1C Journal Entries
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posted by AL @ 1:49 PM
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Dear Diary,
today was just perfect!During English lesson,my teacher complimented me on my drawings of hybrid creatures in front of the whole class.Then,during recces, they served two of my favourite food,pizza and fried chicken.Yum! But the best of all,I gained a new classmate.He is a transfer student from France!
His accent is so cute!He has lovely blue eyes and brown hair.The teacher told him to choose a seat.There were many unoccupied seats.Including the one next to me.He looked around and walked up to the seat next to me!Can you believe it?He wanted to sit next to me!
The next thing I knew, he kissed my hand!I felt that I could faint right there and then. He introduced himself as Mike.
During recces,he asked me to show him around the school.I told him I would be more than happy.
After school,he walked me home!Was'nt that sweet of him?Tomorrow,Mike is going to school with me!I can't wait for another day with Mike!
Lotsa love,Erra
DEAR DIARY,
Today is an embarrassing day of my life. Do you know why? Here’s the answer. It all happened when I started queuing for my recess…..
When I queue at most favourite stall, when I was almost getting my food, I had already paid my food, a boy suddenly rushes and of course, he banged into me. (I do not know he was purposely banged into me or not) My food was spilled on my school uniform and after he had banged into me, he quickly, ran away afraid of being punished by the discipline master. I was too startled to do anything. When I had recovered my senses, I was embarrassed. , My cheek was so red that it was like a fresh apple, because everybody’s, in the canteen, eyesight was on me! I quickly ran out of the canteen and went to the restroom to have a change of my clothes. When I came out of the restroom, the bell had already struck, and everybody had gone to their own classroom, I was the only one left in the canteen! When I was at the class, the teacher was starting his lesson. The teacher reprimanded me for being late. I had tried to prove mine right, but the teacher said that it was all an excuse. I guess that I had to be careful next time!
Dear diary,
Today was a weary and wretched day for me! During English lesson, we were told to colour our hybrid animals and locate the worksheet in the English file (orange). Recess time, I discovered that I forgotten to bring my money! What a rotten luck! In the end, I have to borrow some cash from my friends .Actually, my choir teacher, Mr Ho notify the choir members that we have extra practise at 2.30p.m. As the choir practise clash with CCM lesson, I cannot attend the CCM. Ferranti and I are in the same unit (auto 1). Sadly, she had forgotten to bring her music notes, so I have to accompany her home. When we reached school, we were late for about seven minutes! Will she scold us? Then, we learned that the practise was being cancelled! NO!!! Did I attend the CCM? Yes!!! I’m so eager to learn Malay language! At the end of the day, I thought to myself “Hope that there will not be another day like this!”
Haziq Ariffin (23) Class: 1C
Intereresting entry 1
Dear diary,
today is a special day because I had obtained a super power. How did I obtain the super power? This was what happened.
The school bell rang at 1.25pm.All of the students at my school, including me,
got out from the school. As I was walking toward my house, I saw an old lady
carrying plastic bags containing groceries. She seemed to have trouble carrying the plastic
bags. I walked towards her and asked for her address. I helped her to carry the plastic bags
until we arrived at her house . She thanked me. I went back home.
At home I took a nap. I dreamt that the old lady rewarded me with a super power for helping her carrying the plastic bags. She told me that I with that super power, I could
carry things which was as heavy as an elephant with my index finger, I could fly like superman and heal any injuries by just touching it.
I woke up when I heard an ear-piercing scream. I went to the kitchen and saw my mother’s index finger bleeding. I asked her what had happened and she told me that she had accidentally cut her finger with a knife. I touched her finger and the cut on her finger disappeared. It was true that I had obtained a super power. Tomorrow, I am going to School by flying like superman.
Declaration: I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling BEFORE posting it"
Nuril’s.
Dear Hannah (Diary),
I Just Cannot Seem To Understand What Is The Reason Behind People Changing Themselves For Their Friends. Its Totally Gross Especially When People Like You For Who You Really Are And Not Who You ‘Pretend’ To Be. Its Also Outrageously Horrible Especially When You Suck At being The New You. Anw, This Is Just A Remark About Someone. No Need To Care Who! That’s All Folks, So Long.
NURIL!
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Dear diary,
Today was just another ordinary day to school. As usual I woke up at about 6.30a.m to prepare myself to go to school. But I had a habit of lying on bed for a few minutes before I get up. By the time I woke up off it was already 6.45a.m. I had no time to eat my breakfast as I had to reach school by 7.25. If i don leave my house by 7.00, I might be late for school. Without having any food or milk, I carry an empty stomach to the bus stop. When i reach the bus stop, my stomach was grumbling.
I waited for bus 87 for about a few minutes before I board the bus. By the time I reached school it was already 7.15a.m and I was time for school. I had no time to go to the canteen to look for food. I had no choice but to wait for my recess which is at 10.00a.m. At 7.25, it was time to sing the national athenm and said the pledge.
At 10a.m it was time for recess. As I was hungry i quickly rush down to the canteen to buy my food.
After school, I had to stay back for conversational malay which ended at 3.30p.m. By the timr i reach home it was already 4.10p.m and I very tired.
Declaration: I have checked my work for four times, firstly the content, secondly for vocabulary, thidly for grammar and lastly for spelling.
word count-224 word excluding the last paragraph
Haikel Azizie (22) 1C
Today I went home at three forty-five p.m because I had CCM. I took bus number fifteen just now. I reach home about five p.m. Then, at home, I watched television. Then, now doing English journal. Later, I’m going to sleep. I’m out of words. I’m off.
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Dear Diary,
Today was just perfect! During English lesson, my teacher complimented me on my drawings of hybrid creatures in front of the whole class. Then, during recess, they served two of my favorite food, pizza and fried chicken. Yummy! But the best of all, I gained a new classmate. He is a transfer student from France!
His accent is so cute! He has lovely blue eyes and straight brown hair. The teacher told him to choose a seat. There were many unoccupied seats. Including the one next to me. He looked around and walked up to the seat next to me! Can you believe it? He wanted to sit next to me!
The next thing I knew, he kissed my hand! I felt that I could faint right there and then. He introduced himself as Mike.
During recess, he asked me to show him around the school. I told him I would be more than happy.
After school, he walked me home! Wasn’t that sweet of him? Tomorrow, Mike is going to school with me! I can't wait for another day with Mike!
Lotsa love, Erra
There are 189 words.This is version 1.1. Nurul Erra from 1c.I have checked my work 4x firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling,SIR!
Dear Diary,
Today was Thursday; it rained in the morning so there was no assembly. Sang National Song and Mr Liew ask me to sit behind of the class. After that got English lesson, got scolded by Sir for not bring English file. After recess got Chinese which i hate, at 11.30 is Science. Supposedly have Science test and it was changed to Friday. After Science I had boring geography. After geography I had CCM .Reached home at 4.40 and had Maths tuition at 5 till 6.30.After Maths tuition must study for the Science test for tomorrow.
