise a week before the trip. Beside her was a stack of our passports. I went to her to help her out in the packing. When I am done, I take a look at my passport and turn to a page where it shows my particulars. I accidently took a glance at the due date of the passport. I was shock that the date that was stated as the expiry date. ”My passport has expired!”, I screamed in a distressed voice. My mother who was directly beside look aghast. ”Are you sure?”, my mother questioned me in a curious voice.
I showed her the particulars page and pointed at the expiry date of the passport. Several minutes later, my father reached home from his working place. My mother told my father the situation that our family were in. My father took a few minutes to make decision whether to go to the trip to Australia. He announced the decision he had made to me that he was going to leave me with my acquaintance.
I respected my father’s decision. I decided not to dishearten my small sister by assuring my parents and my small sister that I would be fine with my acquaintance. It was the most sadness part of my life that I had ever experience.(329 words)
Rafizah Rashid(14)1F
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“Fire, fire“ my neighbour yelled. It was sharp at five in the morning. My family and I were still asleep as it was a Sunday morning. When we were still sound asleep, my neighbour who had just screamed, knock on my front door gate. I smelled something burning, so I decided to I look downstairs below my storey. There was a big fire and thick smoke coming out through a window. We all were told to get out of the flat immediately.
“Can somebody call the fire engine” one of my neighbour shouted. ”I’m exhausted when can we went to bed”, said a resident in the flat in a sleepy voice. Ten minutes later, the fire engine, police and the ambulance came. When the fire was put out, we were all relieved. The ambulance came on time to checked that everyone was saved.
The fire was cause by Tina’s grandmother, who is one of the resident in the flat. She was boiling water in the middle of the night. Tina and her other members of the family was already asleep at that moment. The fire went bigger and their house was terribly burnt. They didn’t scold the grandmother as they know that the grandmother is an absent-minded person. Then we finally went to bed.(214 words)
Rasinah(15)1F
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This story is about me that happen to me last year when I was in primary six. It was an astounding and happening year. A year which is important to me. Last year, I had my My primary school leaving examination (PSLE) last year. It was done well as I studied and my aggregate score was 178. My parent was very proud of me. It was amaze as I am not quite good at Math but I got C for it.
My form teacher and friends, congratulate me for my very excellent grades for PSLE. The blue thing was I did know know which school my friends goes because after I got my PSLE results as I did meet them at all.
All of my friend last year were kind and helpful as if I am absent and do not know how to do my homework or project they will guide me along. Several days later, my parent bought me a hand phone. I was so surprise to know that they bought me a bounty as for my good PSLE results.
Decision of going to which secondary school was my brother and his wife. Their first decision was Bedemeer secondary .
When the day of which school, I was feeling blue because I had join Bedemeer Sec. My parent transfered me to Bedok North Sec because it is near to my cousin house and easy for me to go home. The result for when I need to go to this school is fast, I was happy because the next day is the opening of school I cry with happiness because I could not believe it.(274 words)
Cloris Oh (03)
1-F, Version 1.4
The scorching sun shone into the classroom. We could hardly concentrate on our studies with the unbearably heat. We tried our best to concentrate with our homework that had just been given out a few minutes ago.
“RING!! Finally!! It's recess time." I claimed to my friends while rubbing my tummy. I began clammy as I walk to the canteen.
I then realized a girl sitting by the staircase with her head down. First I asked her what her name is. She said her name was Ashley. I could know her as she was one of the top students who A’s the exams. Then I questioned what had happened. She utter that her mother was ill a few days ago, and she could not afford to fork out for her mother hospitality bills as she had came from an underprivileged family. She begged me for an advice, but when I put myself in her shoes, I would seek for the principle’s help.
I speed as fast as I could to the General Office to aspire for the principle and told the principle that a girl wanted to speak to him. I told my principle where the girl was. The girl voice out what had happened. My principle had contemplated about it, and would contribute the sum of money to Ashley. Gladly, she had the sum of money to settle the hospitality.
I had almost forgotten about recess. “RINGG!!” The bell had just gone. Recess was over, and I had not even take a quick bite, my stomach was growling loudly and I felt embarrassed. "Was it a crime to be hungry?" I grumbled as I went up the stairs, to my classroom.
WORD COUNT: 257
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Hi Mr.Lau this is kelvin lee(24)1F
this is my ver.1.3
"I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
One late evening when i was walking home from school,the winds were exceptionally strong that evening,i felt sick and ran home.After that when i was making my own way home i heard someone scream for help,i went to find the person who shouted for help.
After a one to two hours,i found someone getting grabbed from behind and is pointed a knife at the back,i looked closely and it was my school principal,i quickly called the police and after that,i found sharp and heavy objects on the ground and threw it on the man but unfortunately for me it missed,the man knocked my principal unconscious and chased after me,i ran as my instinct told me and i hid behind the pillars,the man was looking up and down for me,i reached for my pocket to grab my air gun and shot him in the nuts,he screamed and got angrier and chased me,i shot him repeatedly and soon he fell down.
The police arrived a few minutes later and arrested the robber.I was really relieved that my principal was safe and sound,the principal announced to the school of my good deed and gave me a reward i felt really happy that time that i done a good deed and helped the police catch the wanted man.The police officers gave me a trophy and praised me,i appeared on the newspaper and also on television as the reporters interviewed me,i was really proud of myself and my parents were also proud of me,i wish that i can be the role model for the people,especially the for the children.
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Hi Mr.Lau this is kelvin lee from 1F(24)This is my ver.1.4
"I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
One late evening when i was walking home from school,the winds were exceptionally strong that evening,i felt that something in wrong and ran home.After that when i was making my own way home i heard someone in the vicinity scream for help,i went to find the person who shouted for help.
After a few minutes,i saw someone grabbing a person from behind and called the police right after that i took my air gun out and confronted the man,i told him to release the person in his hands or i will shoot him,he didn't listen to me because i am a kid and ran after me,i hid behind the walls,to prevent him from finding me.After a few minutes of searching high and low,he found me and strangled me,i shot him in the nuts with my gun and kicked him in the face,i shot him several times to make sure he doesn't retaliate,i quickly took off with the man and ran as fast as my legs could carry me,i suddenly got grabbed from behind and the man hit the robber in the face to save me he carried me on his back and took off.
A few minutes later,the police arrived and arrested the robber.The man whom i saved praised me for my bravery and my heroic deed,the policemen took me to the police station to write down my statements,i went on television and on the news,i felt bad for the robber so i went to visit him everyday after school ends,he promised me to stop doing all these bad things anymore again,i felt happy for him.my parents,the person whom i saved and the policemen praised me and gave me an award.Hence i wish that i can be a role model for the people especially for the kids.
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Name:Guo Si Min
Class:1-F
VERSION1.3
When I was young , I lived with my grandparents. My grandmother took care of me , while my grandfather supports the family. My grandmother would prepared lunches and dinner for us. My grandfather would often be back in the afternoon to have lunch with us.
When my grandfather came back for lunch, I was happy .As I could hardly see him through out the day. Afterthat ,he went back to work. After lunch,I would be going to the farm with my grandmother so that I could see the animals in the farm . We would go to the farm to feed the animals with lots of healthy foods. It was a happy day.