Kim Hyuk(25) 1C
Dear. Kim (Diary)
Maybe you also know about it. I had lost my ipod a week ago. I was very upset and tried to find it, but I could not. I was scolded by my mother. I liked my ipod so much. It was a very important thing to me. I had four thousand songs and twenty movies in it. There were even my Korean friends' picture. It was not just ordinary ipod. It was my precious memory. I was so upset that I lost my ipod
Today, I saw one of my classmates brought a ipod. She had wanted to have a ipod. During recess, she asked her friend about how to use the ipod, so I approached her to help as I know well about ipod. When I asked if I could help her, she was surprised and refused my help. She looked suspicious.
To go to the IT Resource room for Geography lesson, I took my books and belongings. When I passed her seat, I saw her ipod on the chair. It was too familiar with me. I got it and looked closely at it. There was a groove which was same as my ipod. I turned on it. There was nothing in the music menu, but the movies I saved were still there. Suddenly the girl came in.
"What are you doing?"she shouted
"If you tell the truth and apologize for what you did, I will accept your apology, but if you lie, I will tell the teacher about it," I said quietly.
"What are you saying about? I cannot understand what you are saying,"she said.
"How can you explain these movie files that I've downloaded for five months?"I asked.
"Those movies are all I have downloaded"she answered.
I was very angry, as she behaved without turning a hair. I just came out of the classroom and headed to IT Resource room for a next lesson.
How could she behave like that? If I were her, I would apologize willingly. It is a matter of course. I don't know how to solve this problem. Kim! Help me!
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Hi Mr lau!!!I am Jody!!!I am going to tell you about my sadness and happiness!!!I will tell u about my sadness first...On the 12 April 2008,my best friend,Abinaya,went back to India to study and about 1 year then she come back and visit us!!! On that day,my friends and teachers went to the Airport to send her off...Before she checked in,our teachers brought us to the nearby resturant to eat!!! After a while,her mother came to the resturant and tell my friends that she had to checked in already...Upon hearing that,my friends and i started to cry..:'( I was very sad...I quickly ran her and hugged her!!!
Then,she went in...i kept on crying and crying...non-stop!!!Then one of my teacher comforted me...then i finally stop crying..that the end of my sadness!!! Now i am going to tell u my happiness...On the 19 dec 2008,My friend and i went to Fahrenheit concert!!! It was so fun!!!we got the tickets from my mother's friend.She gave it to us!!!The Fahrenheit were so handsome,I love them!!! They sang alot of songs,i love their songs n costumes,so nice!!!Example:got pilot suite,dancing suite...Ti amo,ai dao...The concert lasted 3 hour!!! I enjoyed it alot...I never regret going althought it ends at 11 plus at night and we still missed the last bus...my friend's father had to come and picked us from the indoor stadium......It was the happiest day of my life.........thats the end of my story!!!! from 1C o7 Jodylim
I have checked my work 4x 1st for content,grammar,vocabulary and spelling.
(270 words)
Journal
Lek Wan Qing (5)
Dear journal,
Tomorrow will be Valentine's Day and maybe I will not be gifting anyone. School was quite bored, but after Mr Lau showed us a video clip, it made us all awake! It was " American's Funniest Home Video ".
Its all about cats. There was one of the part where two cats were playing " hide and seek ". They hid behind a corner of a cupboard. Slowly, both cats walked towards each other without knowing. Once they saw each other, one of the cats jumped as it was being frightened. Everyone was laughing like mad. Haikel, one of my classmate, was laughing on the floor, rolling here and there and he almost tripped.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E6h1KsWNU-A, this is the website to the video, those in 1C, if you want to watch it again, just copy and paste the website. 0.36 is the part where I was laughing like mad.
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Lim Wan Sin (8) Class 1C Version 1.1
Dear diary,
Today was a weary and wretched day for me! During English lesson, we were told to colour our hybrid animals and locate the worksheet in the English file (orange). Recess time, I discovered that I forgotten to bring my money! What a rotten luck! In the end, I have to borrow some cash from my friends .Actually, my choir teacher, Mr. Ho notify the choir members that we have extra practice at 2.30p.m. As the choir practice clash with CCM lesson, I cannot attend the CCM. Ferranti and I are in the same unit (Alto 1). Sadly, she had forgotten to bring her music notes, so I have to accompany her home.
When we reached school, we were late for about seven minutes! Will she scold us? Then, we learned that the practice was being cancelled! NO!!! Did I attend the CCM? Yes!!! I’m so eager to learn Malay language! At the end of the day, I thought to myself “Hope that there will not be another day like this!”
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Carolyn Teo (17) Class 1C Version 1.1 (Journal)
Dear dairy,
Today is so exhausting! My current CCA is ‘Choir’ but I don’t feel like attending the lessons as it ends very late and affects the time for my homework and tests. I always wanted to join badminton right from the start. When they asked me to choose all my eight choices, I immediately put a ‘1’ next to the badminton section and choir as my second. Instead, they gave me a CCA that I have tried before when I was in primary school.
When I heard that there was another audition, I was amused as they needed only 15 players but ended up with 6. My choir practice is on every Wednesday and Friday from 3.30 pm to 6pm and the auditions were at 3.30pm on Friday. By that time, I knew I had to skip choir.
The badminton practice turned out well as the teacher asked for my name. I really hoped I can get into badminton but I will be a dead cow when it ends every lesson!
Declaration: I have checked my work four times, firstly for content, secondly for vocabulary, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling, SIR!!!
(172 words)
Amin (20) 1C
Dear Diary,
Yesterday was the most tiring day of my life. I was waiting for my grandmother returning from Pulau Ubin. My mother instructed me to show her around when she came to Singapore.
I was sitting patiently at the corridor of my house. Suddenly my beloved grandmother arrived. She dashed to me and hugged me tightly. I cannot breath. Then she pulled my cheeks wide.
‘You look so cute!’ she gave a wide smile.
I carried her bag inside and put them on the shelves. She was carrying her own shiny purse. It was so thick; I wondered what’s inside. When she entered the house she started to nag. She saw things not arranged properly and the house was in a mess. My house was like a rubbish bin.
She was walking to the kitchen and she tripped and fell over a banana skin. It was the banana I had eaten and dispersed it on the floor. When she was lying on the floor, her lengthy skirt rise up to her knee. The funny part was her leg was so hairy like an ‘Orang Utan’. She scolded me and I was punished. I must clean the whole house and I could not go out.
205 words
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Secondly, for vocabulary.
Thirdly, for grammar.
Lastly for spelling.
Thanks Sir.
Hi Mr Alvin Lau a.k.a Sir
"What an irksome girl!"
I know this 'irksome' girl named Chali (not her real name). She irritates me very much and I was really angry towards her and then I look at her face and said, "Stop irritating me and for your information you act as if you are a booby!" after saying that, she laugh. I look at her face for the last time, and I walked away. When I asked her not to touch my things, she will touch it many times and she thought that it was very funny. One day she came to me and irritates me again, I'am really frusfrated with her and I shout right onto her face"Stay out of my way and stop disturbing me! " She was about to cry and I left her alone. Who can stand with her attitude? The next day, she came to me and appologise but I ignore her instead because I want her to feel how I felt being irritated. On that day she really learnt her lesson and she did not do it again. ~THE END~ Journal(Nurul Khairina) 13 1c
Dear Diary, I don't know why I'm upset over the result I've gotten for the Chinese test, although I thought Chinese weren't important at all.
"What?! Twenty one marks for your Chinese test? Don't try to be funny! What's with you?" My Dad was extremely mad with my results. I've already predicted that this would happen. He mentioned the results I've gotten for the past few years, being the top in class for Chinese and sometimes in the whole level without fail, I started to cry. I did not know what was wrong with me as well.
I got an A for Chinese in PSLE, and as a result, I gave up on it. I thought I'd get an A* instead. How could it be possible? Is it because I'm too proud? Far too proud about getting the highest in Chinese in the whole class? I looked down on those who did not excel well in the past. I shouldn't have acted in that way. I finally had a taste of how they felt being humiliated and insulted at in the past.
This is seriously a lesson learnt, I've learnt not to be proud. And I shouldn't even be proud in the first place as well.
206 words in all.
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Dear Diary,
Today was the most unlucky day for me I was accompanying my mother to the wet market, when I saw a fishmonger as I was thinking about how I fared for my exams the day before, I was lost in my thoughts that I did not notice the fishmonger unloading crates of slimy fish so as I was walking, I accidentally stepped on a fish and slipped and fell, I fell flat on the ground and I reeked of fish, and I even got scolded by that fishmonger for dirtying his fishes and demanded compensation ,my mother saw me fall, she asked me if I was alright so I said I was alright she also paid the fishmonger and that was such a unlucky day for me and when I went back she dressed my wounds and after that also reprimanded me for being so careless and that she had to use her money. (156)words
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Version: 1.0
Dear Diary,
Today had been the most embarrassing day for me! It was recess time at that moment and it had just stop raining so the grass were all wet, muddy and dirty. After being dismiss from class, I ran strait to the canteen to buy my food as I was extremely starving. On the way when I was running, I did not see where I was going and accidentally slipped and fell on a puddle of mud! I felt so embarrassed as everyone was looking at me! The worst thing of all was I had to wear the dirty clothes until school ended!
Love,
Syed
Version: 1.1
Dear Diary,
Today, I managed to escape from being punished. Everyone that failed the mathematics test had to sit on the floor .Eventually, I failed! I scored five over sixteen and luckily teacher did not call me to sit on the floor or he forgotten to tell me but to me I felt extremely lucky as I hate sitting on the floor. I pretended as if I passed for the whole of the mathematics period
Love,
Syed
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Dear Jess(Diary),
Yesterday morning, I took bus 87 to school and when I reached the bus stop at around 7p.m I saw my friend Min Yi. She was waiting for Minmin.
I sat down with her and we played my PSP. It was until 7.20p.m,then Minmin came with her friend. By the time we went in, the quadrangle is almost full but we reached in the nick of time.
I brought ‘eclipse’, one of the twilight series to school today. Though quite heavy, I do not mind as the story is so interesting!
I read ‘Twilight’ and ‘New Moon’. The story carries on till ‘Breaking Dawn’, which is the last book.
I owned ‘New Moon’ and ‘eclipse’. I borrowed ‘Twilight’ from Clarissa, my classmate.
Yesterday was my sister’s birthday. My family were not celebrating as my sis has girl guides till very late. I wonder if she would be sabotaged? Hope not as she would be very embarrassed in the bus she was taking home.
Tomorrow is Valentine’s Day. I am going out! But not with a valentine! I do not even have one. Ha-ha.
I have girl’s brigade in the morning tomorrow (sigh). I need to reach school by 8a.m. Maybe going out after GB. A very big MAYBE. Goodbye.
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Hi sir, I am Valerie Chua from 1C (18) this is my journal entry.
Dear diary,
Today was simply not my day. Everything was right until Science lesson that morning. We were told to hand in our homework. To my horror, I could not find it in my schoolbag. I must have forgotten to put it in my bag the night before. The teacher was furious as there were others who failed to hand in the work. She kept us in during recess to do the exercise.
I had something to look forward to in the evening. My father had promised to take the family out for dinner. But when dinnertime came, there were still no signs of my father. Instead we received a call from him to say that he could not make it as he was still at a meeting. I was terribly disappointed. I had fervently hoped to end the day well.
Hi Mr. Lau! I am Jody! I am going to tell you about my sadness and happiness! I will tell u about my sadness first. On the 12 April 2008, my best friend, Abinaya, went back to India to study and about one year then she come back and visit us! On that day, my friends and teachers went to the Airport to send her off. Before she checked in, our teachers brought us to the nearby restaurant to eat! After a while, her mother came to the resturant and tells my friends that she had to check in already. Upon hearing that, my friends and I started to cry :'( I was very sad. I quickly ran to her and hugged her!
Then, she went in. I kept on crying and crying.(non-stop)!Then one of my teachers comforted me...then I finally stop crying. That the end of my sadness!
Now I am going to tell you my happiness...
On the 19 December 2008, my friend and I went to Fahrenheit concert! It was so fun! We got the tickets from my mother's friend. She gave it to us! The Fahrenheit guys were so handsome, I love them so much! They sang a lot of songs; I love their songs n costumes, so nice! Example: They got aeroplane suite, dancing suite...Ti Amo, Ai Dao...The concert lasted 3 hour! I enjoyed it a lot...I never regret going although it ends at 11 plus at night and we still missed the last bus, my friend's father had to come and picked us from the indoor stadium’s was the happiest day of my life. That’s the end of my story!
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From Jody Lim 1C (06)
I have checked my work 4 times, firstly for content, secondly for grammar, thirdly for vocabulary, lastly for spelling.
Dear Diary,
Today was Monday. During English lessons, I felt the ground shaking. It seemed that no one had noticed it. I ignored it and continued studying. Suddenly an announcement reported that there was a major earthquake around my school’s area. Everybody panicked; I heard screams all around the school. The whole school was in a mess. All of a sudden, the ground shook. Everybody evacuated from the school, my English teacher was injured from the stampede. He was lying on the floor groaning in pain. No one seemed to care, including me. When everybody was out of the school, the building collapsed. All the students cheered. The next day, I read the papers and saw the headlines: ENGLISH TEACHER WAS KILLED IN THE EARTHQUAKE.I gave out a grin.