When I grow up, I started to help my grandmother to do the house work so that my grandmother will not be so busy everyday .Every afternoon, I will be doing the house work and my grandmother would go to the farm to feed the animal and bought some healthy food home to cook for the dinner.She cook the food was so nice that I wanted to eat again.
Sometime,I will go to the farm to pet those animals . I am one of a animals love in my family. When I am feeling sad or lonely , I will go to the farm and those animals were cheer me up.
Most of all, I live with my grandparent for 6 to 7 years .I leave them because I have to start the journy of my studies. My grandparent was upsad but they know if I leave them I will live better. I was happy living with them for past few years.
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Name: Nur Syuhaimah Bte Mohamad
Class: 1 F
My Story…
While I was looking at my primary six class photo, I kept thinking about my classmates and I was so happy that my entire classmate passes our Primary School Leaving Examination (PSLE) except one pupil but his mark was so near to the passing marks. Five pupils went to express stream. The rest went to normal academic and normal technical.
This is my story when we work together before PSLE.
On Thursday is our important day because it is the last day that we must go through English. And tomorrow is our big day because it’s our English PSLE. That time, we need to study with understanding. We tested our grammar to each other and sometimes we got wrong. We test each other until we get it.
In the Afternoon, when we were having lessons, one of our classmates was so irritating. He kept talking and talking. My teacher shouted “Shut Up!” We were so shocked.
“I’m not taking PSLE, u are the one. I’m not teaching you English because lessons are over.” Then when we went downstairs, she started saying “Good Luck” to my classmates.
The next day, it is our big day. They make an announcement that my class teacher wants to see all of us. She is so nice that she gave us a pencil box and there are stationery and mathematical sets for us. Then she said that we need to concentrate and don’t look around when the exam starts if not we are considered cheating. (254 words)
The End!
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Name:Guo Si Min
Class:1-F
VERSION1.4
When I was young , I lived with my grandparents.My grandmother took care of me , while my grandfather supports the family. My grandmother would prepared lunches and dinner for us.My grandfather would often be back in the afternoon to have lunch with us.
When my grandfather came back for lunch,I was happy . As I could hardly see him through out the day. Afterthat,he went back to work. After lunch,I would be going to the farm with my grandmother so that I can see the animals in the farm . We would go to the farm to feed the animals with lots of healthy foods. It was a excited day.
When I grow up , I started to help my grandmother to do the house work so that my grandmother will not be so busy everyday.Every afternoon,I will be doing the house work and my grandmother would go to the farm to feed the animal and bought some healthy food home to cook for the dinner.She cook the food was so delicious that I wanted to eat again.
Sometime,I will go to the farm to pet those animals . I am one of a animals love in my family. When I am feeling sad or lonely , I will go to the farm and those animals were cheer me up.
Most of all, I live with my grandparent for 6 to 7 years .I leave them because I have to start the journy of my studies. My grandparent were upsad but they know if I leave them I will live better. I was happy living with them for past few years. By the way, I was sad to leave them .
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Version 1.4
Name: Nur Syuhaimah Bte Mohamad
Class: 1 F
My Story…
While I was looking at my primary six class photo, I kept thinking about my classmates and I was so happy that my entire classmate passes our Primary School Leaving Examination (PSLE) except one pupil but his mark was so near to the passing marks. Five pupils went to express stream. The rest went to normal academic and normal technical.
This is my story when we work together before PSLE.
One Monday morning, I went to school and I promise that I will concentrate in my class. Because it was Four days before PSLE. When I went up to my class, my classmates were so good and they focus and concentrate to our teacher. My teacher, Mrs. Nor gives us some advised.
In the Afternoon, we got remedial. She asks us to do the practice paper that she gave us while she got a meeting to attend. At 5.30 in afternoon, we were released from our class.
On Wednesday, we were so busy. Because tomorrow is our last day to revise our English. We started staying back until 5.30 in the afternoon. But we were release 6.00 in the afternoon because we want to revise because if we go home, we will be restless. So my teacher said, “If u goes back, u may rest after a long time in school”. So we started going back.
On Thursday is our important day because it is the last day that we must go through English. And tomorrow is our big day because it’s our English PSLE. That time, we need to study with understanding. We tested our grammar to each other and sometimes we got wrong. We test each other until we get it.
In the Afternoon, when we were having lessons, one of our classmates was so irritating. He kept talking and talking. My teacher shouted “Shut Up!” We were so shocked.
“I’m not taking PSLE, u are the one. I’m not teaching you English because lessons are over.” Then when we went downstairs, she started saying “Good Luck” to my classmates.
The next day, it is our big day. They make an announcement that my class teacher wants to see all of us. She is so nice that she gave us a pencil box and there are stationery and mathematical sets for us. Then she said that we need to concentrate and don’t look around when the exam starts if not we are considered cheating. (406 words)
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syarifah natassya (18) 1F,
version 1.1
THE TALKING PUPILS
At Chang-ngan there lived a scholar, named Fang Tung, who though by no means destitute of ability, was a very unprincipled rake, and in the habit of following and speaking to any woman he might chance to meet.
The day before the spring festival of Clear Weather, he was strolling about outside the city when he saw a small carriage with red curtains and an embroidered awning, followed by a crowd of waiting-maids on horseback, one of whom was exceedingly pretty, and riding on a small palfrey.
Going closer to get a better view, Mr. Fang noticed that the carriage curtain was partly open, and inside he beheld a beautifully dressed girl of about sixteen, lovely beyond anything he had ever seen. Dazzled by the sight, he could not take his eyes off her; and now before, now behind, he followed the carriage for many a mile.
By-and-by he heard the young lady call out to her maid, and, when the latter came alongside, say to her, "Let down the screen for me. Who is this rude fellow that keeps on staring so ?" The maid accordingly let down the screen, and looking angrily at Mr. Fang, said to him, "This is the bride of the Seventh Prince in the City of Immortals going home to see her parents, and no village girl that you should stare at her thus." Then taking a handful of dust, she threw it at him and blinded him.
He rubbed his eyes and looked round, but the carriage and horses were gone. This frightened him, and he went off home, feeling very uncomfortable about the eyes. He sent for a doctor to examine his eyes, and on the pupils was found a small film, which had increased by next morning, the eyes watering incessantly all the time.
The film went on growing and in a few days was as thick as a cash. On the right pupil there came a kind of spiral, and as no medicine was of any avail, the sufferer gave himself up to grief and wished for death.
He then bethought himself of repenting of his misdeeds, and hearing that the Kuang-ming sutra could relieve misery, he got a copy and hired a man to teach it to him. At first it was very tedious work, but by degrees he became more composed, and spent the whole day in a posture of devotion, telling his beads.
At the end of a year he had arrived at a state of perfect calm, when one day he heard a small voice, about as loud as a fly's, calling out from his left eye: "It's horridly dark in here." To this he heard a reply from the right eye, saying, "Let us go out for a stroll, and cheer ourselves up a bit." Then he felt a wriggling in his nose which made it itch, just as if something was going out of each of the nostrils; and after a while he felt it again as if going the other way.
Afterwards he heard a voice from one eye say, "I hadn't seen the garden for a long time: the epidendrums are all withered and dead." Now Mr. Fang was very fond of these epidendrums, of which he had planted a great number, and had been accustomed to water them himself; but since the loss of his sight he had never even alluded to them.