WORD COUNT:129
I have checked my work 4 times, firstly for content, secondly for grammar, thirdly for vocabulary, lastly for spelling.
Nur syafiqah(11)1C
V.1.0
Word count: 102
Dear Dairy,
Today is the most gloomy and embarrassing day for me. I failed my mathematics class test. I scored only 3 out of 16.It were atrocious. I had to sit down on the floor with my other friends copying the corrections. I knew that I had to buck up on my mathematics. I will buck up and try my best to d o the continual evaluation that is on Monday.
Yours truly,
Nur syafiqah
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Dear Diary,
Today was Monday. During English lessons, I felt the ground shaking. It seemed that no one had noticed it. I ignored it and continued studying. Suddenly an announcement reported that there was a major earthquake around my school’s area. Everybody panicked; I heard screams all around the school. The whole school was in a mess. All of a sudden, the ground shook. Everybody evacuated from the school, my English teacher was injured from the stampede. He was lying on the floor groaning in pain.
No one seemed to care, including me. When everybody was out of the school, the building collapsed. All the students cheered. The next day, I read the papers and saw the headlines: ENGLISH TEACHER WAS KILLED IN THE EARTHQUAKE.I gave out a grin.
WORDCOUNT:129
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Dear Diary,
OMG! Today was like a very frustrating day! I was having my badminton training as usual on Wednesday. Since my coach said that our junior girls' team is short of people, she needed more girls. Therefore, I told my friends to come and try out for the team.
I hated one girl so much! I did not want her to join the team. However, she somehow found out about the tryouts and came for the auditions. I was so frustrated! She always acts in front of people, is very rude and to top it all, SHE FLIRTS WITH GUYS! She even posted bad things about my friend on her blog! I HATE HER! I seriously cannot stand her attitude! I really wish that she were not my future classmate! Or else my life will be a hell!
Journal Entry 1
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Dear Diary,
I just returned from my MT class. I always have them every Saturday. I have been there since I was like 4 years old. Of course, when I was young, I did not think any guy was cute. I thought all guys were just losers and the world’s most irritating people ever!
Now, I do not think so anymore! In my MT school, there is a guy that I think is so adorable! He is just so CUTE, KIND, SWEET, ADORABLE AND HOT! OMG! HAHA! (: He is secondary 4 and his class has the same recess as my class. To my surprise, I saw him and my brother talking and immediately I knew that he and my brother ARE FRIENDS! I found out from my brother that he also knows my cousin brother! OMG! Moreover, if my brother ever finds out I have a crush on him, I WILL BE DEAD! I THINK MY BROTHER ALREADY SUSPECTS I LIKE HIM! WHAT DO I DO??!!!!!
Journal Entry 2
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Dear diary,
This afternoon I felt asleep when I was watching a boring movie, I dreamt that I was travelling on a ship to newfound land. The captain named Shade. He was a very kind captain he treats his teammates with respect and kindness. As I was new around this place, I asked the captain to help me show around this place. I accidentally called the captain by his real name and everyone was shocked to hear me said that. Shade’ expression never change to everyone surprise. He looked at me and said that I look new around here. Then he asked one of his mates named cookies to show me around. Then after showing me around he told me that was very brave to called the captain by his real name. It was because first-timers usually get tongue-tied easily until they can say only one word that is captain.
After that conversation, it was dinner time so all the crewmates when to the pantry to eat. I had was the cook specials, shark fin soup. They caught the shark earlier this afternoon, which I was busy with cookies showing me around the place. They didn’t want to waste the shark so they used it for dinner. After that they did a toast to welcome me aboard.
I went to bed and slept. I when back to reality. My younger sister woke me up. She say I have a guest waiting. She said that he was a beautiful kid. I went to the door and I saw the same boy that looked exactly alike. He says I am the new next door neighbor. I came to return back the ladder that the old neighbor forgot to return. There was my family name on the ladder written in big, bold letters. I said thank you and I close the door. What a day it was.
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clarissa hui
1 C
David Lwin (26) Class 1C Version 1.1 (Journal)
In a fresh early morning I was awake by the notice of TV and woke up to find out what’s on the TV , Its was Channel News Asia and I heard that on year, 2012, its the end of world. I thought I was dreaming and I gave a slap on my face but it wasn't a dream, I heard there will be lots of natural disasters starting from year 2011 until year 2014 and many livings things will die like what happened before dinosaurs extinct but I just ignored the news, 2 years have passed so fast and there was earthquakes in China and Japan Tornados in America and Canada, Tsunami in India and Indonesia.
More then MILLION OF PEOPLE DIED. The whole world was in chaos. I was so sad and I was looking at the stars and saw a shooting star and more and more shooting stars appeared in the skis and hit the earth and made a big explosion and shakings. Everyone was running everywhere, and shouting "Space Rocks!"
When everything ended I was sobbing lonely; I stopped when I heard someone calling for help. I run to the voice and saw a boy with bloods suddenly I heard my Alarm bell and it was a relief I was just dreaming!
Hi sir! I wrote about (258 words)
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Dear diary,
today is an embarrassing day of my life. Do you know why? Here’s the answer. It all happened when I started queuing for my recess…..
When I queue at most favorite stall, when I was almost getting my food, I had already paid my food, a boy suddenly rushes and of course, he banged into me. (I do not know he was purposely banged into me or not) My food was spilled on my school uniform and after he had banged into me, he quickly, ran away afraid of being punished by the discipline master. I was too startled to do anything. When I had recovered my senses, I was embarrassed. , My cheek was so red that it was like a fresh apple, because everybody’s, in the canteen, eyesight was on me! I quickly ran out of the canteen and went to the restroom to have a change of my clothes. When I came out of the restroom, the bell had already struck, and everybody had gone to their own classroom, I was the only one left in the canteen! When I was at the class, the teacher was starting his lesson. The teacher reprimanded me for being late. I had tried to prove my right, but the teacher said that it was all an excuse. I guess that I had to be careful next time!
Goh Cheng Hong(21) 1C
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" Unlucky day? "
This morning, I woke up early and that was why I came to school so early. I walking on the path to school, suddenly I heard someone ringing a bell, i turned around and saw a man cycling on a bike, ringing the bell. I was empty minded and do not know what to do. When it wan about to bang onto me the man tripped on a small rock and fell off the bike. I did not knew what to do so I ran away to school. After the 5 minutes walked, I need to walk through some buildings to reached school. I was walking through the building and I saw some pupils from our school gambling. I went to be a busybody and I shouted "WA" as the cards on one of them hands was good. Suddenly, another pupil had win, the pupil that i had saw his card stand up. The pupil wanted to punched me but I dodged and ran away and he accidentally punched a teacher who was about to scolded them. I was glad that I had ran away before the teacher came. In school, I was talking to my friend and he accidentally step on his shoelaces and fell. After school, when we were about to go back, we were on duty to closed the window, we were talking away as he accidentally crushed his finger.