Hearing, however, these words, he at once asked his wife why she had let the epidendrums die.She inquired how he knew they were dead, and when he told her she went out to see, and found them actually withered away. They were both very much astonished at this, and his wife proceeded to conceal herself in the room.
She then observed two tiny people, no bigger than a bean, come down from her husband's nose and run out of the door, where she lost sight of them.In a little while they came back and flew up to his face, like bees or beetles seeking their nests.
This went on for some days, until Mr. Fang heard from the left eye, "This roundabout road is not at all convenient. It would be as well for us to make a door." To this the right eye answered, "My wall is too thick: it wouldn't be at all an easy job."
"I'll try and open mine," said the left eye, "and then it will do for both of us." Whereupon Mr. Fang felt a pain in his left eye as if something was being split, and in a moment he found he could see the tables and chairs in the room. He was delighted at this and told his wife, who examined his eye and discovered an opening in the film, through which she could see the black pupil shining out beneath, the eyeball itself looking like a cracked pepper-corn.
By next morning the film had disappeared, and when his eye was closely examined it was observed to contain two pupils. The spiral on the right eye remained as before; and then they knew that the two pupils had taken up their abode in one eye. Further, although Mr. Fang was still blind of one eye, the sight of the other was better than that of the two together. From this time he was more careful of his behavior, and acquired in his part of the country the reputation of a virtuous man.
(425 words)
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syarifah natassya (18) 1F,
version 1.2
THE TALKING PUPILS
At Chang-ngan there lived a scholar, named Fang Tung, who though by no means destitute of ability, was a very unprincipled rake, and in the habit of following and speaking to any woman he might chance to meet.
The day before the spring festival of Clear Weather, he was strolling about outside the city when he saw a small carriage with red curtains and an embroidered awning, followed by a crowd of waiting-maids on horseback, one of whom was exceedingly pretty, and riding on a small palfrey.
Going closer to get a better view, Mr. Fang noticed that the carriage curtain was partly open, and inside he beheld a beautifully dressed girl of about sixteen, lovely beyond anything he had ever seen. Dazzled by the sight, he could not take his eyes off her; and now before, now behind, he followed the carriage for many a mile.
By-and-by he heard the young lady call out to her maid, and, when the latter came alongside, say to her, "Let down the screen for me. Who is this rude fellow that keeps on staring so ?" The maid accordingly let down the screen, and looking angrily at Mr. Fang, said to him, "This is the bride of the Seventh Prince in the City of Immortals going home to see her parents, and no village girl that you should stare at her thus." Then taking a handful of dust, she threw it at him and blinded him.
He rubbed his eyes and looked round, but the carriage and horses were gone. This frightened him, and he went off home, feeling very uncomfortable about the eyes. He sent for a doctor to examine his eyes, and on the pupils was found a small film, which had increased by next morning, the eyes watering incessantly all the time.
The film went on growing and in a few days was as thick as a cash. On the right pupil there came a kind of spiral, and as no medicine was of any avail, the sufferer gave himself up to grief and wished for death.
He then bethought himself of repenting of his misdeeds, and hearing that the Kuang-ming sutra could relieve misery, he got a copy and hired a man to teach it to him. At first it was very tedious work, but by degrees he became more composed, and spent the whole day in a posture of devotion, telling his beads.
At the end of a year he had arrived at a state of perfect calm, when one day he heard a small voice, about as loud as a fly's, calling out from his left eye: "It's horridly dark in here." To this he heard a reply from the right eye, saying, "Let us go out for a stroll, and cheer ourselves up a bit." Then he felt a wriggling in his nose which made it itch, just as if something was going out of each of the nostrils; and after a while he felt it again as if going the other way.
Afterwards he heard a voice from one eye say, "I hadn't seen the garden for a long time: the epidendrums are all withered and dead." Now Mr. Fang was very fond of these epidendrums, of which he had planted a great number, and had been accustomed to water them himself; but since the loss of his sight he had never even alluded to them.
Hearing, however, these words, he at once asked his wife why she had let the epidendrums die.She inquired how he knew they were dead, and when he told her she went out to see, and found them actually withered away. They were both very much astonished at this, and his wife proceeded to conceal herself in the room.
She then observed two tiny people, no bigger than a bean, come down from her husband's nose and run out of the door, where she lost sight of them.In a little while they came back and flew up to his face, like bees or beetles seeking their nests.
This went on for some days, until Mr. Fang heard from the left eye, "This roundabout road is not at all convenient. It would be as well for us to make a door." To this the right eye answered, "My wall is too thick: it wouldn't be at all an easy job."
"I'll try and open mine," said the left eye, "and then it will do for both of us." Whereupon Mr. Fang felt a pain in his left eye as if something was being split, and in a moment he found he could see the tables and chairs in the room. He was delighted at this and told his wife, who examined his eye and discovered an opening in the film, through which she could see the black pupil shining out beneath, the eyeball itself looking like a cracked pepper-corn.
By next morning the film had disappeared, and when his eye was closely examined it was observed to contain two pupils. The spiral on the right eye remained as before; and then they knew that the two pupils had taken up their abode in one eye. Further, although Mr. Fang was still blind of one eye, the sight of the other was better than that of the two together. From this time he was more careful of his behavior, and acquired in his part of the country the reputation of a virtuous man.
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syarifah natassya (18) 1F,
version 1.3
THE TALKING PUPILS
At Chang-ngan there lived a scholar, named Fang Tung, who though by no means destitute of ability, was a very unprincipled rake, and in the habit of following and speaking to any woman he might chance to meet.
The day before the spring festival of Clear Weather, he was strolling about outside the city when he saw a small carriage with red curtains and an embroidered awning, followed by a crowd of waiting-maids on horseback, one of whom was exceedingly pretty, and riding on a small palfrey.
Going closer to get a better view, Mr. Fang noticed that the carriage curtain was partly open, and inside he beheld a beautifully dressed girl of about sixteen, lovely beyond anything he had ever seen. Dazzled by the sight, he could not take his eyes off her; and now before, now behind, he followed the carriage for many a mile.
By-and-by he heard the young lady call out to her maid, and, when the latter came alongside, say to her, "Let down the screen for me. Who is this rude fellow that keeps on staring so ?" The maid accordingly let down the screen, and looking angrily at Mr. Fang, said to him, "This is the bride of the Seventh Prince in the City of Immortals going home to see her parents, and no village girl that you should stare at her thus." Then taking a handful of dust, she threw it at him and blinded him.
He rubbed his eyes and looked round, but the carriage and horses were gone. This frightened him, and he went off home, feeling very uncomfortable about the eyes. He sent for a doctor to examine his eyes, and on the pupils was found a small film, which had increased by next morning, the eyes watering incessantly all the time.
The film went on growing and in a few days was as thick as a cash. On the right pupil there came a kind of spiral, and as no medicine was of any avail, the sufferer gave himself up to grief and wished for death.
He then bethought himself of repenting of his misdeeds, and hearing that the Kuang-ming sutra could relieve misery, he got a copy and hired a man to teach it to him. At first it was very tedious work, but by degrees he became more composed, and spent the whole day in a posture of devotion, telling his beads.
At the end of a year he had arrived at a state of perfect calm, when one day he heard a small voice, about as loud as a fly's, calling out from his left eye: "It's horridly dark in here." To this he heard a reply from the right eye, saying, "Let us go out for a stroll, and cheer ourselves up a bit." Then he felt a wriggling in his nose which made it itch, just as if something was going out of each of the nostrils; and after a while he felt it again as if going the other way.
Afterwards he heard a voice from one eye say, "I hadn't seen the garden for a long time: the epidendrums are all withered and dead." Now Mr. Fang was very fond of these epidendrums, of which he had planted a great number, and had been accustomed to water them himself; but since the loss of his sight he had never even alluded to them.
Hearing, however, these words, he at once asked his wife why she had let the epidendrums die.She inquired how he knew they were dead, and when he told her she went out to see, and found them actually withered away. They were both very much astonished at this, and his wife proceeded to conceal herself in the room.
She then observed two tiny people, no bigger than a bean, come down from her husband's nose and run out of the door, where she lost sight of them.In a little while they came back and flew up to his face, like bees or beetles seeking their nests.
This went on for some days, until Mr. Fang heard from the left eye, "This roundabout road is not at all convenient. It would be as well for us to make a door." To this the right eye answered, "My wall is too thick: it wouldn't be at all an easy job."
"I'll try and open mine," said the left eye, "and then it will do for both of us." Whereupon Mr. Fang felt a pain in his left eye as if something was being split, and in a moment he found he could see the tables and chairs in the room. He was delighted at this and told his wife, who examined his eye and discovered an opening in the film, through which she could see the black pupil shining out beneath, the eyeball itself looking like a cracked pepper-corn.
By next morning the film had disappeared, and when his eye was closely examined it was observed to contain two pupils. The spiral on the right eye remained as before; and then they knew that the two pupils had taken up their abode in one eye. Further, although Mr. Fang was still blind of one eye, the sight of the other was better than that of the two together. From this time he was more careful of his behavior, and acquired in his part of the country the reputation of a virtuous man.
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syarifah natassya (18) 1F,
version 1.4
THE TALKING PUPILS
At Chang-ngan there lived a scholar, named Fang Tung, who though by no means destitute of ability, was a very unprincipled rake, and in the habit of following and speaking to any woman he might chance to meet.
The day before the spring festival of Clear Weather, he was strolling about outside the city when he saw a small carriage with red curtains and an embroidered awning, followed by a crowd of waiting-maids on horseback, one of whom was exceedingly pretty, and riding on a small palfrey.
Going closer to get a better view, Mr. Fang noticed that the carriage curtain was partly open, and inside he beheld a beautifully dressed girl of about sixteen, lovely beyond anything he had ever seen. Dazzled by the sight, he could not take his eyes off her; and now before, now behind, he followed the carriage for many a mile.
By-and-by he heard the young lady call out to her maid, and, when the latter came alongside, say to her, "Let down the screen for me. Who is this rude fellow that keeps on staring so ?" The maid accordingly let down the screen, and looking angrily at Mr. Fang, said to him, "This is the bride of the Seventh Prince in the City of Immortals going home to see her parents, and no village girl that you should stare at her thus." Then taking a handful of dust, she threw it at him and blinded him.
He rubbed his eyes and looked round, but the carriage and horses were gone. This frightened him, and he went off home, feeling very uncomfortable about the eyes. He sent for a doctor to examine his eyes, and on the pupils was found a small film, which had increased by next morning, the eyes watering incessantly all the time.
The film went on growing and in a few days was as thick as a cash. On the right pupil there came a kind of spiral, and as no medicine was of any avail, the sufferer gave himself up to grief and wished for death.
He then bethought himself of repenting of his misdeeds, and hearing that the Kuang-ming sutra could relieve misery, he got a copy and hired a man to teach it to him. At first it was very tedious work, but by degrees he became more composed, and spent the whole day in a posture of devotion, telling his beads.
At the end of a year he had arrived at a state of perfect calm, when one day he heard a small voice, about as loud as a fly's, calling out from his left eye: "It's horridly dark in here." To this he heard a reply from the right eye, saying, "Let us go out for a stroll, and cheer ourselves up a bit." Then he felt a wriggling in his nose which made it itch, just as if something was going out of each of the nostrils; and after a while he felt it again as if going the other way.
Afterwards he heard a voice from one eye say, "I hadn't seen the garden for a long time: the epidendrums are all withered and dead." Now Mr. Fang was very fond of these epidendrums, of which he had planted a great number, and had been accustomed to water them himself; but since the loss of his sight he had never even alluded to them.
Hearing, however, these words, he at once asked his wife why she had let the epidendrums die.She inquired how he knew they were dead, and when he told her she went out to see, and found them actually withered away. They were both very much astonished at this, and his wife proceeded to conceal herself in the room.
She then observed two tiny people, no bigger than a bean, come down from her husband's nose and run out of the door, where she lost sight of them.In a little while they came back and flew up to his face, like bees or beetles seeking their nests.
This went on for some days, until Mr. Fang heard from the left eye, "This roundabout road is not at all convenient. It would be as well for us to make a door." To this the right eye answered, "My wall is too thick: it wouldn't be at all an easy job."
"I'll try and open mine," said the left eye, "and then it will do for both of us." Whereupon Mr. Fang felt a pain in his left eye as if something was being split, and in a moment he found he could see the tables and chairs in the room. He was delighted at this and told his wife, who examined his eye and discovered an opening in the film, through which she could see the black pupil shining out beneath, the eyeball itself looking like a cracked pepper-corn.
By next morning the film had disappeared, and when his eye was closely examined it was observed to contain two pupils. The spiral on the right eye remained as before; and then they knew that the two pupils had taken up their abode in one eye. Further, although Mr. Fang was still blind of one eye, the sight of the other was better than that of the two together. From this time he was more careful of his behavior, and acquired in his part of the country the reputation of a virtuous man.
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syarifah natassya
1F (18)
journal
Today was Donna’s birthday. The original plan was to go out to a restaurant somewhere, but seeing as I woke up feeling like I’d been run over by a bus (or at least by the latest virus to be going around) we shelved that idea.
“Aha,” I thought. “I’ll cook dinner. Sure-fire brownie-points.”
Well, maybe not entirely sure-fire. I’ve not had the best of records cooking for girlfriends. Provided I don’t screw this up entirely, though, I should be home free.
Still there was the problem of that run-over feeling. I needed something that tasted nice but that I could make easily, using ingredients from no further than the deli round the corner. Thankfully, my mother had provided the solution a year ago in the form of a present, namely the Bloke’s tasty no-fuss recipes cook-book.
I found the one meat-free recipe in the book (anchovies don’t count as meat), staggered to the deli to source the ingredients, and then decided to brag to Vidya on IM about what a good boyfriend I was being.
Vidya: So what are you cooking?
Charles: Oh, spaghetti with this tomato-and-stuff sauce.
Vidya: No, what is it called?
Charles: I don’t know, I never really looked. I could go get the book if you really want.
Vidya: Go on, I want to know.
Charles: OK, it's… er… spaghetti puttanesca.
Vidya: You realise what that means, right?
Yes. I had carefully prepared to cook, to celebrate my girlfriend’s birthday… Whore’s Spaghetti.
For the record, it was delicious.
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syarifah natassya
1F (18)
intresting entry 1
Liz’s grandmother is preparing to sell her old cabin, a place that has seen many generations. Liz comes to help her grandmother and she awakens one night to see a mysterious blue light that becomes the ghostly figure of a woman. Liz hears voices coming from the walls, which Liz can step through to go back in time. On the other side of the walls, she meets a family of children, in need of help.