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dear diary,
It seems like yesterday when Yuki sent me his last text message...and it's like the day before yesterday when we known each other as siblings.But in real life...two years has past...
If I could recall the painful memories that I shared with Yuki started since kindergarten.we were as tight as actually siblings.he was a smart and adventerous boy when I met him but we got separated after accepted the invitation...He may look like a boy with a very bright future compared to other children at the age of 5 but his life ended at the age of 12.he once told me that one day,he would want to travel out of space..to land on the moon and actually feel the zero gravity freedom.Yuki's father died when he was in space and that was when Yuki was around 6 years old.the day of the funeral was a painful memory and vividly remained in Yuki's mind..then,he's chance arrived to travel in space right after he completed his primary5 exams.A friend of Yuki's father wanted to take in Yuki to be his student and he reasoned with Yuki that he would travel to space with him.the conversation was private so I was not sure what Yuki replied the man.when I asked Yuki after school about the coversation,he simply smiled and change the subject.the end of our last year as 11 years old has ended but Yuki and I would always meet up during the holidays and tell each other news.it was a really very beautiful December wednesday afternoon in the Bugis food court when Yuki brought up the coversation of space:
"I heard that Pluto is no longer a planet."
"that was news long long ago!Did you just know that news?!i'm surprised!you are suppose to be smarter than me when it comes to the solar systems!"
"that was just a passing remark,since if i were to talk about all the nerdy things about the solar systems,you would probably die of boredom!"
"you got a point there!"
"but i was thinking,how does it feels to be out in space?in that zero gravity freedom.."
"why are you saying that now?"
"because....i'm going to travel out to the space base tomorrow..."
Those words ripped my heart apart immediately after the words rang through my ears.i dropped the metal spoon i was using to scoop up the tea in the cup and held back my tears.Yuki knew that i was going to burst into tears and he smiled and changed the subject.
"but hey,I will come back once in a while to visit you,oh come on,you don't have to cry!we can still contact each other through text message,right?"
Those words comforted me and I tried to put up a front.the only thought I was thinking is that I could do all the things with Yuki on Earth before he heads out to outer space.We went to the arcade it Pasir Ris,walked down the paths in Bugis street,and even went to the zoo and it burnt a hole in my pocket the entire day but it was worth it because Yuki was laughing and smiling through out the whole day on Earth for the last time.That next day I did not get to see Yuki off,not because I woke up late..I woke up and 5.30am in the morning and headed to Yuki's house but when I did,Yuki had already left.there was no way I could find him.He was obviously not at the airport but I still went there to check and I left my hand phone at home.I burst into tears and leaned on the wall of the airport.I was not going to see Yuki ever again.
Upon reaching home with my red teary eyes due to crying,my hand phone had a message and it was from Yuki.
'sorry for not telling you that I'm leaving at 3am in the morning for I did not have d heart 2 c u cry bcos of mi.bt dun worry for I will still contact u always.now I am in a spaceship n it's really large n cool.I could feel the butterflies in my stomach fluttering around.hope tat our messages culd still keep in contact wth d things that r happening in space n Earth.'
bursted into tears once more..it feels as though I was losing my family member.I replied back that I would keep in touch with him as well and the messages stopped coming after that.I did not know why but I waited for a year to hear news again.i sulked at my bed one afternoon after school,holding onto my nokia mobile phone and hoping to hear the familiar sound of message recieved.many thoughts went through my mind as i closed my eyes.why was i waiting for Yuki?he probably have forgotten me,his one best friend?could he had made another close friend other than me?why was i waiting for?he had not replied me for 365 plus a quarter year...but i could not think of such negative thoughts.i started to reason with myself.how could anyone forget his own family member?that would be the most stupid thing ever heard!yuki has a wonderful memory and has a big brain.no wonder so many girls drool over him accept me cause we are siblings and i don't really like charming guys like him.but then again....he must have fallen for a girl in his space school...I shook my head vigorously and headed for the kitchen for a glass of water.It was the beginning of primary 6 and I missed Yuki for he will not be there for me when I need his help.I guess I had to rely on myself.within a blink of an eye,the PSLE came and gone and I did not do as well as I should have.I scored 202 and got into my last choice:BEDOK NORTH SECONDARY SCHOOL..Not that I do not like the school...it's just that what matters most is the results obtained in the secondary school,that's all.Looking at my marks,I heaved a sigh of relief as at least I got into a secondary school..but how was Yuki doing?is he passing his PSLE with flying colours?Does he even miss me?Maybe...I was being a fool to actually wait for the text message that probably would not come ever again...wasting my time waiting for him other than mixing around with the people around me...seems rather waste of time....so...i have decided...not to wait for him any longer...and come back to the things that actually is taking place in the real life...
The 12 year-old life ended and I was moving to the life as a 13 year old away from my friends at bukit batok and blending into my hometown bedok.Things was starting to look up and I made friends at the first week of school.slowly,I started to forget about Yuki but this unfortunate thing happened....my new friends and I was taking a bus back and I heard my phone ring and took it out of my pouch.It was from my father and he called to ask where I am.After exchanging some words,I hung up the phone and boarded the bus.It was a rather long ride to me as I could not wait to get home and turn on the computer switch.When I got to the door of my house,my phone rang again and it was a text message.It was from my friend and she told me that I left something in her bag and warned me not to do it again.I texted okay and placed it back into my pouch once more when I took off my shoes.As always,my aftehr would nag at me and I would head for the room.Throwing myself on the soft bed,I thought about what happened in class that day until my phone recieved a message and I opened the message.Expecting it from my friend whom I always chat with through text messages,my eyes widened in surprise as tears dripped from my eyes to the bed as I saw that the person who texted me was..Yuki.
'hey esther,how hav u been doin?sry i did nt sms u earlier cos my phone had problem starting n my teacher caught mi red handed fr using d fone along d corridor n took it away fr safe kping fr 3 wks.heh,he mus b insan.life in d sch ws rather fine bt different frm last yr.i miss everyone,specialy u.sry fr nt textin u fr a yr.uncle jerry threw it onto d flr n it broke in2 pices.bt i stil gt it fixed..by d time tis mess. reach u..i probably b dead...im nw in outerspace wth zero grav. lyk i wanted. but d oxygen tank broke a hole n im trying my breath 2 keep alive fr a few min. 2 send u tis mess.i sry..esther..fr leaving u in a lurch n heading out 2 follow my dream..as u noe,im a rather fast wth d hands so i stil can say more!lol.how was ur score fr psle?i bet u gt mre than 200.as fr mi,i gt 260.d second highest.i noe u must hav waited fr a yr fr me..n that amount of time is unplacable.heh..im jus goin 2 b lyk my dad..floatin in space witout oxygen...bfor i die,esther..pls dun cry every now n then..be strong n dun worry,im always wth ya.when u hav problems,try n face them as far as u can n dun ever give up.i made wonderful frens at tis sch n i hope tat u wuld make some 2..i culd feel my lungs bursting..good..bye..'