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syarifah natassya
1F (18)
intresting entry 2
Dave Packer’s fifth-grade class is called the “Unshushables” by their teachers who have tried for years to keep them quiet. Dave has just read about Mahatma Gandhi and learned that the man practiced silence one day a week to bring order to his mind. Dave decides to give this idea a try. The contest that ensues puts boys against girls and students against teachers creating some controversy.
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NAME: TEY LEE ER(20)
CLASS:1F
When I was immature , I subsist with my grandmother. My grandmother took care of me almost half of her life.
I still remember was I was in Malaysia , my grandmother told me my mother and brother are coming to Malaysia to frequent me. And I wait outside the gate for very long. I didn't had my breakfast , lunch and dinner. i was just foolish standing there waiting.
Then around 8 plus, my grandmother told me my mother and brother are not coming because my mother is busy. I'm so saddened.
From that day onwards , I everyday will help my grandmother to sweep the floor , mop the floor. I still know how to cook some especially to the taste dishes to let my grandmother taste it. After few years , my mother suddenly come Malaysia and say want to bring me back to Singapore. I didn't want.
But I was force. Every year I will go back to Malaysia and look for my grandmother , let her taste my cooking. Last year , she say , my cooking has become better a lot.
But now , she's ill , I should take care of her. And I will.
Grandmother, I LOVE YOU!
Rozalia Rosli(16)1F
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June holidays had just arrived. My family and I had plans in mind to go on a holiday trip at Australia. My parents had booked a hotel and air line tickets for the trip. It was just a few days more before the big day arrived which is going to Australia.
I was contented when I just found out a sprinkling weeks ago about the it. But not now as I already know that I will not have the one and only chance that is to go to Holiday trip.
My passport had expired but I didn’t know about it. When my mother was packing up some attire in a few valise a week before the trip. Beside her was a stack of our passports. I went to her to help her out in the packing. When I am done, I take a look at my passport and turn to a page where it shows my particulars. I fortuitously took a glance at the due date of the passport. I was shock that the date that was stated as the expiry date. ”My passport has expired!”, I screamed in a distressed voice. My mother who was directly beside gaze aghast. ”Are you sure?”, my mother questioned me in a curious voice.
I showed her the particulars page and pointed at the expiry date of the passport. Several minutes later, my father reached home from his working place. My mother told my father the situation that our family were in. My father took a few minutes to make decision whether to go to the trip to Australia. He announced the decision he had made to me that he was going to leave me with my acquaintance.
I respected my father’s decision. I decided not to dishearten my small sister by assuring my parents and my bantam sister that I would be fine with my acquaintance. It was the most distressed part of my life that I had ever experienced.(328 words)
Rasinah(15)1F
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This story is about me when I was in primary six last year. It was very frightening and quite happening year because last year is an important year to me. My primary school leaving examination last year is well done because I did studied and my aggregate score is 178 and my parent is very proud of me. It was surprising because I am not quite good at Math but I got C for it.
My form teacher and friends, congratulate me for my very excellent grades for my primary school leaving examination (PSLE). The sad thing was I did know which school my friends goes as after I got my PSLE results as I did meet them at all.
All of my friend last year were very kind and helpful because if I am absent and do not know how to do my homework or project they will guide me. Several days later, my parent will bought me a hand phone. I was so surprise to know that they bought me a present for my good PSLE results .
Decision of going which secondary school was my brother and his wife. Their first choice was Bedemeer secondary .
When the day of which school I join, I was looking blue as I had join Bedemeer secondary. My parent transfer me to Bedok North secondary because it is near to my cousin house and easy for me to go home. The result for when I need to go to this school is fast, I was happy because the next day is the opening of school I cried with happiness because I could not accept it.(273 words)
Rafizah(14)
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“Fire, fire“ my neighbour yelled. It was sharp at five in the morning. My family and I were still asleep as it was a Sunday morning. When we were still sound asleep, my neighbour who had just screamed, knock on my front door gate. I smelled something burning, so I decided to I look downstairs below my storey through a window. There was a big fire and thick smoke coming out below. We all were told to get out of the flat immediately.
“Can someone call the fire engine” one of my neighbour command. ”I’m exhausted when can we went to bed”, said a resident in the flat in a sleepy voice. Ten minutes later, the fire engine, police and the ambulance came. When the fire was put out, we were all relieved. The ambulance came on time to checked that everyone was saved.
The fire was actually cause by Tina’s grandmother, who is one of the resident in the flat. She was boiling water in the middle of the night. Tina and her other members of the family was already asleep at that moment. The fire went brimming and their house was terribly burnt. They didn’t scold the grandmother as they know that the grandmother is an absent-minded person. Then we finally get a chance to go bed.(219 words)
This story is from where I write my diary four years ago, I discovered my lost diary the Day before. When I was nine years old, it was my birthday! I am so lucky to be born during National Day.
My brother blows thirty balloons and put up along the living room, bought ten 1.5 litres of Pepsi drinks and a mp3 player as my birthday gift, my father bought a chocolate cake plus cream for me, bought a box of cookies for me, my mother bought me a school bag for me while I invite all my friends to the party.
As the sky was getting dark, we finish preparing the party. Then my family and I open the television to watch the National Day show, which take place at Marina Bay. The scene was picturesque and we saw a lot of groups of people coming, some were form PAP. Then someone knocked on the door, I was astonished.
At 8 pm, we watch some performances by some performers while we prepared candles and plastic knife for the party. Then at the end of the show, they put eighty fireworks. They were extremely colourful , and they were beautiful. The fireworks ended fifteen minutes. After the show, time for the party! My parents lighted candles. Everyone sang the birthday song. After that, we ate the cakes. After that, we played some games .I went overjoyed. At end of the party, my friends said goodbye to me and went home.
That is my nine years old best birthday party ever!
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This story is from where I writen my diary four years ago, I discovered my lost diary the Day before. When I was nine years old, it was my birthday! I am so lucky to be born during National Day.
My brother blows thirty balloons and put up along the living room, bought ten 1.5 litres of Pepsi drinks and a mp3 player as my birthday gift, my father bought a chocolate cake plus cream for me, bought a box of cookies for me, my mother bought me a school bag for me while I invite all my friends to the party.
As the sky was getting dark, we finish preparing the party. Then my family and I open the television to watch the National Day show, which takes place at Marina Bay. The scene was picturesque and we saw lots of groups of people coming, some were form PAP. Then someone knocked on the door, I was astonished.
At 8 pm, we watch some performances by some performers while we prepared candles and plastic knife for the party. Then at the end of the show, they put eighty fireworks. They were extremely colourful , and they were beautiful. The fireworks ended fifteen minutes. After the show, time for the party! My parents lighted candles. Everyone sang the birthday song. After that, we ate the cakes. After that, we played some games .I went overjoyed. At the end of the party, my friends said goodbye to me and went home.
That is my nine years old best birthday party ever! (260 words)
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Version 1.3,4
Hello I am chor yew at 1F
One nice day, I was assisting my friend to upgrading his IBM (International Business Machine) ThinkPad 701C. I put on my grounding strap and carefully disassemble his laptop, remove the integrated the old RAM (random access memory) chip by removing the solder, then re-solder the new faster memory chip.
After replacing the intergraded RAM, I replaced the RAM on the socket with faster memory, then I replace the hard drive. I then insert the recovery disk and recover the entire disk with operating system, Windows 3.1 and IBM preinstalled software.
When my friends came and look for me, he tried out my upgraded system, he exclaimed “wow! what a very fast system, now I can play my games and surf the internet now”!, when he tried, it is really fast with less lag
After trying my upgraded a system, he reward me a set of legal Windows 95 B CD and floppy disk for installing the operating system and he thank me for help me
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This story is from where I written my diary four years ago, I discovered my lost diary the Day before. When I was nine years old, it was my birthday! I am so lucky to be born during National Day.
My brother blows thirty balloons and put up along the living room, bought ten 1.5 litres of Pepsi drinks and a mp3 player as my birthday gift, my father bought a chocolate cake plus cream for me, bought a box of cookies for me, my mother bought me a school bag for me while I invite all my friends to the party.
As the sky was getting dark, we finish preparing the party. Then my family and I open the television to watch the National Day show, which takes place at Marina Bay. The scene was picturesque and we saw lots of groups of people coming, some were form PAP. Then someone knocked on the door, I was astonished.
At 8 pm, we watch some performances by some performers while we prepared candles and plastic knife for the party. Then at the end of the show, they put eighty fireworks. They were extremely colorful, and they were beautiful. The fireworks ended fifteen minutes. After the show, time for the party! My parents lighted candles. Everyone sang the birthday song. After that, we ate the cakes. After that, we played some games .I went overjoyed. At the end of the party, my friends said goodbye to me and went home.
That is my nine years old best birthday party ever!
i have checked my work four times before posting it, one for content, vocabulary ,grammar and lastly for spelling before posting it
from=jian wu (285 words)
This story is from where I written my diary four years ago, I discovered my lost diary the Day before. When I was nine years old, it was my birthday! I am so lucky to be born during National Day.
My brother blows thirty balloons and put up along the living room, bought ten 1.5 litres of Pepsi drinks and a mp3 player as my birthday gift, my father bought a chocolate cake plus cream for me, bought a box of cookies for me, my mother bought me a school bag for me while I invite all my friends to the party.
As the sky was getting dark, we finish preparing the party. Then my family and I open the television to watch the National Day show, which takes place at Marina Bay. The scene was picturesque and we saw lots of groups of people coming, some were form PAP. Then someone knocked on the door, I was astonished.
At 8 pm, we watch some performances by some performers while we prepared candles and plastic knife for the party. Then at the end of the show, they put eighty fireworks. They were extremely colorful, and they were beautiful. The fireworks ended fifteen minutes. After the show, time for the party! My parents lighted candles. Everyone sang the birthday song. After that, we ate the cakes. After that, we played some games .I went overjoyed. At the end of the party, my friends said goodbye to me and went home.
That is my nine years old best birthday party ever! (260 words)
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Nurfarhana (12)
1F
this is my version 1.1
Chocolate, how I love you, let me recount the ways you have pleased my palette, and allowed my olfactory senses to rise to new levels of awareness. But which chocolate is my favorite? I love so many; it is hard to choose between them all. It might be the chocolate chips straight out of the bag or the chocolate fudge that keeps me coming back for more (cutting that one last sliver off the original block).
Perhaps it is the Junior Mints that I must have when I am sitting in the theater waiting for the previews to end and they have melted into unsightly chocolate clumps. I don't mind, so I just toss them in my mouth and let them melt apart. It could be the peanut butter balls that I received as a gift from Brenda. She took such care in making them. She wrapped them carefully in wax paper and even placed them in a decorative holiday tin. But alas, there there were only six pieces, and I just could not stop myself. I ate them in just one sitting.
Well I did try to share, but the chocolate monster in me just took over. Alas, I believe that my favorite chocolate of all is the chocolate Egg that is available at Easter. I like to bite off the top of the egg and lick out the filling until my tongue can't fit any further into the egg without my nose getting a chocolate mustache. But, if I can't have a piece of chocolate, then I will settle for my chocolate scented candles from Partylite or perhaps a mocha cappuccino from the infamous Starbucks. Yes, I have got to have my chocolate fix no matter the cost.
Nurfarhana (12)
1F
this is my version 1.2
Chocolate, how I love you, let me recount the ways you have pleased my palette, and allowed my olfactory senses to rise to new levels of awareness. But which chocolate is my favorite? I love so many; it is hard to choose between them all. It might be the chocolate chips straight out of the bag or the chocolate fudge that keeps me coming back for more (cutting that one last sliver off the original block).
Perhaps it is the Junior Mints that I must have when I am sitting in the theater waiting for the previews to end and they have melted into unsightly chocolate clumps. I don't mind, so I just toss them in my mouth and let them melt apart. It could be the peanut butter balls that I received as a gift from Brenda. She took such care in making them. She wrapped them carefully in wax paper and even placed them in a decorative holiday tin. But alas, there there were only six pieces, and I just could not stop myself. I ate them in just one sitting.
Well I did try to share, but the chocolate monster in me just took over. Alas, I believe that my favorite chocolate of all is the chocolate Egg that is available at Easter. I like to bite off the top of the egg and lick out the filling until my tongue can't fit any further into the egg without my nose getting a chocolate mustache. But, if I can't have a piece of chocolate, then I will settle for my chocolate scented candles from Partylite or perhaps a mocha cappuccino from the infamous Starbucks. Yes, I have got to have my chocolate fix no matter the cost.
Nurfarhana (12)
1F
this is my version 1.3
Chocolate, how I love you, let me recount the ways you have pleased my palette, and allowed my olfactory senses to rise to new levels of awareness. But which chocolate is my favorite? I love so many; it is hard to choose between them all. It might be the chocolate chips straight out of the bag or the chocolate fudge that keeps me coming back for more (cutting that one last sliver off the original block).
Perhaps it is the Junior Mints that I must have when I am sitting in the theater waiting for the previews to end and they have melted into unsightly chocolate clumps. I don't mind, so I just toss them in my mouth and let them melt apart. It could be the peanut butter balls that I received as a gift from Brenda. She took such care in making them. She wrapped them carefully in wax paper and even placed them in a decorative holiday tin. But alas, there there were only six pieces, and I just could not stop myself. I ate them in just one sitting.
Well I did try to share, but the chocolate monster in me just took over. Alas, I believe that my favorite chocolate of all is the chocolate Egg that is available at Easter. I like to bite off the top of the egg and lick out the filling until my tongue can't fit any further into the egg without my nose getting a chocolate mustache. But, if I can't have a piece of chocolate, then I will settle for my chocolate scented candles from Partylite or perhaps a mocha cappuccino from the infamous Starbucks. Yes, I have got to have my chocolate fix no matter the cost.
Nurfarhana (12)
1F
this is my version 1.4
Chocolate, how I love you, let me recount the ways you have pleased my palette, and allowed my olfactory senses to rise to new levels of awareness. But which chocolate is my favorite? I love so many; it is hard to choose between them all. It might be the chocolate chips straight out of the bag or the chocolate fudge that keeps me coming back for more (cutting that one last sliver off the original block).