I collasped onto the bed and sobbed.the tears was uncontrollable.it kept on flowing down and wetting the bed.I wiped my tears but it just kept on flowing.My best friend was gone...and I did not see him for a year or so....and now..I will never get to see him ever again in person and talk to him like the way I always did.his sense of humour,laughter and voice will no longer be heard until the end of time..the time we spent with each other will never come back again..how I wished that he had not accepted that invitation and he probably would not have died in a horrible death and he would not have left me...but that was just me being selfish...I hugged the pillow and continued to cry until I fell asleep due to lack of tears in my eyes...time cannot be turned back...I felt guilty..for actually trying to forget him..and he did not even forget me...it is time....to move on...
signed,
esther
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OI CHIBAI KIA! U NO FATHER NO MOTHER GO GEYLANG FIND A CHICK BE UR MOTHER AND GO CHANGI FIND A GIGOLO BE UR FATHER! POOR YOU! FUCK YOU NOOB!
YOU HAVE NO DICK!! CHAO CHI BAI! KANINABU LA! BUAY SONG LAI! YOU DIE, YOUR WHOLE FAMILY DIE, YOUR WHOLE GENERATION DIE! FUCK OFF YOU NOOB! DICK LESS! NGA LO MATHER BITCH!!!!!!! YOU SUCK ALOT! ASSSSHOLE! CHAO CHIBAI SEE THIS COMMENT BUAY SONG ISSIT ?! PLS DON KAO BEI KAO BU LA NEWB GANGSTER IS LIKE TAT NOOB! YOU WATCH OUT~! fkER
Dearest Shawn,
I see much more effort here in your cursing than I've ever seen in class or in the last six weeks.
You will be referred to the relevant authorities for action.
Please submit the apology that you agreed to post earlier today.
Dear All,
Please correct the mistakes identified in class earlier today.
I have identified the students who need to edit and refine their writing and identified exactly what they have to do in class.
I appreciate the efforts of those who have carefully crafted and checked their work.
Thank you.
Nur Syafiqah(10)1C
Dear Diary,
Today is a different day ever. The bell rang and it was time to go for recess. My friends and I went out of the classroom and went out for recess. Then, we queued for food. Suddenly, as I was queuing my food, some girls shouted .I saw a greenish color lizard that was coming towards the stall where me and another students went to queue the for food. Everyone started banging into each other, as they were scared of the lizard. Then, a few students who were queuing in front of me ran to the back of the queue and there were no people queuing in front of me. So, I took the chance to buy my food quickly. Then,after buying, the lizard was coming towards me and I walked quickly .The lizard then went to another direction.Phew!I felt so lucky!
Later today, I went to Yahoo.com to check on the news.I just want to tell you about the finance news. China shares fall back on profit-taking.The economy is now very bad. Everone in the world is affected by the economic recession . Some companies that cannot afford to pay the employees’s salary and sadly, employees are retrenched and they are jobless.A lot of investers who invested lost their money into stocks and shares .I felt very sorry for them.
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Hi hi!This is Tham Kunyuan from 1C submitting his journal entry!Okay here it goes^-^ .
Dear Diary,
Today, I re-watched one whole series as I had nothing to do and the series was very short. It was about 5 episodes which totals up to 1hour and 40 minutes. Finally I found a new anime to watch. The title is “Otome Wa Boku Ni Koishiteru”(bleh I’m not going to tell you what it is about and even if I wanted to I couldn’t because I haven’t finished the series^_^)I’ll add the introduction to my V1.3 of my Personal Recount so look forward to it.
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Dearest Mr Lau,
I am sorry for my rude journal entry.My journal entry was not refering to you but was refering to my primary school english teacher.However if you were offened by my essay,I am deeply sorry.
Dear Diary,
Today was Monday. During Chinese lessons, I felt the ground shaking. It seemed that no one had noticed it. I ignored it and continued studying. I felt the ground shook again, but no one seem to notice it. Suddenly an announcement reported that there was a major earthquake around my school’s area. Everybody panicked; I heard girls screaming all around the school. The whole school was in a mess. All of a sudden, the ground shook. Everybody was frightened. My Chinese teacher asked us to calm down. Everybody evacuated from the school, my friend Diego, was hurt by the stampede and was seriously injured. No one seemed to care about him. I quickly ran to towards him and helped him up. He had fractured his right leg! He was groaning in pain, rolling on his tummy. He cursed Spanish vulgarities. Tears ran down his cheeks. I supported him as we walked to the school field to assemble. After a few moments, the ground shook tremendously and the whole school collapsed. All the students cheered. It was a memorable moment. The next morning I woke up and I read the Straits Times, I saw the headlines: SPANISH KID WAS SAVED BY A CLASSMATE JUST BEFORE THE SCHOOL COLLAPSED.I smile contently. There was no school for a month as it was under repairing. After a week, when I was checking my mail-box, I received a letter from Diego.
It read:
Dearest Shawn,
While the school is under repairing, I went back to Spain and shared my earthquake experience with my family and friends at Spain. My parents and I are greatly in debt to you. I thank you for saving my life. I will return to Singapore when our school has finished repairing.
Your friend,
Diego
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Hi sir! I wrote about (258 words)
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Dear diary
today is an embarrassing day of my life. Do you know why? Here’s the answer. It all happened when I started queuing for my recess…..
When I queue at most favorite stall, when I was almost getting my food, I had already paid my food, a boy suddenly rushes and of course, he banged into me. (I do not know he was purposely banged into me or not) My food was spilled on my school uniform and after he had banged into me, he quickly, ran away afraid of being punished by the discipline master. I was too startled to do anything. When I had recovered my senses, I was embarrassed. , My cheek was so red that it was like a fresh apple, because everybody’s, in the canteen, eyesight was on me! I quickly ran out of the canteen and went to the restroom to have a change of my clothes. When I came out of the restroom, the bell had already struck, and everybody had gone to their own classroom, I was the only one left in the canteen! When I was at the class, the teacher was starting his lesson. The teacher reprimanded me for being late. I had tried to prove my right, but the teacher said that it was all an excuse. I guess that I had to be careful next time!
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Love,
Ken chan.
Hi sir, I wrote about (320) words.
This one of my another diary.
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Dear diary,
This is the luckiest day of my life I ever had. Do you know why? Here’s the answer. It all happened when I started to fail my examination. One, special, day, when I received my results for my mother tongue. I was shocked! I get 32/100! I actually failed! I almost fainted.