Perhaps it is the Junior Mints that I must have when I am sitting in the theater waiting for the previews to end and they have melted into unsightly chocolate clumps. I don't mind, so I just toss them in my mouth and let them melt apart. It could be the peanut butter balls that I received as a gift from Brenda. She took such care in making them. She wrapped them carefully in wax paper and even placed them in a decorative holiday tin. But alas, there there were only six pieces, and I just could not stop myself. I ate them in just one sitting.
Well I did try to share, but the chocolate monster in me just took over. Alas, I believe that my favorite chocolate of all is the chocolate Egg that is available at Easter. I like to bite off the top of the egg and lick out the filling until my tongue can't fit any further into the egg without my nose getting a chocolate mustache. But, if I can't have a piece of chocolate, then I will settle for my chocolate scented candles from Partylite or perhaps a mocha cappuccino from the infamous Starbucks. Yes, I have got to have my chocolate fix no matter the cost.
Version 1.1
I was once I was a rich boy and I had bodyguards that always follow me.
I wanted to have two Audi cars, two motorcycles and an airplane but my father told me that I must have license. So, I must continue study until my age limited to take license. I was popular in school and every girl crowded around me. My bodyguard helped me to stop them from crowding around me but they fail to stop them. I quickly ran towards my stretcher car and went in.
When I reached my school the next day, many girls stand in front of my back seat door and taking picture of me. I opened my door and they started screaming at my ears. I dashed to the hall and cover my face because I wanted to avoid them. When it started lesson, my teacher teasing me and I started to be embarrass. During recess, I must eat at the secret place because some of the girls always disturbing me when I was eating.
Most of the boys felt really jealous when they crowding around me. After lesson ended, I dashed to my stretcher car. When I reached home, I started doing my homework. Sometimes, I asked my bodyguard to do my homework. My parents always working twenty four hours non stop. I got really boring when they were not in the house. The next day, It started all over again but when I walked to the hall, I saw a pretty, simple girl walked passed me. I started to like her because I really liked simple girl. I went to approach her but she ignored me. After lesson ended, I gave her flower but she rejected it. I tried many times to get the girl as my girlfriend and finally, she became my new girlfriend and get married on age thirty. I was totally changed my attitude when I started to like her until I got to the university. That was my romantic story.
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Version 1.2
I was once I was a boy wonder, rich boy and I had bodyguards that always follow me.
I wanted to have two Audi cars, two motorcycles and an airplane but my father told me that I must have license. So, I must continue study until my age limited to take license. I was popular in school and every girl crowded around me. I beckon my bodyguard to help me to stop them from crowding around me but they fail to stop them. I quickly ran towards my stretcher car and went in.
When I reached my school the next day, many girls stand in front of my back seat door and taking picture of me. I opened my door and they started screaming at my ears. I dashed to the hall and cover my face because I wanted to avoid them. When it started lesson, my teacher teasing me and I started to be embarrass. During recess, I must eat at the secret place because some of the girls always disturbing me while I was eating.
Most of the boys felt really jealous when they crowding around me. After lesson ended, I dashed to my stretcher car. When I reached home, I started to do my homework. Sometimes, I asked my bodyguard to do my homework. My parents always working twenty four hours non stop. I got really boring when they were not in the house. The next day, It started all over again but when I walked to the hall, I saw a pretty, simple girl just walked passed me. I started to like her because I really liked simple girl. I went to approached her but she turns a shoulder at me. After lesson ended, I gave her flower but she rejected it. I tried many times to get the girl as my girlfriend and finally, she became my new girlfriend and get married on age thirty. I was totally changed my attitude when I started to like her until I got to the university. That was my romantic story.
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I HAVE MY WORK 4 TIMES:
FIRSTLY CONTENT
SECONDLY GRAMMAR
THIRDLY VOCABULARY
FOURTHLY SPELLING
Version 1.3
I was once I was a boy wonder, rich boy and I had bodyguards that always follow me.
I wanted to have two Audi cars, two motorcycle and an airplane but my father tell me that I must have license. So, I must continue study until my age limited to take license. I was popular in school and every girl crowded around me. I beckon my bodyguard to help me to stop them from crowding around me but they fail to stop them. I quickly ran towards my stretcher car and went in.
When I reached my school the next day, many girls stand in front of my back seat door and taking picture of me. I opened my door and they started screaming at my ears. I dashed to the hall and cover my face because I wanted to avoid them. When it started lesson, my teacher teasing me and I started to be embarrass. During recess, I must eat at the secret place because some of the girls always disturbing me while I was eating.
Most of the boys felt really jealous when they crowding around me. After lesson ended, I dashed to my stretcher car. When I reached home, I started to do my homework. Sometimes, I asked my bodyguard to do my homework. My parents always working twenty four hours non stop. I got really boring when they were not in the house. The next day, It started all over again but when I walked to the hall, I saw a pretty, simple girl just walked passed me. I started to like her because I really liked simple girl. I went to approached her but she turns a shoulder at me. After lesson ended, I gave her flower but she rejected it. I tried many times to get the girl as my girlfriend and finally, she became my new girlfriend and get married on age thirty. I was totally changed my attitude when I started to like her until I got to the university. That was my romantic story.
343words
I HAVE MY WORK 4 TIMES:
FIRSTLY CONTENT
SECONDLY GRAMMAR
THIRDLY VOCABULARY
FOURTHLY SPELLING
Version 1.4
I was once I was a boy wonder, rich boy and I had bodyguards that always follow me.
I wanted to have two Audi cars, two motorcycles and an airplane but my father told me that I must have license. So, I must continue study until my age limited to take license. I was popular in school and every girl crowded around me. I beckon my bodyguard to help me to stop them from crowding around me but they fail to stop them. I quickly ran towards my stretcher car and went in.
When I reached my school the next day, many girls stand in front of my back seat door and taking picture of me. I opened my door and they started screaming at my ears. I dashed to the hall and cover my face because I wanted to avoid them. When it started lesson, my teacher teasing me and I started to be embarrass. During recess, I must eat at the secret place because some of the girls always disturbing me while I was eating.
Most of the boys felt really jealous when they crowding around me. After lesson ended, I dashed to my stretcher car. When I reached home, I started to do my homework. Sometimes, I asked my bodyguard to do my homework. My parents always working twenty four hours non stop. I got really boring when they were not in the house. The next day, It started all over again but when I walked to the hall, I saw a pretty, simple girl just walked passed me. I started to like her because I really liked simple girl. I went to approached her but she turns a shoulder at me. After lesson ended, I gave her flower but she rejected it. I tried many times to get the girl as my girlfriend and finally, she became my new girlfriend and get married on age thirty. I was totally changed my attitude when I started to like her until I got to the university. That was my romantic story.
343words
I HAVE MY WORK 4 TIMES:
FIRSTLY CONTENT
SECONDLY GRAMMAR
THIRDLY VOCABULARY
FOURTHLY SPELLING
Hi Mr.Alvin Lau My name is jimson low (22)1F
version 1.3
This story is about the first time. I seat on an aeroplane to Hong Kong... When I first knew that, I was going to Hong Kong with my cousin,I was so shock because this was the first time my cousin wanted me to go oversea with them.
When it was nigth, the night before we are going Hong Kong my brother and I have to sleep early because ride is at 5.45a.m ,I was so overwrought of the excitement that I could not go to sleep,so I go towards the computer.