My mother tongue language was perfect! I do not believe it! But I had to admit that my mother tongue language had lousy. My teacher scolded me for failing the exams. I was the only who failed! I was embarrassed when my friends me what do get for my exams. When I got home, I told my parents that I got 32/100 for my exams. My mother broke into tears when I got that kind of results. They were disappointed over my results. I do not have expectations of myself where I wanted to get at least 80 for my exams.
I do not cried over spilled milk, but I tried studying and concentrating what I when wrong. I studied over the past few months and finally, the final examinations had come and I was prepared for it. When I went into the examination room, I had feeling that I would score for my exams. But, of course, I was not sure about it. When the results are released, I was never been any happier when I pass with flying colors. The results were better than I had thought. I actually got 87/100! I do not believe it too myself.
I guess that studying hard is the food for good results.
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Love,
Ken chan.
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Dear diary
The first day of school, before the day i went to my friend's house ,because his house is near to the school .early in the morning, i wake up about 6am. When we went to the bus stop , we found out that the bus we wanted to take. it will only coming about 6,30am. sadly ,we can only take a taxi to the inter change. we took the same bus, my friend promise to me that the bus will reach my school . as the first day to the school , i felt so annoyed, the bus stop a few station away from my school.i have no choose can only take a taxi again.i tell the taxi driver that my school was bodek north,but he send me to bodek town .he will still no recognize his faults, says that it is gavorment's fault.it waste me 10dollars ,and i has been late for the school.
when i entrer the school, i was looking for my class.beceuse of my long hair ,i was catch by the vice princessble.they were send me to a room ,and waited for the teacher came and cutted our hair.
the first day of the school wasn't good for me.
I am Tan Ko Hui(15) from 1c.
Yesterday we had CCM (conversational Chinese and Malay). We assembled in the hall and I sat down together with Min Min, being the second from the front, as nobody wants to sit there.
There were Ken Chan, Zhi Cheng and Cheng Hong at the front. We shared jokes until we went to class. Some of the jokes are really funny and we burst into laughters.
I sat at my previous seat with Min Min and after a few minutes, we decided to move to the seat behind Ken Chan and Zhi Cheng.
We continued to share jokes when teacher is asking or reprimanding others. Ken Chan brought a joke book. It contains a lot of lame jokes but some are funny too. We shared some jokes from memory too.
But of course, we paid attention to teacher as she was teaching us. I think CCM is quite difficult but learning Malay is quite fun and it builds our knowledge. It is also quite easy to remember.
After the lesson, we promise to bring whatever joke books we have to school on the next CCM lesson. It was the most enjoyable lesson of CCM I ever had.
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Sir!This is my new journal!
Hi Mr lau!I am Jody!I am going to tell you about my sadness and happiness!I will tell u about my sadness first.On the 12 April 2008,my best friend,Abinaya,went back to India to study and about one year then she come back and visit us!On that day,my friends and teachers went to the Airport to send her off.Before she checked in,our teachers brought us to the nearby resturant to eat!After a while,her mother came to the resturant and tell my friends that she had to check in already.Upon hearing that,my friends and I started to cry:'(I was very sad.I quickly ran to her and hugged her!
Then,she went in.I kept on crying and crying.(non-stop)!Then one of my teachers comforted me...then I finally stop crying..that the end of my sadness!
Now I am going to tell you my happiness...
On the 19 dec 2008,my friend and I went to Fahrenheit concert!It was so fun!We got the tickets from my mother's friend.She gave it to us!The Fahrenheit guys were so handsome,I love them so much!They sang alot of songs,i love their songs n costumes,so nice!Example: They got areoplane suite,dancing suite...Ti amo,Ai dao...The concert lasted 3 hour!I enjoyed it alot...I never regret going althought it ends at 11 plus at night and we still missed the last bus,my friend's father had to come and picked us from the indoor stadium.t was the happiest day of my life.That's the end of my story!
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from Jody lim 1C (06)
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Lim Wan Sin (8) 1C
Interesting entry 2 (20 February)
Dear diary,
Test, test, test! Almost every day, our class has tests! I would rather my teacher gives us homework than give test! Next Monday, we will be having another Science CE. NO!!!
Right now, let’s speak to the point. These days, I begin to forget to do things that I should not forget! For example, the Science assignment given yesterday, I totally forgot about it when I reached home. I was so busy studying my Geography test! See what I mean? There is always test after test! I can’t cope with it anymore! Thinking twice, maybe I’m lacking something. That is time management! I’ve got to arrange my timetable again! There are always changes everywhere. Let’s start from Tuesday...
I have extra choir practice on Tuesday from 2.30 to 4p.m maybe. I’ve got Choir again on Wednesday and Friday from 3.30 to 6p.m.Isn’t that crazy? I can understand that SYF is round the corner but the time is simply too long! I hope the school can do some changes on that point. On Thursday, CCM is always on as usual. For long days like Wednesday and Friday, I would reach home at about 6.40p.m! Bathe, eat dinner and study... Same routine every day. My study time would be cut short so much!
Hence, time management is so important that you really need to do it!(I’m saying this to all the pupils reading my journal!)
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Goh Cheng Hong(21) 1C
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"Time traveler"
"I was inventing a time machine in my room, I use all kind of technology to made it. I finally made it, I invented a cool time traveler machine. I pressed 1942 on the machine and I went inside the machine. I was giddy and I fainted. When I wake up with a controller beside me, I saw fires and died bodies everywhere. I stand up and ran away. A man was walking toward me armed with a gun pointing at me. I quickly pressed 2009 but I was scared and this is why I pressed one more 0 that make it become 20009. I fainted again and I saw nothing except a piece of plain land. I walked to a died body and I was stunned, it was myself holding a book written "History Book" I took the book and went to the year 2009. I opened the book and read it. It was about my family generation and that is when I knew who is the boy I saw in 20009. It was my very great-great-great grand-son.There was a picture behind the book and it showed a picture of all the people from my families and we all looked the same. But why is my great-great-great grand -son holding the history book, who write the book and how did he get the book? I wondered as I did not write my name and my personal recounts in the book. Why is my name, picture and my story in the book?
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ou jianwen(30)1c
Five years ago, I was very sad when I learnt that my uncle had died at the hands of a crazy person. Here is the story......
A crazy person had lived opposite us. One day,the guy was bullying a kid of about 5 years old. The kid cried horribly. My grandfather came out of his house to investigate and chastised the man for bullying the child. The man's response was to give my grandfather an angry look.
Since that day, we heard the daily grinding of knives from his house. The nightmare arrived in the new year. New year is a happy occasion for us, not least because I get fat "hong pow" from my grandparents and relatives. Later that morning, when my uncle stepped out of the house for a smoke, the crazy man went up to him and slashed him several times on his face. My grandfather, who was at the window, immediately came to his aid, and pushed the man away. By then, my uncle had fallen to the ground. There was no taxi, my mother had no choice but to carry my uncle piggy back all the way to the hospital. That was the last I saw of my uncle......
We reported the case to the police that afteroon, and the mad man was arrested. The police later checked his house and found that the crazy man had been living alone, his family members and relatives had abandoned him because he was mentally unsound.
The man was eventually confined to the mental hospital and the house had remained vacant ever since. I went back to China last year and had the chance to take a look at the house. It had become dilapidated. Even though the man had killed my uncle, I stil felt sorry for him. His was after all, a mental case. Had his family members been more caring and sympathetic, and got him treatment, he could have made some contributions to society.
Kim Hyuk(25) 1C
Journal entry 2
Dear. Kim (Diary)
Kim! I told you that a girl in my class stole my ipod. Now, I am telling you about the happening after the day.
I was very upset and do not know how I could solve the problem. I could not sleep well, because of the problem. Next day, I went to school and tried to be close to her. I wanted her to feel guilty. I knew that it was ill-natured, but I could not think any other way to get the ipod back. When she dropped her pen down on the floor, I picked it up and gave it to her. When she could not solve a mathematical question, I helped her.
During English Language lesson, there was a group activity. I told her to do the group activity together. She approved my suggestion in her bewilderment. We were doing the group activity.
"Why do you treat me friendlily?"she suddenly asked.
"I had wanted to be your friend,"I answered.
It was true. I had wanted to be her friend. She was always cheerful, and when I was with her, I also felt cheerful. I liked her cheerfulness.
"Umm... I'm sorry,"she mumbled.
"Pardon? I could not hear you,"I said.
"I am sorry. It is my fault,"she said.
I was happy. Actually I could hear that she apologized to me.
"Here is your ipod, I'm sorry,"she said
"It's okay, thank you,"I replied.
Since then, I became her friend. We talk together, do our homework together and listen to music together with my ipod. It is a mercy that the problem solved well. I am very happy these days.
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Dear Diary,
Today was just too
embarrassing for words. As I said in my previous journal entry, I was going to school with Mike.When he appeared at my doorstep this morning,my mum invited him in as it was still early.
I was suprised to see Mike and accidentally spilled some milk on my blouse.I had to go upstairs to change my blouse. When I walked to the door, I tripped over my little brother's toy, falling flat on my face." Are you okay?" said a voice.To my horror it was Mike staring down at me. I cursed myself softly under my breath.
Luckily, nothing else happened on the way to school but, during art lesson, I was sharpening my colour pencils over the dustbin when somebody accidentally pushed me into the dustbin. The class exploded with laughter. I wanted to drown myself.
After school, I walked home with Mike. I asked him softly,
"Do you think I'm...clumsy?" He smiled. " Of course not ", he replied " I think you're funny. I like being around you. You always make me laugh." It sounded offensive at first but I realised he meant I was funny in a good way. I grinned, gazing into those big blue eyes of his.
Here I am, complaining to you about these events when there's really nothing to complain about. It's all great.
Your's truly, Erra
There are 234 words.This is Nurul Erra register no. 12. I have checked my work firstly for content, secondly for vocab, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling, SIR!
Dear diary,
On a lazy sunny late afternoon, I was in my room playing my DS. When the phone rang, I picked up the phone. I heard a familiar voice it was my father. He asked me a whole line of strange question about my Fuji fife.
Then he straight hung off the phone. I was surprise about what he ask. Later that night my father came back. I asked him why he asked those strange questions. Then he took out a case and tried to open it and could not. It looks similar to the case I have. I was surprised by a new a shiny flute.
He asked me to play it. I could not help but play and I realized I did not know the fingering. I was disappointed. The next was CCA day. I felt sleepy still. As I got to school, the teacher –in-charge is absent. He email we could get the intrument. I was excited and could not wait. Time passed so quickly and it was time to go home. It was a fun day today. I told my parents and they were proud of me. THE END
LOVE, clarissa hui :)
I – C
I have checked my work firstly for content, secondly for vocab, thirdly for grammar and lastly for spelling, SIR!
Word count is 134.
Yo Sir, I Thihk My Previous Diary Entry Is Too Short So This Is The New One :D
Dear Diary, I'm Really Happy Today As My Lovely,Stylish,Caring Mother Has Top Up My Pre-paid Card Which Has Zero Value From The Past Three Weeks,Yeah.Heh.
Anyway, I'm Really Very Grateful As, SWEET MINMIN, Had Offered To Borrow Me Her Glasses After Mine Had Been Stolen By Some Idiot.(I Suspect Someone!)
Because Right After The Next Day I Lost It, He Had A Pair Of Specs. I Have More Evidence! He Was The Person Who I Last Told Where My Glasses Are Because He Was Sitting At My Place During M.T Lesson(not anymore) And I Did Not Want Him To Break My Specs As It Was Fragile
And Also I Left In A Rush Because The Bell Had Already Rang For M.T Lesson And My Table Was Full Of My Books And my Specs So I Told Him To Help Me To Put Everything Under My Table While I Left
After That Day/Incident, I Never Saw My Specs Again.
And Besides Everything Around Me Looks So Blurry Without My Specs.Okay For Now Hannah(Diary).
SIGNED,
NURIL!
Ou Jianwen(30) version 1.3 Five years ago, I was totally devastated when I learnt that my uncle had been murdered by a maniac. This is the tragic story...
A crazy person had lived opposite us. One day,the guy was bullying a kid of about 5 years old. The kid cried horribly. My grandfather came out of his house to investigate and chastise the man for bullying the child. The man responded by giving my grandfather an angry look.
Since that day, we heard the daily grinding of knives from his house. The nightmare arrived in the new year. New year is a happy occasion for us because we can get fat "hong pow" from my grandparents and relatives.
Later that morning, when my uncle stepped out of the house for a smoke, the crazy man went up to him and slashed him several times on his face. My grandfather, who was at the window, immediately rushed to his aid and pushed the man away. By then, my uncle had fallen to the ground. There was no taxi, my mother had no choice but to carry my uncle all the way to the hospital. That was the last I saw of my uncle.
We reported the case to the police that afteroon, and the mad man was arrested. The police later checked his house and found that the crazy man had been living alone, his family members and relatives had abandoned him because he was mentally unsound.
The man was eventually admitted to the mental hospital and the house had remained vacant ever since. I went back to China last year and had the chance to take a look at the house. It had become dilapidated. Even though the man had killed my uncle, I stil felt sorry for him. His was after all, a mental case. Had his family members been more caring and sympathetic and sent him for treatment, he could have been more emotionally stable. Perhaps,he could even have contributed to society.
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