When I saw light in my brother room,I jump up with excitement knowing its time to go to the airport.I quickly shut down the computer and get ready to go!!!We seat on the plane for 7 hours.
We went there for 5 to 7 days and we know more about hong kong.The first day we get to check in to a four star hotel our suite was on the 22 floor when I get to our suite, I frist dush in to the room then I saw the view it was impressive then after we have eaten,we get to see beautiful view that I never seen before.Day 2 and day 3 we explore Hong Kong,day 4 my favorite we went to disneyland we spend a whole day there playing and feasting on food and when it was night,it was very cold I put on about 3 stirt and a jacket but it was still very cold.Day 5 we get to eat at a five star restaurent the food was very mouth teasting. The 6 day our tourguide take us to see where jackey chen live. We never see him in life but we get to see his house and the 7 day we pack our things and went to the airport...
When we get back to singapore,it was late night but my brother and I could not sleep because of jet-lag =D
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Hi Mr.Alvin Lau My name is jimson low (22)1F
version 1.3
This story is about the first time I seat on an aeroplane to Hong Kong... When I first knew that, I was going to Hong Kong with my cousin,I was so shock because this was the first time my cousin wanted me to go oversea with them.
When it was nigth, the night before we are going Hong Kong my brother and I have to sleep early because ride is at 5.45a.m ,I was so overwrought of the excitement that I could not go to sleep,so I go towards the computer and turn it on and started playing.
When I saw light in my brother room,I jump up with excitement knowing it was time to go to the airport.I quickly shut down the computer and get ready to go!!!We seat on the plane for 7 hours.
We went there for 5 to 7 days and we know more about hong kong.The first day we get to check in to a four star hotel.Our suite was on the 22 floor when I get to our suite, I dush in to the room then I saw the view it was impressive then after we have eaten,we get to see beautiful view that I never seen before.Day 2 and day 3 we explore Hong Kong,day 4 my favorite we went to disneyland we spend a whole day there playing and feasting on food and when it was night,it was very cold I put on about 3 stirt and a jacket but it was still very cold.Day 5 we get to eat at a five star restaurent the food was very mouth teasting. The 6 day our tourguide take us to see where jackey chen house if he was in hong kong. We never see him in life but we get to see his house and the 7 day we pack our things and went to the airport...
When we get back to singapore,it was late night but my brother and I could not sleep because of jet-lag =D
word count(346 words)
I have check my work 3 time for content,volcabulary,grammar and spelling before posting it.
Jimson low
Sorry the last one is 1.4
and the index note is (23)
hi sir,my name is brian from 1f this is version 1.4 of my story it is about my ncc camp on 2nd and 3rd march 2009:mr lee anouced that we were going for camp and gave us consent forms,we were overjoyed we were so happy that we could relax at the camp and make new friends.i when we reached the campus which was called amoy quee camp.we were happy as we got to do flying fox,rock climbing,paint ball,archery and even sleep in ral army bunks!the bunks were rather stuffy and we had hard time sleeping as my bunk mates kept flashing thier torchlights at us!we got angry and shouted until our sir came we all kept quiet.the next day we did alot of fun stuff.i love that camp and i hope we can go there again!
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3rd for grammer and
4th for vocabluary
and maybe an army baby might look like this:
Hi Mr Lau. I am Nur Syahirah 1F. this is my story... This is my version 1.3
I waited silently, not daring to move, not even to breathe. I crouched behind the door, curling myself into the smallest shape possible, hoping I would not be found. Outside, the floorboards groaned in protest as the creature stalked ever closer towards me. I swallowed a huge lump in my throat, which was threatening to choke me. I waited. Suddenly, it happened.
There was nobody in my house. I am so scared because my grandma had just pass away. My grandma had a stroke that’s why my grandma died. Suddenly my handphone
rang, “Ring,ring!!”. I pick up and heard a lady voice, the voice sound exactly like my grandmother. I hang up the phone and my hand was sweating. Sixty second later, I heard a lady’s voice crying and shouting for helped. I locked my bedroom’s door and lying on my bed and closed my eyes. I am so scarded that my handphone rang again and I heard my grandmother’s voice and she said “ Open the door!” while she knocks on my door.
My television was automically switch on and I off it. But it was on again. I question myself “Why must I’ll be the one who suffered here!!” The question kept playing in mind. The time was already 12am.
My head was dizzy and I fell asleep. Suddenly I heard a firmiliar voice. It was my mother who was waking me up for school. I asked my mother “Mother did you go anywhere yesterday?”. My mother answered “No, yesterday we did not go anywhere.Why?”. I just smile and forget about it. I realised that it was a dream.
The End. (292 words)
I have checked my work: Firstly for content , secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammer and lastly for spelling..
Hi Mr Lau. I am Nur Syahirah 1F. this is my story... This is my version 1.4
I waited silently, not daring to move, not even to breathe. I crouched behind the door, curling myself into the smallest shape possible, hoping I would not be found. Outside, the floorboards groaned in protest as the creature stalked ever closer towards me. I swallowed a huge lump in my throat, which was threatening to choke me. I waited. Suddenly, it happened.
There was nobody in my house. I am so scared because my grandma had just pass away. My grandma had a stroke that’s why my grandma died. Suddenly my handphone rang, “Ring,ring!!”. I pick up and heard a lady voice, the voice sound exactly like my grandmother. I hang up the phone and my hand was sweating. Sixty second later, I heard a lady’s voice crying and shouting for helped. I locked my bedroom’s door and lying on my bed and closed my eyes. I am so scarded that my handphone rang again and I heard my grandmother’s voice and she said “ Open the door!” while she knocks on my door.
My television was automically switch on and I off it. But it was on again. I question myself “Why must I’ll be the one who suffered here!!” The question kept playing in mind. The time was already 12am.
My head was dizzy and I fell asleep. Suddenly I heard a firmiliar voice. It was my mother who was waking me up for school. I asked my mother “Mother did you go anywhere yesterday?”. My mother answered “No, yesterday we did not go anywhere.Why?”. I just smile and forget about it. I realised that it was a dream.
The End. (292 words)
I have checked my work: Firstly for content , secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammer and lastly for spelling..
Haziq(31)
1F
version 1.3
Last Tuesday,I was in the bus on my way to school.I was seated beside a bespectacled man.All other seats were occupied.The bus stopped to pick up more passengers.An expectant mother carrying a vegetable-laden basket boarded the bus.
At this juncture,I saw the plight of the expectant mother.She gave up her seat to an old lady.The lady smiled and sat down.I stood and held on to the railing.
When the bus was approaching my school,the lady rose and pressed the bell to indicate that she wanted to alight.That was a good deed that I saw on my way to school.
I have checked my work: Firstly for content , secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling..
Haziq(31)
1F
version 1.4
Last Tuesday,I was in the bus on my way to school.I was seated beside a bespectacled man.All other seats were occupied.The bus stopped to pick up more passengers.An expectant mother carrying a vegetable-laden basket boarded the bus.
At this juncture,I saw the plight of the expectant mother.She gave up her seat to an old lady.The lady smiled and sat down.I stood and held on to the railing.
When the bus was approaching my school,the lady rose and pressed the bell to indicate that she wanted to alight.That was a good deed that I saw on my way to school.
I have checked my work: Firstly for content , secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling..
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